TrackStar11

All right, this is a random writing that I have come up with. Tell me what you think of it? I didn't take this seriously by the way, i just wrote stuff that just randomly came about to me.

To capture something fully is impossible. Even when you think you have it all, something new pops out from the shadows and creates a new mystery. It is best through that mysteries exist on this place. Without their presence, this breathing feels like the air. It is fresh and soothing yet invisible as natural light.

Can we fully understand these abstract thoughts? The answer is no as meaning travel in all directions. A chain of events is created and it goes on and on without no end. Following the directions will only lead into an abyss of images which no thought should approach. Determine your own path in the labyrinth.

The labyrinth is your residence and the exit will only be found when all starts to go black for you. The light can be maintained for a while but it is not eternal. When it is least expected, the light will be burned out if you waste your energy on the cobra's will. The flame will go out but have the sky smile at you when it does. There will be rough points in your existence but it is better to be a dove than a flea on this ride of the wild.

Charlie_Eleanor

The concepts here are good, but would it possible for you to show me these concepts instead of just explain or tell me about them?

Hope that makes sence. Well done though, for just a random writing.

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TrackStar11

Thanks and how do you want me to show you the concepts?

Charlie_Eleanor

Hmmm...now I didn't say I could do that, lol.

I would say write it from someone's perspective instead of just saying it:::

How could you illustrate this?

Last night I went onto my porch, wrapped my hand around the darkness, and went to sleep. The next morning I woke up and eagerly stretched out my fingertips. My palm was empty except for the morning light playing on the many lines and crevices. I remember feeling the cool night air on my skin, feeling it heat up as I held my hand closed tight, but sometime as I slept it excaped me. I suppose to capture something fully is impossible.



That is something I would write though. I guess the best the to do is write about what experience made you have the above realization.

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TrackStar11

That was really descriptive and nice but I just intended this to be random thoughts. I was not looking though to describe these thoughts the way that you just described them. But your description is really nice and beautiful though.

Charlie_Eleanor

haha, thanks. That is fine, it is just my preference on how to make the reader feel something, but I really like the way you approach it. Again, well done, and I will look for more of your posts.

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TrackStar11

Thanks and I will look for more of you as well.