Black September - Writers Forum

Theodore_Brooks · 09-03-2007, 02:07 AM

I was Told By a Teacher of mine, That Our Lifes Are Like Dice, We Go were we're thrown. I Kind of like that analogy, it's not to bad i guess, but i like to think of life as a way of humiliating me, yes, humiliation, if you give us life why not give us the answer to life, Why were we born, were did we start from, instead you abandon us on this rotating sphere and tell us to fend for ourselfs, not knowing our roots.In thruth i believe we are more like oprhaned lab rats thrown into a vast experimental cage were we are told to live, maybe learn, die, then hopefully your offspring will repeat, But look at me rambling on about our exsistance and forthcoming, i sound like a ripe loon. Honestly im writing this to set a benchmark pertaining to my vocabulary, i really want to see were it stands by just talking about every day things. next subject, nature, a convution of nature, its rapture and grasping cunningness is astounding, just to sit in the mountain breeze and feel the cripst winds from a babbiling brooke which isnt far away. the chirping of the birds resting atop a fine oak tree which houses the lifes of so many creatures. the song mad world, great song, perfect for playing gears of war and getting you into the nostalgic mood, also it cuts deep within my child hood core, pertaining to memories from my old life. fighting, an actual upside to this boring and everyday life, learing new combo's, new strikes, and soon developing your own style, just thiking about it gets me excited, or is eager the word, maybe determined. damn i feel so stupid, i don't know whats going on, oh just great now im having a premonition, i feel as if im left out of the loop with everyone, im so infuriated. i need to calm down, im not usally the type to lose their cool. ok im back to my self.

Olly Buckle · 09-06-2007, 05:36 AM

Your first post, you didn't even introduce yourself. I can see why it came in this section, be warned it is probably one of the less read parts of the site, it is in the nature of computers that people want short easy things to read so poetry and lyrics get the most attention, though maybe not the most discerning. All those capitals in the first line and then you don't hit the shift key to be "I", there are some typos and spellings in it,Babbiling brooke, exsistance, convution of nature, im for I'm, and lifes for lives, the spell check should put a red line under them, if you run through things before you hit the submit button it makes them easier for others to read and saves you getting all the detail pointed out by pedants, like me. Content, personally I don't hold with the idea we were put here, or thrown into it, no gods, no higher beings, we hauled ourselves up by our own bootstraps, no whys other than those we create for ourselves, the ones you refer to in the last few lines, eagerness determination and a desire to know, yes they are my drivers. Anyway welcome to the forum, hope you get something from it