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c0ld_tr0jan · 07-04-2007, 10:05 AM

Well, in the past i have won awards for creative writing and such. i used to feel i was good at it. Anyway. Point being, i had a workshop kinda thing for QAGTC inc. With Anita Bell. She said that my writing was great, And i should continue to develop it. Just wondering what you guy's thing. I want your honest opinions, just so i have a wide range instead of just one authors.

Although it is only a small piece(like 3 sentences) i just want your feedback.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Brett Crowley

As the man walked past the shadowy grave of his brother, he broke into fitful rage. he remembered the scarlet sky and vivid shame he felt when teh sacraficial ceremony was complete. Once again, Jason, felt the malignant guilt of three years ago.

Thanks Guys

EDIT: Ahh, woops, i realised i changed places just before i posted. Please move, thanks

~Kouryuu~ · 07-04-2007, 10:10 AM

Well, I thought these were very good lines, but it's not really enough to comment on in detail. Sorry.

c0ld_tr0jan · 07-04-2007, 10:15 AM

i wasn't after detail as such, just a general opinion

numai.stea · 07-04-2007, 10:15 AM

Quote:

As the man walked past the shadowy grave of his brother, he broke into fitful rage. He remembered the scarlet sky and vivid shame he felt when the sacraficial ceremony was complete. Once again, Jason,(no comma) felt the malignant guilt of three years ago.

That's pretty much it. There's not nearly enough to judge you as a writer. Feedback? Psht. You missed a cap.
o__o;;

Post up some more of anything, so we can really form an opinion of your writing.

My eyes are open,
Stea.

~Kouryuu~ · 07-04-2007, 10:19 AM

Yes, I agree with Stea! Could you please post some more up? We'd all be happy to comment further on your writing with a little more imput!

c0ld_tr0jan · 07-04-2007, 10:28 AM

Yeh, ok, as soon as i can, i will post more up. But it's 12:30 am atm, i was up for 38 hrs and have had about 8 hrs sleep scince then, dnt go into grammar to much atm

Edit: maybe you guys aren't understanding what i want. I don't want to be judged as a writeror anything. Just basically. Do you think it is good. Should i carry on, all that kinda stuff..