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| File 13 Got something you were going to throw away, something that just didn't fit or work out the way you planned? Share it here. |
06-14-2007, 02:22 PM
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Letter to God --- Writen a Year Ago
I accused him of many things. I probably shouldn’t have done that. Then I asked him what was wrong with me and why he was so cruel to me. Probably shouldn’t have done that either.
I cried to him and screaming at him, still asking that one-word question – why? Why am I like this? Why am I treated this way?
Then I said I didn’t believe in him. That thought made me realize that I was writing a letter to no one. I stopped writing and threw the letter in a box somewhere. Somewhere, where I thought I would never see it again, never.
I just moved. As I unpacked my boxes I looked through my things, stumbling across things I had forgotten about and memories that no one cared about anymore.
I found an old letter, ripped and smeared, half written.
It was my letter to God.
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06-14-2007, 06:23 PM
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Well then--show us the letter.
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06-14-2007, 07:25 PM
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You misunderstand. That wasn't a intro, that was a drabble I wrote.
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“Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion; it is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality. But, of course, only those who have personality and emotion know what it means to want to escape from these”
- Emily Dickenson
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06-14-2007, 08:32 PM
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The idea is interesting for me, and I would like to know more about the character, but I think that it would be better if you'd include the actual letter. As it is, it's rather confusing and unsatisfactory.
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06-14-2007, 09:14 PM
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Alright, nice to know. Thanks.
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“Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion; it is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality. But, of course, only those who have personality and emotion know what it means to want to escape from these”
- Emily Dickenson
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06-14-2007, 09:44 PM
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I like the last two lines as is. I like the idea of it being thrown in a box too, but not so much as worded. I think they work because they are shorter and mysterious. No letter needed. I don't really buy the first part. Too much information.
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06-15-2007, 12:54 AM
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Holy COW. What is the malfunction here? Why does there have to be a letter???
If he'd written a short that started out "I murdered my father yesterday" would you demand to see the body.
By the way, did God write back, or did you forget to include an SASE?
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06-15-2007, 04:27 PM
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I really like this. To me, it captures an anger at God, but yet a deep down realization of His presence. And the way the letter was thought to have dissapeared, to find it was still there, kinda like a sign--so is God, even though He was thought to be gone, to.
Maybe not much was intended, I dunno, but I got a lot out of this little piece. Thanks.
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06-15-2007, 10:55 PM
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So mixed feelings on the inclution of the letter...I personality like it the way it is, without the letter. Makes it more...mysterious, if you will. Makes you use your imagination a bit.
But I suppose it's a matter of opinion.
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“Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion; it is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality. But, of course, only those who have personality and emotion know what it means to want to escape from these”
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06-16-2007, 01:55 AM
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No letter required, its emotional and thought provoking. I like i!!
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06-18-2007, 07:52 PM
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Thanks. ^^
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“Poetry is not a turning loose of emotion, but an escape from emotion; it is not the expression of personality but an escape from personality. But, of course, only those who have personality and emotion know what it means to want to escape from these”
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06-18-2007, 09:33 PM
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I write many things like this aswell, including a letter is completely unecessary. I like it : D
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06-20-2007, 11:19 PM
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I love this! Mostly because I can relate to it, most people can.
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06-21-2007, 10:15 AM
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I like the idea - the theme. But it needs more substance.
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06-21-2007, 10:51 AM
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God knows what was in that letter. And that's all that matters. =)
This piece could have come out of any box from anybody. All you've done is word it for many of us. And done a fine job.
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i thank You God for most this amazing
day: for the leaping greenly spirits of trees
and a blue true dream of sky; and for everything
which is natural which is infinite which is yes
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