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04-14-2007, 02:15 AM
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Sometimes things hurt.
Could this count as a short short story?
Sometimes things hurt. They hurt so bad that it’s hard just to breath. So you stop breathing to stop the pain and for that moment it’s all ok. Then you come out of it gasping for breath, because to live is to feel pain.
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04-14-2007, 02:52 AM
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well it's not a story is it? i think it's got to have a begining, a middle and an end. so if you look at it logicaly then, no.
however it would be a great introduction. does it not make you want to expand? i feel like since you wrote that statment it muct be kind of real to you, so why not go a bit further?
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04-14-2007, 03:27 AM
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I'd say not, or if it is then it's a rather forgettable one. It's more of an observation than a story. Can you find a way to capture that observation in a short story?
Cheers,
Rob
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04-14-2007, 07:39 AM
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i agree with rob and nineteen, i wouldnt say its a short story. \however, i liked it, try and incorporate it into a short story, and you may just be onto a winner.
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04-14-2007, 10:51 PM
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Thanks everybody. I'm trying to write a short short story. It has to be 50 words or less and I'm completely stumped.
Do you think this classifies?
It broke. There was pain and surgery and more pain, then eventually nothing.
13 words.
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Last edited by saintoflight : 04-14-2007 at 11:58 PM.
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04-15-2007, 01:43 AM
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I think you can afford to be a touch more adventurous if you've got 50 words to play with. It's not easy, but think beginning, middle and end, hint rather than describe, and see what you can come up with.
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Rob
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04-15-2007, 08:01 PM
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Thanks heaps.
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04-20-2007, 11:06 PM
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i think it would be good for a song..=D
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