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Old 02-13-2007, 06:53 AM   #1
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Arrow Cycle

I was gonna throw this away as I was never happy with. But I found this bit.
Here you go.

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This morning is cold
A lapse of thought surrounds
Dry throat
Skin cracks
I'm breaking again

Shadow brings a thin sheet to wrap
Reflective light preaches truth
The host controls the masquerade
It possesses again

The sun overlooks
Recieve awkward looks
Whispers taunts grins
They're judging again

Frail bones tremble
Earache fights melodic medic
I did try
Were seeking again
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Old 02-17-2007, 12:12 AM   #2
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I'm not an expert on poetry, but it sounds good though..
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