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Old 02-08-2007, 12:01 AM   #1
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My Steve Irwin Tribute

On September 4th, when I heard the "Crocodile Hunter" Steve Irwin had died (I learned it at the exact time the first line shows), I was absolutely devastated. I shared with him that unbelievable love for animals, and had always aspired one day to meet him. Obviously, I'll never be able to do that now. More to the point, I couldn't sleep that night; I just kept thinking "this can't be happening; this is all a dream; it has to be a dream". In my insomnia, I wrote this, making it up as I went along, but that doesn't mean it wasn't from the heart. With rare exception, I'm horrible at poetry, and I already know this isn't a fitting tribute to the man and his legacy. I could never do anyone justice in my writing, especially not someone like him. Just tell me what you think about this untitled piece.

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11:10 PM
I hear the news
And I'm bruised
Disbelief
Grief
These are the blues
In which we live
In which we die
Life is but so brief

Feathers and fur
Scales and claws
Teeth and jaws
You're gone
But you're not gone
This is the legacy
That you have left
That we have kept
You live on

Die for what you love
Noah releases the dove;
A twig;
A better place;
I'll see you there
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Old 02-08-2007, 10:05 PM   #2
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Crikey!

Why is this in File 13? There's loads of places on the Net where you could post a tribute to Steve Irwin. You may think you're horrible at poetry but obviously you're not. This poem proves it. Don't let it languish here in the trash can, and DON'T think it's not a fitting tribute to Steve. It's too good.

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In my insomnia, I wrote this, making it up as I went along
Isn't that what writing is, making it up as you go along? Keep it for Steve, or broaden it to include others. It has many applications. I enjoyed the read. Don't trash it.

Small editing suggestion:

This is the legacy
That you have left
That we keep for you
So that you live on


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Old 02-09-2007, 04:34 PM   #3
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You cannot give up so easily! this is a GREAT poem. better than any I can do. Trust me, this is good, dont give up so easily! my specialty is books, i always think im bad, but i hear comments about them being good~! so im doing a good deed (ok this is not about religion) anyways, i believe you are a GOOD poet, and keep on writing! this is a good poem, dont leave it in the garbage can!

hope you make more poems soon

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Old 02-19-2007, 06:17 PM   #4
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Wow

Wow, i cant believe you put that in here!
Apart from the fact that its a really good poem, you wrote it fom your heat using human compassion and kindness... there are so many people who would love to hear your heart felt tribute
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