Halloween Night (enter The Spook) - Writers Forum

PAGEMASTER · 10-23-2006, 06:00 AM

I had plans to write a set of five children books featuring bizarre characters, humour, and a string of creepy yet unique monsters/spooks/etc...

This was going to be the first of the five, three friends were going to investigate an abandoned manor accompanied by another kid that bullies them, the ghost was going to befriend the nervous kid and make friends with him, then scare off the bully, etc...

I have other plans for a childrens halloween story now so if anyone wants to work from this, feel free too.
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HALLOWEEN NIGHT

ENTER THE SPOOK

Halloween holds many mysteries of frights, spooks, ghouls and gulls; wait! Scratch that last part. Two of three friends simply love Halloween, Anthony and Melanie, dressing up, trick or treating, striking fear into your fellow man, they can’t get enough of it, if it was left up to them Halloween would last for a full week, or better yet have its own month, now that would be cool. The third friend however, Melanie’s younger brother, Christopher, to him the thrills and fears of Halloween is too much, too scary and the only reason he goes along with Mel and Tony (short for Anthony) is to prove that he isn’t what they’ll call him in school, he shudders at the thought of his nickname ‘Scaredy Cat’.

Tony mentioned something about the abandoned mansion up on the hill that had burnt down over twenty years ago.

‘Are you crazy?’ Chris shrieked. ‘You want us to investigate inside the mansion? Nut-uh, wont do it, you can’t make me, the idea is absurd.’

‘Chris calm down.’ Raising his arms to steady Chris’s juddering body Tony stared at him, his fluffy brown hair going every which way but loose, his specs could’ve put him in a ‘should’ve gone to specsavers advert’ what with the cracked lens and the thick frame. ‘It’ll be a laugh.’

‘It’ll be a nightmare.’ Chris argued back, folding his arms over to demonstrate that he’s put his foot down.

‘Oh c’mon Chris don’t be such a scaredy cat.’ Mel stepped in; she knew that calling her brother by his nickname would talk him into coming.

Mungye · 10-27-2006, 02:24 PM

What age group are you aiming the series at Pagemaster(love that name?)
One thing you could do is to perhaps take a little more time with your opening. You are introducing three special people, the features really of this story. So perhaps a bit more explanation and description, it is only my thought. Because Hallowe'en is such a visual thing it would be interesting to really see these kids through your eyes.
The story lines are interesting. I would like to read more.

PAGEMASTER · 10-28-2006, 05:53 AM

The age group I'd planned to write for was going to be for nine-to-fourteen year olds. When/if I do plan to rewrite this I will be giving a more vivid description of characters, the surroundings, etc... It will be of somewhat whacky descriptions to entertain the readers, to see the creepy, yet jokey kind of vision of halloween, add in a few laughs, a few spooks, and a secret way into the world of Halloween horrors.