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Old 05-31-2006, 10:16 AM   #1
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Bits and Bobs

Here are a few things ive written but never completed because ive either moved on from then onto something else, or ive got completely drained for ideas on how to continue them. Please let me know what you think of them or what i could do to some of them maybe.

Somebody stole my heart
& traded it in for gold
What they thought was valuable
Is worth nothing when you grow old
So sit back
And enjoy
Work a shift a lifetime long
Is it something to tell your kids ?

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Got a lot of money
but got no time to spend it

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Theres two sides to a story
but you've got the biggest mouth
I will breath it in
you will spit it out

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I got computers thinking for me
women thinking they adore me
every Friday i get pissed
and i get laid because im rich

This worlds too greedy

My lifes become a big routine
i've got a plan, i have a dream

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You spin my world
until i hurl
the floor hits me
i miss the seat (again)

ive been with you most the night
and you want to be with me
you make me loud and sometimes fight
exaggerate my self esteem

ive been thinking about you all day
your an expensive date
but i reckon you'll go all the way
a one night stand to tell my mates

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When the shit hit the fan
your mouth was open wide
and it came as no suprise
one day hate is going to get you in the face
and then your face wont look so nice

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Old 08-25-2006, 09:50 PM   #2
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I like this one:

Got a lot of money
but got no time to spend it


It has the sound of a good country and western song. Kinda an old time feel to it.
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Old 10-14-2006, 02:13 PM   #3
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These bits and bobs could stand alone as full poems. Poems do not need to especially be long, many consist of two lines. Pull these back out and use them is my advice.
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Old 10-17-2006, 04:33 PM   #4
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My fave...

Theres two sides to a story
but you've got the biggest mouth
I will breath it in
you will spit it out


So...everyone talks...and no one listens...

Bits and bobs...some are words of wisdom!
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