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Interesting prologue. It seemed to me like a start for an essay, so I'd go off with action. I'd start her going into some sort of fight with the main nemisis here. So close to death, that she sees a flashback of what she had become. Then, tell the story. How she got there, what happend. That way you can go in third person and narrorate the story in your head. Then, when you catch up to the main time, you can end it with a climatic fight and call it good. Hope that helps. I like the prologue as well and I think you have a nice start. Keep it up and PM me if you need help.
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