HollyHocks

meh, a short story i did once, not really all that fond of it, but i jut couldnt bare to throw it out...



Age Doesn't Matter

Why wont they all just leave me alone? Why cant they see im all grown up now? Why cant they just let me be, instead of barging into my thoughts whenever they feel like it?


I wish...I wish...That I was able to laugh. I wish that I could cry. I wish that I had friends who loved and cared for me. I wish...Nobody cares what I wish. All they care about is themselves.


Right thats it! I dont care what they try to do to me! I'm getting out of here. I'm going to ezcape. But to where? Where do i know that i would be welcome?


I wish that everybody around me would disappear...Just like that...Pop! Then they'd be gone...Though i have to say i would miss them. Even if they dont pay me any attention at least i know that they're there.


No where. No one.


It's so strange the feeling i get when i'm alone at night. I feel like somebody is watching me. But there cant be. My room has been locked up tight all the corners searched for any gaps all of them sealed. Nobody can be watching me and yet i still get the feeling of being watched.


Nobody loves me. Everybody hates me.


I wonder if they would miss me if i were to go. Just leave them without any warning.


Someday, i'll show you. I'll show the lot of you.


You know what? I'm going to go up to the window there, right above my bed and climb out of it. Then jump. Then I'll see if they'll miss me.


Wonder what its like to fly. I watch the birds every single day. the others think thats wierd and try to get me to do other stuff. But i dont want to. I just want to sit and watch the birds. The way the glide through the air. It's so peaceful just to watch them, all thoughts seem to fly from my mind.


Ouch! the edge is so sharp. My finger is bleeding. Good theres a ledge. I'll be able to stand on that.


I wonder what it's like to fly.

Look at the land! It's so beautiful this time of night. I cant see much of the coloring, but its so beautiful. The trees reaching up into the evening sky, reaching towards the stars. Beautiful.


Look! Theres a bird and such a beautiful bird too. Hey bird, guess what? I'll be joining you up in the sky soon. Don't fly away yet. Wait till i join you.


Such a long way down. Good thing i brought teddy with me. I wouldnt dare dream of taking this trip without Teddy. I've had him since i was three years old. I'm 10 now.


Hey birds! Do you see me standing on this ledge?


Star light, Star bright. the first star i see to night. I wish i may. I wish i might. Have the wish. I wish tonight.


Hey birds! Watch me fly!


I wish for everybody to love me when I'm gone.




A family of four came out into the crisp morning air to find their 17 year old son dead on the lawn. He'd jumped from the front yard tree, the police later said and hadnt ever bothered to shout out for help or even try to break his fall.

A young girl, no more than nine or ten was found dead, clutching her teddy bear to her chest. people say that she looked so peaceful the way she was lying and others say that they could swear she had been smiling. Police later said that she hadnt been pushed or thrown, she had jumped freely.

Two people, died at the same time, same day, same way. They may have been different ages, but their intent was the same.



And thats the story... not much good in my opinion, but that could jut be me.

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Olindila

Did you mispell 'escape' or is that how they spell it in your part of the world?

At first I didn't understand how the thoughts were flowing together, but then at the end I could see that it was actually two different people's thoughts happening at the same time. I would suggest maybe making it a bit more obvious that it's two different people.

The writing style might need a bit of work done with it-- just the way you word the sentences. And a big point- I think by age ten kids know that they can't fly. I would make her more like 5 or 6 years old.

Overall I really liked this idea. I think it's good.

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HollyHocks

um, no that was a genuine spelling mistake.
I like the idea of making the kid around six, it does make thing a little bit better.
I just thought i'd post this story up here, see what other people thought of it and to see if they could write something to inspire me to continue on with it one of these days.
Ah well, we'll see what happens.

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