Pendulum

Just something off the top of my head. Not edited, I haven't even reread it since I wrote it. I'm not really sure where I'm going with it, it's kind of an inner monologue, but more of someone chatting with himself. let me know what you think.

I want to be a superhero

I wish I was a superhero.

Why’s that?

I don’t know. I guess it’d be more interesting than what I’ve got at the moment

Your life is interesting

Not really. Get up, go to work, come home, eat, sleep. There’s got to be more to life than just that.

Like what?

I don’t know. Adventure, romance. Danger, maybe.

So in order to achieve this you feel you need to become a superhero?

Well, not necessarily. It just seems to me that superheroes lead exciting lives.

I suppose that’s true. They do risk their lives to save innocent people they don’t even know.

Yeah, see. That’d be awesome!
Yeah, I guess it would.

I wonder what super powers I would have.

Maybe you could be Office Clerk Man! You could shoot staples at your enemies.

Haha, something like super speed would be cool. Or flight. It’d be awesome to be able to fly.

Yeah, that would be great. Imagine being just like a bird.

Exhilarating.

That’s a good word for it.

Yeah. Maybe I could just be a bird.

Come again?

You know, instead of a superhero. All the freedom, none of the responsibilities, it’s be cool.

I guess…

I could fly all over the world. See lots of interesting places, meet interesting people.

As a bird?

Well, I could be some kind of were-bird. You know, only turning into a bird once every full moon.

That’d be a bit inconvenient.

Well yeah. Maybe I should be able to choose when to change.

That’s a better idea.

Yeah! Like I could fly up as high as I could go as a bird, then change and go free falling.

Wouldn’t that be a bit dangerous?

Hell yeah! That’s what I want: danger, excitement.

Aren’t you content with the way things are?

Well. Honestly? No, not really. I mean, things are starting to take off at work, but I’m just so bored.

Why’s that?

It’s just this whole monotonous routine, it’s really starting to make me think if I’m not just wasting my life.

I don’t know. You’re a pretty successful businessman. You make enough money to pay horrendous taxes. And things with your lady friend are really hitting it off.

Yeah I guess. I do like her a lot. I just don’t see a future in which I’m going to be satisfied with the way things are. I have a good job, but I don’t particularly enjoy it. And she seems more interested in my money than in me.

Are you crazy? She’s nuts about you!

I guess. But still, sometimes I just feel like stopping here and taking a new path, you know?

I know what you mean. It’s good just to get away sometimes.
Exactly.

Well, you could do some superhero cosplay with your lady friend. Heheheh.

I’ll ignore that.

Fine, suit yourself.

Pun intended?

What?

Never mind.

Ok.

Damn, got off topic. Where were we?

Cosplay?

No! Before that.

You being a superhero.

Oh right. Yeah, that’d be cool. I’d get to save people from burning buildings and stuff.

Yeah, that’s certainly a perk.

Right, and I’m pretty sure superheroes get to ride the subway for free.

What? But you can fly.

Yeah, but still. That’s a pretty good deal.

So why don’t people just dress up as superheroes to ride for free?

Well, people can tell.

How?

Well, superheroes have a specific look, don’t they?

Like what?

I don’t know. They’re big an strong. They wear spandex. That kind of stuff.

Lots of people wear spandex. Mimes wear spandex. Skiers.

Well yeah, I guess. But not onto the subway.

I still don’t get why a superhero would take the subway anyway.

What if they’d had a hard day crime fighting and they didn’t have the energy to fly?

You’d think they’d call a cab.

Maybe they left their wallet in their other suit.

Why don’t you become a comedian?

Hmm, you know that’s not such a bad idea.

I was joking.

No, but think about it! I could play clubs, become famous, star in my own movie, full of poor acting but good comedy. I could be just like Chris Farley, rest his soul.

Yes but he had something you don’t

What’s that?

A sense of humour

Har har, you seem to have enough for the both of us.

Well I do pride myself on my sense of humour

I can see that.

the only bit I personally like is the cosplay bit, and that's only cuz I find it amusing. But give me feedback. Mainly on the writing, but also on the content is ok. Be harsh. Thanks.

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Christopher Black

I don't know is the idea of him chatting with himself is as good as it would have been if he just explained his thoughts in first person. It's just kind of wierd to have a conversation with yourself as two different people[even though I do it ]. I don't know about this one. It just didn't have that hook than made me really want to read. The main character almost seems bored. Like he's just on the couch, bored out of his mind, holding up a conversation with himself. I've never read anything like this, which is good. It's always good to read something new. I just don't know if it's the type of writing that I could grow to love.

I hope some of my rambling made sense. Keep writing, man. Interesting read, here.

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Pendulum

Thanks. I was really bored when I wrote this, and kind of tired/indifferent, so I guess that came out in the writing. And yeah, I talk to myself like that too This wasn't really a serious writing excercise or anything, just something to do. Thanks for commenting.

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JeffNothing

I dunno, I kinda liked it, especially the part about the cosplay. But I don't see this piece going anywhere by itself. Try incorporating it into something bigger. It's a funny, entertaining piece, but standing alone it doesn't have much of a premise.

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