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Old 03-04-2005, 09:11 PM   #1
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Darkness Falls on the Hills of Alimity

This was just on the top of my head when I was writting but I didn't realy want to continue to write about it or post what I had but anyways heres the part I wrote.


Death learks in the air, the smell of burntness seaps into your nostrills, you feel a slight feeling fear, but it passes.

The nightmare that haunts you every night, starts to make you feel uncomfertable with were you are in your house. To explain these nightmares, it would take hours.

The nightmare

You see you when you are little, about the age of 10, your fast asleep in your bed dreaming of strange things, like every night. You wake up and put your rob over your shoulders and tie the string tight so it doesn't unravel. You go to the front door and make your way down the quite road, following the voices in your head that tell you to go to the hills of Alimity and find answer to the nightmares and strange dreams.

A stop sign catches your attention, you stand there and stare at it as if it were written in a foreign language......... thats when I stopped I thought it was a waste of time, it sounded bad to me, but the little boy is supposed to go up the hills and into a shack.

say what you want.
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Old 03-06-2005, 01:36 PM   #2
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I like it. Could be really scary.
I think you should continue with it; it's good.
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Old 03-06-2005, 02:02 PM   #3
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Its deep, but the concept is lost in the text.


Keep Working.


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Old 03-12-2005, 02:30 PM   #4
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thanks, I will
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