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Old 02-10-2004, 03:16 PM   #1
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Poetry fragment
I just thought of this, walking down the street, on an autumn day. It is my favorite poetry "bit" that I've written, yet because it's from the past (about 11 years ago) I can't really tie the feeling into anything, so it stands as a lone marker to that day:

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The clouds in the sky are dismal and grey,
Shattered glass lies in the narrow street.
I fear that the cold winds will sweep me away
Along with the dead autumn leaves at my feet.
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Old 02-10-2004, 09:24 PM   #2
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What makes you say this is a poetry bit? It could very well be an entire poem. Remember, Emily Dickenson was a master at short poems. I don't see anything wrong with this. Not sure where the shattered glass comes in but it is nice.
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Old 02-10-2004, 10:13 PM   #3
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What makes you say this is a poetry bit? It could very well be an entire poem. Remember, Emily Dickenson was a master at short poems. I don't see anything wrong with this. Not sure where the shattered glass comes in but it is nice.
Only about 1/3 to 1/2 of the poetry I've written rhymes. This piece came to me as I was walking down the street. I was cold on what I call a "grey day" (I usually dream in color but my dreams of home are in grayscale) walking down the street, and these words came to me in a flash exactly as I wrote them above, no editing, as if I were hearing them not thinking them.

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Those are always the best, but I agree that it may as well stand on its own. Perhaps that fact that it's fragmentary can make it that much more meaningful. It is a lovely piece.

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Old 02-25-2004, 03:25 PM   #5
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Old 03-03-2004, 09:30 PM   #6
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Why is it even in File 13? You've just described an indescribable feeling...This piece really gets to you. Great work!
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Old 12-07-2004, 07:18 PM   #7
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I liked the read of that!
It's shortness is almost haiku except that it's measured differently!

Still everyone seems to be in agreement that this poem has a life of its own!
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