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File 13 Got something you were going to throw away, something that just didn't fit or work out the way you planned? Share it here.

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Old 08-02-2008, 08:42 AM   #1
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Bleach

Bleach is a fragile creature. He keeps to himself,
hiding his glittering eyelashes from the world.

The harsh light from the sun damages his cells,
daring him to step out from his self-made compound.

Into the ice cold night he vanishes,
the unfeeling brick a comfort, the moon an ally.

Childhood is but a twisted blur,
locked doors and harsh words, creeping of corners and silence.

Occasionally, he bandages himself up, slides on sunglasses,
and watches the world from his murky retreat on the porch.

The ruffled, owlish pages of his library comfort him,
Zeus and Peter Rabbit sharing his pain and aches.

A bright man used to come to see him,
open up his bag of tricks and give Bleach pills to play with.

These days, the house lies empty,
dust stirred no longer by the cat that came around.

These days, Bleach is just waiting.

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Old 08-02-2008, 08:43 AM   #2
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Just my fooling around with different kinds of poetry. Not good enough to post in poetry, though, but I still desire critique.
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Old 08-02-2008, 10:09 AM   #3
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Well, I can't give much of a critique but, I like it. This "Bleach" person reminds me of the old guy next door to me lol
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