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Old 06-01-2008, 03:53 PM   #1
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Experimental Game

Well, hi there, this is my introduction to Experimental Game.

Experimental Game
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My name’s Thirteen Drake. It was 2020, a year of rebellion and technology. I lived in a new development south of what used to be Brazil, but was over run by a rebelling group called Virulento, or toxic in Spanish. My mother and father died in the process of Virulento taking Brazil as their own, but they failed in that. Now it lies in ruins. I live in a city called Zezecna, named after Naomi Zezecna, also known as my mother, who had refused to take my fathers name of Drake. I had no choice over my name, but let’s get to the point. I was born to Naomi Zezecna and Tyrant Drake, my father’s family tracing back to the great Sir Francis Drake. My mother and father had been great adventurers, who searched for new settlements and along the way saved the world, in a way. Battled some rebels, but finally found their match, and died gruesomely. Now as their daughter, their one and only daughter, it’s me that has been foreseen to be the next adventurer to save the world from the Virulento, the most destructive and harmful group… This, is my story.
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Old 06-01-2008, 04:29 PM   #2
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there's a lot happening in such a small text. I can't take in what most of it says. =s
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Old 06-01-2008, 06:06 PM   #3
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Woah, information overload. I have been guilty of this very matter.
Seeing that there's so much going on in just one small piece, I'd recommend what many have said to me: start the story with whatever you have after this and slowly add all this info as you go.
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