nineteen

First thing i've posted in a good, long time:

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(follow above link: too long to post here)

this is chapter one, i guess, of a story currently 20000-ish words long. looking for advanced critique. will be happy to read something of your is you R&R this.

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kidstaple

Well, I would love to critique your work, but like most people on this forum, I'm too lazy to actually click on the link and try to find your work. Just post it here on the forum. It might take a little more work, but it will be worth it and easier for other people to read it and possibly critique it. Only giving a hyperlink can lead others away from even considering looking over it. That and they might just be lazy like me!

Hope this helps. Post it on the forum and I'll look it through and tell you what I think about it!

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Candrah

I followed your link but don't like the idea of having to register.

Candrah

Riffraff

*Angel

yea i would post it here if i were you. especially since you marked your deviation as mature content, that means to read it you already have to be a member. So everyone here that doesn't have a DA account can't read it.

though i assume your trying to promote your gallery a bit, so i'll give you my critique when i have a moment to read all that over at your deviation.

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nineteen

ah right.

sorry about that. but it complained that it was slightly too long.

thanx for looking anyway.

ah and i'm not trying to promote my gallery, i hate devinatart....

just use it to store things and it's quite pretty.

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