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Old 03-15-2008, 12:57 PM   #16
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Old 03-18-2008, 03:57 PM   #17
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The group of Muslims were all ready. The plan was set, all instructions had been given. One of the largest demonstrations of terror ever recorded was about to take place. Hundreds of brave men, about to martyr themselves and secure their place at Allah’s side.
The plan was simple, destroy the black pride parade. Hundreds of men, each strapped with a bomb were going to stand in their selected positions and simultaneously explode, killing hopefully thousands of people. The centre of town will be packed with people celebrating black pride. During the parade, while the streets are busting with people crammed together, the hundreds of men would explode themselves.
The Muslims prayed together for a final time… It was nearly time.
They did not see the construction worker behind them with the duffel bag walking around the mosque, placing some explosives of his own.
David thought to himself, if he had listened to the terrifying man in the Ferrari then he would be part of the parade mass murder. David could have been walking through the scene of the attack with his AK47 killing black survivors. Nothing invited David more than slaughtering helpless niggers but Cara’s life was on the line.
The doctor would help her, David knew it, he trusted the kind man. All he had to do was plant these explosives and then shoot as many Pakis as he wanted from the roof.
Sounds like fun


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Old 03-19-2008, 01:22 AM   #18
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I like it so far but the chapters are too short!!
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