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Lavander Rose

Chapter 1:

Lavender Rose


Ecstasy. Pure, un-adulterated, ecstasy. The feeling is not comparable to anything. I felt the last pull of life leave my meal and let the body drop to the floor in the alley. I wiped my mouth on the back of my hand and took a deep breath, reveling in the power I felt now coursing through my un-dead body.


“Holy fuck, that was good,” I said softly to myself.


I looked down at my second meal of the night. She had short blond hair, cut really short and spiky. Her mini skirt had ridden up some from being man-handled by yours truly—it was now riding up even farther than she had originally intended. Her light blue shirt was one of those that had no back, with two little ties in the front that wrap around your neck. I don’t know what the hell they were called, nor did I care.


I stood there a moment longer, looking at my now dead prey. I didn’t have to kill, I just liked the rush. I could easily have just taken some of her blood, healed her neck wound with my own, and let her go about her life. But where is the fun in that?


I brushed the dirt off of my blue jeans and black leather coat. Taking one last look at my dinner I knelt down once more to brush her hair away from her cold, pale face.


“Pathetic,” I sneered before exiting the alley and mixing back into the pedestrian traffic on the downtown Manhattan street. It was incredible how easily one such as myself could mix into the crowds. It didn’t always use to be like this. Up until the mid sixties, when people were too high to care or too mad about the war to pay attention. Ever since then it has become almost too easy to flawlessly blend into society.


I continue to walk North up the street, not paying attention to where my feet are leading me. I was trying to figure out if I wanted another meal before the night was over. I had already had two tonight, but they were both small, not a lot of blood running through their veins.



I have to be careful though, if I feed someone and I’m not hungry, the venom in my system would change them. I would have to take care of the New One until they could fend for themselves. That could be years. I simply don’t have that kind of patience. Besides, I don’t want the responsibility. I’ve been living just for me for over one hundred years, there is no way I’m going to change that now.


Just then I felt something push onto me and hear a low oath. I look down to see shiny white head with gray hair rimming the large spot in the middle. The man takes a step back, readjusting his dark colored business suit.


“Hey, why don’t you watch where the fuck you’re goin?” he yells at me. When I don’t answer, he looks up the half foot or so to my eyes. He obviously sees something he doesn’t like. “Oh…uh…I-I-I-I’m sorry, s-s-s-sir,” he mumbled, averting his eyes away from my cold gray ones.


I stood there, watching the short old man mumble incoherently before he side stepped my place on the sidewalk and hurried on his way. I smirked to myself, pitiful humans. I looked around to figure out where my subconscious had taken me. I then realized that I was about a block away from one of my favorite clubs on this island.


I began walking again; I could already hear the heavy base of the music from where I was. I couldn’t be sure if that ability was due to my Vampiric senses, or the sheer volume of the music.



I finally made my way to the club and walked straight up to the bouncer. The tall black man was easily twice the size of me, but for some reason that he would never know, he was intimidated by me. As soon as he saw me, he unclipped the red velvet rope and ushered me inside. I nodded my head to him and walked straight into the club. I don’t get my pockets checked, nor do I have to pay. The people running this club found out a long time ago what happens when they tried to make me empty my pockets or pay for entry. They definitely don’t want a repeat of last time.


I stood at the entrance to the dance floor and took a deep breath. The smell of the sweaty human flesh was almost too much to bear. I closed my eyes and let the delicious smell wash over my senses. Even with my eyes closed, I could feel the looks of all the surrounding females. I smirked and opened my eyes. I was attractive, and I knew it. That’s why it has always been so easy for me to find meals. There is always an endless supply of lonely women, especially in Manhattan.


I scan the room, taking my pick of everyone here. I finally found my prey and made my way over, moving slightly to the rhythm. The girl had long blond hair and was wearing a dark, blood colored dress that reached half way down her thighs. How fitting.



I finally reached her, through the throng of swaying bodies. I put my hands firmly on her hips and felt her jump slightly, surprised by my touch. She spun around to face me and I could tell she liked what she saw. I locked my eyes with her dark blue ones and watched as they glazed over. I smirked slightly, knowing that my power was working on her.


All vampires have a power, something extraordinary that they can do. Mine was a type of hypnosis. If someone makes eye contact with me, I can easily get them to do whatever I want them to do. In her case, I wanted her to put her arms around my neck and move her hips against mine. She complied, obviously, and we began dancing.



For a moment I let myself revel in the feeling of being held. I haven’t been held in so long, I almost forgot what it felt like. Shaking my head violently to get those weak thoughts out, I looked down at her again. She was still looking up at me with her big blue eyes. I decided it was time to get this meal over with, before any other ridiculous thoughts could enter my head.


I slid my hand up her side and watched her body shiver at my touch. I gently, but purposefully took her hand and turned around to exit the club.


I hadn’t even made my way through half of the sweaty, dancing bodies when someone stepped in my way. This girl had long, straight, dark brown hair that rested just above her ample chest. She was wearing a greet shirt with no straps and black leather pants. I let my eyes rake over her curvy yet small frame before looking back up to meet her eyes. A sea of deep green eyes met mine as I felt myself get lost in their depths.


She smiled at me with her beautiful, glossy lips and raised her perfect eyebrows slightly. I immediately dropped the hand of my previous meal and took a step closer to the beauty in front of me. I watched her smugly as her eyes roamed over my well-toned body, visible even through my clothing.



When her eyes finally met mine again, I looked deep into their emerald color, finding it hard to use my power against her. What the hell?! I don’t care about humans. Since when do I feel bad about using my power to get what I want?



I noticed her small brown eyebrows gently furrow and her tiny nose scrunch up in confusion. I shook my head and put my hand on her left hip.



“Would you like to dance?” I asked her smoothly.


The confusion in her eyes immediately disappeared as she smiled and nodded. I put my other hand on her hip and gently brought her closer to me. I watched as she reached up to put her arms around my neck. Her small hips started to gently rub against me in time with the music. I smiled slightly and reciprocated the dance, still gazing into the bottomless green of her eyes.


“What’s your name, by the way?” she asked, her voice soft and feminine.


“Lukas,” I responded without thinking. Shit! I never give out my real name to humans. What the hell is going on with me today?!


I quickly recovered and asked, “And yours?”


“Tia,” she responded simply.


I frowned down at her, “Surely that isn’t your full name.”


She averted her eyes, “You’re right, it isn’t. Its just that whenever I tell people my full name, I get weird looks. Its not very common…” she trailed off, still looking away from me.


I gently lifted my hand from her hip to place it under her chin. Christ, I am so suave. “Tell me,” I prodded softly.


She sighed, “It’s Crescentia, but everyone knows me by Tia. It’s easier that way.”


My eyes widened suddenly, “Moon,” I whispered.


She smiled up at me, “Yeah, how did you know?”


I smirked down at her. Foolish human, “Weil Schonheit, ich auch deutsch bin,” I replied smoothly in my native tongue.


Her eyebrows furrowed again and her eyes clouded in confusion. I chuckled softly to myself. God, I haven’t laughed in so long.



“I said, ‘because Beauty, I am also German,” I explained.


I watched as her pale cheeks began to turn a slight shade of pink. I smiled at her—wait, I don’t smile, I smirk. I shook my head again, what is going on with me tonight?


I locked my light gray eyes with her green ones, bound and determined to clear my head and finish what I came here to do. I began to hypnotize her, watching her eyes glaze over as she continued to look at me, having no other choice.



Suddenly I felt something in the pit of my stomach. Something wasn’t right. I looked around me, trying to figure out what could be amiss. I came to the conclusion that something was wrong with me, not my surroundings. I looked back to Crescentia and felt the feeling in the pit of my stomach again. This time though, I also felt a slight tightening of my chest. I wracked my brain, trying to decipher this feeling. Then it hit me…I was feeling guilty.



I looked back into Crescentia’s eyes and immediately broke off the connection. I watched her as she blinked a few times, looking confusedly around at her surroundings. I needed to get out of here. I don’t know what the hell is going on right now, but I don’t want to figure it out.


“Good evening, Crescentia,” I whispered in her ear, inhaling the floral scent around her. Floral and…something else. Nevermind, I don’t care what she smells like. I need to get out of here.


I turned on my heel and made my way to the exit as quickly as possible, trying to cause little to no bruising on the humans in my path. I made it outside and immediately took a deep breath of the cool, city air. I didn’t need to breath, but after living as a human for twenty-three years, it becomes a hard habit to break.



I shook my head again, trying to get my thoughts in order before I turned and started to make my way home. What the fuck happened back there? One minute I’m about to get my third coarse of the night and the next, what? I’m feeling guilty? Guilty?! Me?! That isn’t possible. Creatures like me don’t have feelings, especially not those kinds. Besides she wasn’t even—


“Lukas?” I turned around to the sound of my name being called from behind me.


Quickly walking up to me was Crescentia. I smirked a little, this girl couldn’t get enough of me.



“Lukas, what happened back there? Are you alright?” she asked, concern dripping from every word out of her luscious mouth.


I put rose my hand to my face, pinching the bridge of my nose between my thumb and forefinger. This night is taking a turn for the worse.
“Yes Crescentia, I’m fine. I apologize for running out on you like that. I just needed some air,” I lied through my teeth.


She didn’t seem to buy it. “Well, here’s your air. Now lets go back inside,” she suggested seductively.


I dropped my hand to my side. I couldn’t deal with this right now. “No Crescentia, I think it is time for me to retire for the night. Thank you for the dance.” I turned quickly and began making my way back down the street. I needed to get away from that feeling and away from that ridiculously beautiful girl.


Without warning, I felt a gentle tug on the sleeve of my leather jacket. The tug was gentle, yes, but firm all the same. I stopped dead in my tracks. Holy shit, she’s strong for a human!


“Why are you in such a hurry?” she asked from behind me.


That’s it, I’ve had enough. I tried to save this girl from the monster that I am but she can’t take a hint. I quickly spun around, grabbed Crescentia and pulled her into the alley beside us. This is why I love this city, plenty of dark alleyways.



I whipped her around in front of me, slamming her back into the dark bricks of a building. I pressed myself up against her firmly, feeling all of her curves fall into place against my body. This would have been extremely pleasurable, if I wasn’t so damn mad right now.


“Fine, Crescentia! You want to stick around? Well then I’ll show you what I was trying to protect you from!” I hissed at her. Protect her? Since when the hell do I protect anyone?


I felt her breathing become more shallow and her heart rate pick up. Most of my victims are under my control and therefore aren’t afraid. Smelling the fear thick around her was an unexpected rush for me.


I pushed her long, silky hair away, exposing her neck. Then I put both of my hands on her shoulders to keep her in place. She hadn’t screamed yet. This one was strong. I almost feel bad for this. Almost.


“Ich versuchte, Sie, Schonheit zu warnen,” I whispered softly in her ear, my lips grazing her earlobe.


She shivered slightly and I smirked. At this point I was in complete predator mode. I looked down at her neck, watching the beating of her heart make her neck throb with its pulse. I leaned in closer, smelling her neck. I pressed my lips to the pulse and let my tongue make contact with her skin. I froze, my hands now digging into her shoulders. Wait, she doesn’t taste like a human. I know that taste. It’s just like a—


“Werewolf,” I sneered, taking my hands off her shoulders.


I watched as her eyes quickly registered what was happening, “Vampire,” she sneered back.



Translations:
Ich versuchte, Sie, Schonheit zu warnen: I tried to warn you, Beauty
Crescentia: Crescent-shape, or moon
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Old 02-14-2008, 10:30 AM   #2
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Although the end of this excerpt begins to sound a little like Underworld, I found the storyline very interesting.
I really enjoyed the idea of ecstacy when feeding, it should be that way, although to be honest it was obvious from the start that she was not human. I was surprised that a vampire that had tasted werewolf blood in the past could not identify one, or at least recognize her scent.
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how could you tell that Crescentia wasnt human? i didnt think there were any clues besides when he comments on how strong she was...also, he hasnt ever had werewolf blood, he just recognizes the scent--at least he's supposed to.

and thank you for the review. dont worry, i'm not taking anything from underworld and if it resembles it at all it will be only at the base level of "boy meets girl". that kind of stuff
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Well its sounds very interesting the writing itself was quite enjoyable.
About Crecentia it was nothing really obvious just the fact that she seemed to have some sort of effect on him. My first thought was thta she was some kind of hunter, I did not think werewolf
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oh thats really interesting. i didnt intend it to be a supernatural type of pull but that definitely works too. i'll be posting the second chapter tomorrow or the next day. keep reading!
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That was great! i really liked the end!
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yayayayaa im sooo glad im getting responses to this story!!! please keep reading and i'll post the next chapter tomorrow or the next day!!


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~*~Lavender Rose~*~

Chapter 2


We stood there, staring each other down. How the hell could I have let that slip by unnoticed? Was I losing my touch? Impossible! Vampires don’t change over the years. Our senses don’t degenerate with age like the useless humans walking around. Then why didn’t I notice sooner?


“Tia?”


We both turned our attention to see where her name had been called from. A tall, tan man with light blond hair and dark brown eyes approached us. Another werewolf. The scent on him was strong.


“What the hell is going on here?” I heard the man ask, venom seeping through his words.


“Nothing Tom, don’t worry about it,” Crescentia said with a sigh.


“It’s my job to worry about it,” Tom replied, gently smoothing dark brown hair away from her face. I watched as she flinched slightly, barely noticeable. Of course werewolves have good eyesight and reflexes, but nothing compared to a vampires. I was positive this Tom person hadn’t seen Crescentia’s reaction to his touch.


I smirked slightly at the scene in front of me, “Well, I’ll leave you two lovers alone. I have more pressing issues to attend to,” with that I turned on my heel and walked out of the alley.
I glanced behind one time, totally out of character for me. I saw Crescentia’s face, her big green eyes looking troubled. I felt my features soften at her obvious distress. Then I looked over and noticed Tom glaring at me. I smirked again and turned back around. I needed to get home. This day has been weird enough as it is.


I quickly made my way back to my apartment in mid-town. I walked into the twenty-second-floor apartment, threw my keys on the table near the door and let my self sink into my couch in the living room.


My apartment wasn’t large or magnificent. Of course I had the money to get a nicer apartment; I just didn’t feel the need for it. All I require is one room and enough space to hold my belongings, which weren’t much. When one travels around the way I do, you learn to not hold on to much. Besides, it’s not like any of it has sentimental value to me. I’m not sentimental in the least.


I heaved myself off the couch and walked into the bedroom in the back of the apartment. I wasn’t physically tired, it is impossible for a vampire to feel that. Instead, I was mentally exhausted. Fighting with my brain isn’t something I do regularly and I don’t plan to do often. I walked into my bedroom, past the piles of discarded clothing and finally made it over to my king size bed. I am not one for tidying up after myself, and I don’t ever have visitors so what is the sense in keeping my apartment clean?


I lay down on the black, down comforter—thankfully my bed was clear of debris. Leaning my head back on my folded hands, I let my mind wander. How could I have not noticed what Crescentia was? The smell of a werewolf is usually very distinct. I should have smelt her the second I walked into the club and then avoided her at all costs.\


It wasn’t that I was afraid of werewolves—my kind isn’t afraid of any other supernatural creatures. Rather, vampires and werewolves don’t…get along to put it mildly. As a rule, we try to avoid each other at all costs, lest whatever building we meet up in comes crashing down around our heads. It has happened before.


As I let my mind wander some more, I began thinking about Crescentia. The way the over head lights of red, purple, and blue had illuminated the highlights in her brown hair.


The way her body felt against mine, swaying to the music blaring out of the speakers.


The way her lips formed the words she spoke.


Her voice. All night it had been so soft and gentle, like a soft breeze. If I hadn’t been so close to her, I might not have heard (or have been able to hang on to) every word she spoke. I allowed myself that one thought. After all I will never see her again.


I suddenly remembered the look of disgust in her eyes when she spat ‘Vampire’ earlier in the alley. Those eyes that were so expressive and deep, I was lost in them only moments after having looked. The color, such a beautiful, clear, green, they almost seemed unnatural. What am I saying? She is unnatural! She’s a werewolf for fuck’s sake! That’s it, I’m cutting myself off.


I rose from my bed and walked over to my expensive stereo system in the corner of the room. I pressed the power button and the harsh sound of a screaming guitar met my eardrums. I smiled to myself; there was no way I would be able to think through this. With that, I walked over to the bed and lay down, perfectly content to sleep through the day.


~*~*~*~*~*~


When I awoke, hours later, the sun was still in the sky though it was slowly beginning setting. The sun didn’t bother us; it’s just that we look so unnatural in the bright light that humans are often scared of our appearance. There are a lot of vampires that have normal sleeping habits, but I don’t care to jump around from shadow to shadow just to walk in the daylight. I have always preferred the night anyway.


I rolled over the side of the bed, landing gracefully on my feet. Walking past the stereo, I pressed the power button to turn off the blaring music, grabbing a towel off the floor as I left my room.


I walked down the hallway to my simple bathroom, intent on taking a shower before I began my night. I was already hungry.


Once I got in the shower though, the thoughts of my hunger melted away with the hot water. Before I even began washing, I stood in the shower for a long time, just letting the water run over my sculpted body.


My mind, without my permission, wandered back to Crescentia. I slammed my fist into the shower wall hard enough to crack one of the white tiles. I looked down at the water running through the drain. I need to stop. I reached out and turned the long, slanted handle to the left as far as it would go. Hopefully the excess of hot water will be enough to clear my mind.


I let myself bask in the heat of the water a little while longer, then washed my body and hair before turning the water off and stepping out. I picked up my oversized, dark blue towel and rubbed it on my hair before wrapping it around my waist.


I walked over to the mirror hanging above the sink and peered at my pale white complexion. Besides my dark, curly, brown hair, it was obvious I was of the Arian race. I was endowed with the slightly pointed nose, sharp jaw lines, and defined cheeks. I even used to have blue eyes—before I was changed.


I blinked a few times, getting my thoughts back in order before I brushed my teeth and left the bathroom. I made my way back to my bedroom and started rummaging through the piles of clothing, looking for something suitable to wear. I finally decided on a pair of light blue jeans and a light blue button down shirt. I carefully rolled up the sleeves to about my elbow and put on my black boots. I stood in front of my full length mirror, admiring the outfit I put together. There was a small list of things I actually cared about, and my appearance was one of them.


I smirked at my reflection in the mirror and ran my hand through my slightly damp hair. I looked around my apartment, got bored, and decided to start my night early. Grabbing my black leather jacket and my keys, I left the apartment and began walking the Manhattan streets.


It was mid-November, and the weather had already begun to chill in New York. There were the usual crowds of people walking hurriedly down the streets. Sometimes I wondered why everyone was in such a rush. Humans hurry everyday and for what? They are only hurrying to their inevitable death. Why would one want to rush that? I suppose I had a slightly different view on things since I was never going to die.


I wandered the streets for a few more hours, vaguely looking for my first meal of the night. I noticed a shopping cart full of random dirty cloths and other such things. I knew a bum couldn’t be too far off. Walking up to the cart I found the old man slouched on the ground near a few garbage cans.
He was wearing a large dark blue jacket that had duct tape all over it, presumably as patches. The jeans he wore were acid-washed, with tears and dirt covering them. His skin was very tan and wrinkled. It looked like he had been down on his luck for a while now. No matter. I was here to put him out of his misery.


I crouched down by the old man who looked like he was still sleeping off a hangover. I pulled the collar of his jacket down so I could see his pulse beat through the wrinkled skin of his neck. I suddenly became too hungry to wait. Leaning over him I arched my neck so it was closer to his before I gently broke the skin with my teeth. I felt the thick, luscious blood run over my palate and down my throat. I could taste alcohol in his blood but it didn’t matter, the slight buzz I would get would only last a few minutes at most. A few moments later and I had sucked the man completely dry. I bit my tongue until it bled, letting my blood spill onto his wounds. I sat back and watched as the bite marks faded away. The man had never even stirred.


I stood up, readjusted my cloths and turned around without a second glance. Now that I was feeling better, I decided to just walk and see where it took me. I could have taken a cab, or a subway, or even ran for a human would never be able to see me run if I was at my top speed—I would simply be too fast. Instead, I liked to walk and observe the life around me. Even though humans meant nothing to me, it still amused me to watch them go about living their menial lives. None of them even had a clue as to what was walking down the street next to them.


Suddenly I heard the faint beats of some kind of rock music near me. I let my feet move me closer to the sound. When I was finally outside, I froze on the sidewalk. This was the same club that I was at last night. What if Crescentia was here? I can’t go in. Wait, why the hell am I running from her? I’ve been going to this club for years. No stupid little wolf is going to ruin that. Besides, what are the odds that she would be here two nights in a row?


I walked up to the bouncer that knew me and walked through the line of velvet rope. Once inside, I heard the hypnotic sounds of some kind of gothic music playing. I faintly remembered that they had theme nights here.
I quickly scanned the crowd to make sure there were no familiar faces before I dove into the mass of bodies. I didn’t have to wander far before I saw a girl with curly blond hair, black leather pants and a red tank top on, waving me over. God, I really had a thing for blonde's.


I slowly made my way over to her and put my hands on her hips, spinning her around to face away from me. I didn’t want anything from this girl but a dance. Her little hips were certainly agile, but she didn’t exactly flow with the music that well. I tightened my grip on her in the hopes of directing her movement more. It worked for the time being and I watched as she slowly raised her arms above her head, letting them sway with the music.


Even though I had my own dance partner, I continued to scan the crowd. As a rule, a bachelor never settles. I looked around at all of the bodies, swaying, thumping, grinding to the music playing. Their skin, no matter what color, was gleaming with the multicolored lights from above.


“Listen Buddy, I suggest you keep your hands to yourself.”


Wait, that sounded just like…


“I’m not going to tell you again! Back. Off.”


In the next instant, I was weaving my way through the crowd, trying to make my way to the back of the club where I had heard her voice.
Suddenly, I came upon a tall, skinny guy with dirty blond hair. His back was toward me and from this angle I could tell that Crescentia was pinned up against the wall.


Anger flowed through me as I stormed up to the guy. I put my hand on his shoulder and ripped him backward, sending him flying onto his back. I turned my back to Crescentia and glared down at him.


“Don’t you know, that when a lady says stop, you stop?” I asked in a low growl.


The guy stood up dusting himself off. “Hey Pal, this doesn’t have anything to do with you. Mind your own fuckin’ business,” he retorted.


I slowly walked over to him, my face just inches from his, “She is my fucking business.”


The guy seemed to sense that he was in way over his head. He held up his hands and took a few steps back. “Fine man, whatever,” he said as he retreated back into the group of dancers.


I took a deep breath and pinched the bridge of my nose between my two fingers. What the hell was with men these days? No one knows how to respect a lady anymore…


“Lukas?”


I turned around to see Crescentia looking back at me with her big, beautiful green eyes. “Are you alright?” I sighed.


“Yeah, I’m fine. I could have handled him; I just didn’t want to get too angry. It’s not all that much fun, Turning in a room full of humans.”


I quietly chuckled at her nonchalant tone. “Yes, I can see where that might be a problem,” I told her. As she stared back at me, I found myself lost in the depths of her eyes once more.


“Thank you Lukas,” she said quietly, putting her small hand on my hard chest. I wanted to back away from her touch. Most people, who aren’t vampires themselves, find us to be so foreign. I wasn’t used to someone with a pulse wanting to be so close to me without being hypnotized.


I smiled down at her, “Es war nichts, Schonheit,” I replied softly. Just then I heard the opening notes of a familiar “Adema” song. I stood there, gazing into Crescentia’s eyes, listening to the lyrics:


Will you, walk me
To the edge again



I suddenly shook my head, trying to clear it. I smiled once more down at her. She smiled back but then a confused look clouded her emerald eyes, “Um, yeah so I guess I’ll see you around?”

Shaking, lonely, and I am drinking again
Woke up tonight and no one's here with me



She side stepped me and began to walk away back into the crowd of dancers. Without thinking, I reached out and grabbed her elbow. She whipped back around and stared at me, confused again.

I'm giving in to you



“Would you like to dance Crescentia?” She simply smiled and led me into the middle of the dance floor.


Take me under
I'm giving in to you



She turned around once she found us a spot to dance. I put my hands on her hips and gently pulled her closer to me while she wrapped her arms around my neck.

I'm dying tonight
I'm giving in to you



We were moving our hips together, slowly in time with the music. I couldn’t pull my eyes away from hers. Suddenly she smiled and laid her head on my chest.

Watch me crumble
I'm giving in to you



I froze for a small second before relaxing again and pulling her closer. I craned my neck and buried my face in her hair, running my fingers through the ends.

I'm crying tonight
I'm giving in to you



We swayed slowly to the music, our bodies moving together perfectly. A million thoughts were running through my mind but only one came into focus—this feels so good.


Caught up, in life
Losing all my friends



I felt her pull back suddenly, studying my face. I furrowed my eyebrows in confusion having stopped dancing when she pulled away. Suddenly I watched her eyes become clear, focused as she leaned up toward me…


Family has tried, to heal all my addictions


A second after I realized what she was going to do, I pulled back sharply. I watched as she slowly took a step back from me. The look of hurt in her beautiful green eyes was too much for me. I quickly turned around and began making my way out of the club.



Tragic it seems, to be alone again
I'm giving in to you



Oh, shut the fuck up! I growled under my breath as I stormed my way outside. What the fuck was I thinking? I never should have asked her to dance. That was a big mistake. The bigger mistake though, was letting myself be swayed like that. And then she almost kissed me?! Well if I want to be honest with myself, I almost kissed her back—but I don’t want to be honest. Fuck that.


I was stomping my way through the almost deserted streets, not paying attention to where I was walking. No matter, I knew this city like the back of my hand. There’ no way I could get lost.


Suddenly I felt something or someone bump into my chest. I looked down on a mess of curly black hair. The young girl looked up at me. Her eyes were painted black, contrasting greatly with the light pallor of her skin. For a human, she was extremely pale. She was wearing a torn black zip-up sweatshirt and baggy jeans.


Without thinking I locked my eyes onto her big brown ones and told her to walk into the alley we were near. She obeyed me and once I got there, I roughly pushed away her messy hair and sank my teeth into her neck. For the first time in two days, my thoughts were clear. There was only one thing on my mind: blood.


I drank until she was completely dry, and then covered up her wound with my blood. I dropped her unceremoniously onto the wet pavement and turned to leave. For some unknown reason I stopped and looked back at her. Her sleeves had been pushed up to her elbows and from where I was standing I could see faint pink lines running up and down her arms. Here and there were even scabbed lines. I looked up at her face once more. This girl couldn’t have been older than fifteen.


I stumbled backward out of the alley, tripping over my own feet in the process. I caught myself and began running toward my apartment. I made it there a few moments later, thanks to my vampiric speed. I staggered into my living room and sank onto the overstuffed couch. There was a sinking feeling in the bottom of my stomach. After some thought, I identified the feeling. This must be the week of resurrecting old feelings because this is one I haven’t felt in decades: regret. I then covered my face with my hands.


“Was habe ich getan?”



**Translations:
Es war nichts, Schonheit: It was nothing, Beauty.
Was habe ich getan?: What have I done?
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Yeah, I definetly liked your first part and really liked your second part. Basically I like the whole thing so far. Good job so far .
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thank you i'm glad someone got to this and bumped it again.
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Very interesting, really liked it. More of that please!
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Once more I truly enjoyed. Ah forbidden love, is there anything sweeter.
By the way I love Adema great use, now the sing is stuck in my head
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Hi, Heather! I admit when I first started reading this I was a little skeptical, but I grew to like it more the more I read!

*sigh* I thought I was being really original when I wrote my own version of boy-meets girl vamp/were fic (if you don't believe me, feel free to check the datestamp on this thread) but now someone else has done it too!

Fortunately though, yours has a more adult-orientated feel to it than mine, and it's set in modern-day america! ;P

Which brings me to my original point, which is that "Non-traditional vampires have, ironically, become the new tradition". If you do plan to carry on with this (which I hope you do), be extra careful to steer well clear of any cliches.


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booker41: thank you, i'll be mosting more either tonight or tomorrow sometime.

shraga: thank you so much, and yeah, i LOVE that song and i just thought it fit perfectly. i hope you continue to read.

mashowasho: yes, i know there are a lot of cliche's that i could fall a victim to but my goal is to try my best to steer clear. of course, this being a romance, it is almost impossible to not have any cliches. one of my main objectives however, has been to make Lukas surprise my readers. just when you think he will do something, he will do the opposite. that is what im going for and hopefully i'll be successful. i hope you continue to read.
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