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Old 02-08-2008, 12:04 PM   #1
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Duo of destiny prologue

(Prologue-)

Jake Kanime awoke from his comfortable slumber excited and full of energy. He couldn’t wait to go to the park and shoot some hoops for his first day of summer. School was now out and Jake had freedom in the palm of his hands. Jake stepped into the bathroom, shaking off the left over drowsiness that still dwelled in him. He glanced into the mirror and looked over his features. He had blond hair and a pair of odd green colored eyes. He was an average height for most nine year old boys and he was quite skinny. He always wondered why his eye color took on the odd green; but when he asked his Mrs. Kanime, his mom; she would give him the same response; you’re too young to understand about these things, maybe I’ll tell you when you’re older. “Jake, breakfast is ready!” his mom’s voice called causing him to snap out of his daydream about the color of his eyes.
“Be right down” Jake answered as he grabbed his shiny red toothbrush. On the long brown table, there were Jake’s favorite breakfast foods; a large stack of blueberry pancakes and a neatly peeled orange. “Thanks mom” Jake said as he stabbed into the pancakes with his silver fork.
“Anything for my favorite little man” praised Mrs. Kanime as she tossed the hot greasy pan into the sink. Mrs. Kanime had nice and soft brown hair, the shape of a super model and of course those odd green eyes. She was always known as a mysterious woman who was hardly ever seen. She spent most of her day reading mysterious red books and waiting for her husband to get home. Jessica is her first name and David is Mr. Kanime’s first name. But what most people wonder about it why Jake’s eyes color doesn’t take on the mixture of David’s blue and Jessica’s weird green.
Jake quickly scoffed down the delicious and savory of the blueberry pancakes and then hurried into the living room to watch his favorite cartoon, the “flash blasters.” While Jake was tuned into his show, Jessica observed the kitchen. It was a pretty huge kitchen, with a few unused brooms and mops sitting in the corner gathering dust. There was a large stack of dirty dishes such as plates with spaghetti sauce or cups with left over soda in them, all resting in the belly of the sink.
“Looks like I’m going to have to do something about this mess” Jessica thought to herself. She then held out her right hand towards a corner of the kitchen. All of sudden, a light blue aura began to flow around it. She then looked at the huge pile of dirty dishes and whispered, “Dishes become clean.” Suddenly every pan, every cup, and every plate that slept in the sink became spotless. They glowed like mirrors allowing you to see the reflection of a beautiful row of red roses which danced through the gardens of the bright window. But mysterious Jessica wasn’t done yet. She aimed her aura-dancing hand toward the center of the kitchen and aimed at the dirt-tracked floor. “Floors become mopped and let this entire kitchen become spotless.” The floors as well as the kitchen suddenly filled with gleam of the dancing rays which slumbered as a scene of sparkle and cleanliness.
The “flash blasters” cartoon finally ended. Jake walked into the kitchen, on his way to his room and suddenly came to a pause. “Whoa!” he thought, “how does mom clean this kitchen so fast. There’s just no way!” He then let his thoughts melt in the back of his head and scurried into his room to put on his favorite pair of sneakers. He then stood up and imitated a kick move from his favorite super hero, Captain Flash, of the “flash blasters,” then hurried in the backyard to play. The weather outside was nice and sunny. The birds were chirping and the butterflies were racing. Carefree breezes would blow occasionally which give that nice and tickly feeling which would fill your body and cause you to relax. After jumping on his large trampoline that his mom mysteriously got for free, Jake decided he wanted to practice some of his martial arts in which he learned from his class he took during the school year. His mom had signed him up for the class for him to learn the art of self-defense, knowing that for some weird reason, he could beat the pulp out of his classmates anyway if they were to bother him. Jake’s martial arts varied from Kung Fu to basic karate. He took on a meditation stance in which he stayed perfectly calm and humble. He then practiced a few punches, some cross kicks, and then his favorite move: the dragon kick. His dragon kick is a kick that consist of a lot of power in which Jake weirdly haves. Suddenly an idea flashed through Jake’s mind like lightning from a thunder cloud. He decided he wanted to imitate a move off of “flash blasters.” He held his hands out towards his tree house that hung perfectly on top of a giant oak tree and yelled “flash blast!” All of sudden, a bright white burst of energy flashed from his hands and destroyed his entire tree house. “Ah!” hollered Jake as he fell backwards and onto the ground. “What is this?” he thought as he stared at his hands. “What’s going on?”
Jake’s heart continued to beat fast due to fear. He was breathing hard and couldn’t create a single thought; but as seconds passed, he managed to calm down just enough to think over his situation. He stood up from the ground and began pacing back and forth. “What should I do? What should I do?” his thoughts screamed at him as he continued to pace. Jake felt like he had been struck by lightning. He had a very hard time concentrating his thoughts to figure out a solution. This incident reminded him of the time he made a “D” on his language arts test in which he had to figure a way out of showing his mom, or otherwise risk being grounded. He couldn’t throw it way due to the fact his teacher always informed parents on upcoming test which almost made getting out of showing your parents your test grade nearly impossible. However, Jake decided to throw away his test anyway and then wanted to make an attempt to lie to his mom. Unfortunately for him, Jessica somehow knew the exact grade he made and busted him the second he flew through the door. From that day, he still wondered how his mom knew that. The phone wasn’t working for the day because the company was installing new features which meant the teacher couldn’t have delivered a phone call. But yet she still knew every question he missed and why. Jake quickly shook off his bad memory and resumed thinking of a way to solve his solution. “Should I tell mom?” thought Jake, “wait… I can’t, she might think I tore down the tree house for fun and trying to play it off by pretending to have super powers.” Jake suddenly tripped over a smooth gray rock, falling flat on his face! “Ow” groaned Jake as he slowly stood back up on his feet. “That’s it” he thought, “I’m going to keep my powers a secret. If I tell anyone that I’m a….. Super hero, then they might think I’m a freak.” Suddenly Jake heard his mom’s voice calling him in a worried sound.
“Jake, you’re awfully quiet; is everything alright?” But just before Jake had the chance to come up with a lie, Jessica was already at the scene. “Honey, what happened to your tree house?” she asked in a soft voice. A small and unnoticeable roll of sweat made its way down Jake’s cheek. Immediately, Jake managed to come up with a lie.
“When I tried to climb the ladder, it just came apart!”
Jessica gave Jake a puzzled look. “Are you sure? Is there anything you want to share with me?”
“This is exactly what happened mom, I swear!” defended Jake.
“You don’t have to get all defensive” Jessica sighed as she observed the remains of the destroyed tree house. “Jake, go back in the house and wash that dirt off of your face.” Obeying that command, Jake dashed into the bathroom he brushed his teeth earlier in and looked into the mirror.
“How did dirt get on my face?” he whispered to himself, “that’s strange.” He quickly washed his face and then ran back outside which then; he stopped dead in his tracks. Observing the backyard once again; on top the oak tree, he found the tree house rebuilt and restored to its exact original form. “My tree house is fixed!?!” Jake questioned Jessica in a freak out voice, “bu… but… how? How that….fast?”
“No need to worry about that” Jessica said as she stretched her arms out from exhaustion. “I want you to go to the park and play for a while. You know, shoot some hoops like you normally do, so that you can make the basketball team next year.”
“Okay mom” confirmed Jake as he grabbed his basketball from by the trampoline. Immediately he started down Plum Street toward the park. As he walked down the car-less street, he stared at his hands. “I know I’m a super hero” thought Jake, “I just know.” As he neared the park, he spotted a skinny brown haired girl, about the same age as him, being bullied by a small gang of boys. He listened to the conversation as he neared.
“Where’s the money you owe us, little girl!” scowled the boy that seemed to be the leader.
“I don’t owe you any money!” defended the girl.
“I wouldn’t care if you did or you don’t, I want the money you have NOW!” Jake quickly rushed towards the scene and in front of the girl.
“Hey, leave her alone!” Jake roared at the gang leader.
“How about you butt out!” boomed the gang leader, “you’ll live longer.” He then turned back towards the gang.
“Let’s beat her up” he suggested to the gang.
“Yeah!” cheered the gang in agreement.
“I warned you” vowed Jake, “don’t bother her anymore.” The entire gang turned to Jake and stared in two seconds of silence and then laughed at him. After a few seconds of laughter, they quickly turned back around and hurdled up for a discussion. Jake turned to the girl who was brushing off the remains of the dirt from when the gang leader pushed her down. When he observed the girl, she had the same odd green eyes as him! “What’s your name?” Jake asked the girl politely. At first she hesitated to speak but then she realized that Jake was a helping hand and not a gang member trying to fake it out.
“It’s Lina” she answered in a sweet voice.
“My name’s Jake.” Suddenly the gang interrupted Jake’s new friend moment.
“Hey kid, why didn’t you just go home?” reaped the gang leader. “This is your last chance, go home or get beat up with her.” Jake took a defensive martial artic fighting stance, giving the leader a warning that he refuses to back off. The gang leader chuckled. “I guess this little wimp chooses to get beat up.” The gang leader charged toward Jake and made an attempt to punch Jake in his face. Jake easily dodged the punch and countered with a kick strong enough to knock the gang leader onto the ground. “This kid is strong” moaned the gang leader. “You idiots stop watching and help –let’s attack in numbers!” The entire gang charged after Jake as if there was no tomorrow. Jake quickly thought to himself.
Should I use the flash blast or not? Naww, I think it’s best to keep it a secret like captain flash did.”
Jake then took a jump over the entire gang then trip-kicked each one of them causing to fall painfully on their backs.
“He’s too good!” yelped the gang leader, “I’m out of here!” The gang leader quickly ran off followed by the rest of his gang.
“Wow!” cheered Lina, “You’re amazing! Where did you learn to fight like that?”
“During the school year, I have martial art class after school” answered Jake.
“I like you” Lina said in a complimentary voice, “wanna be friends?
“Sure” replied Jake, “How about coming to my house to play? Mom would love to know that I made a cool new friend.”
“Okay” agreed Lina.
The new friends started down Plum Street. As they were walking, Jake kept a secret observe on Lina. He couldn’t get her eye color off of his mind. He’d quickly turn his head if he felt like Lina was about to turn her head towards his direction. Jake made another attempt to steal another glance but this time he was caught! Lina however just started up another conversation to get to know Jake more, which gave Jake the chance to figure out why was her eye color the same as his. “You know, you have a big staring problem” Lina laughed.
“What are you talking about?” Jake quickly defended.
“I could see you ‘stealing’ glances” she bragged. “I know I’m beautiful but you don’t have to stare like that.”
“Actually, I was wondering about your eye color” confessed Jake, “it’s the same as mine.”
“I really don’t know why eye color is like this” Lina explained softy, “but I assume it’s the eye color my parents had had before they died.”
“Oh…” groaned Jake, “I’m sorry for bringing that up.”
“Its okay” Lina said with a semi smile, “you did nothing wrong.”
After five minutes of walking, the duo finally arrived at Jake's house. He immediately led Lina into the door and towards the living room. Jessica quickly put away a strange red book upon spotting Jake coming through the passageway.
“Mom, I would like you to meet my new friend; Lina” announced Jake.
“Hi” greeted Lina in her usual sweet voice.
“Well, how are you” Jessica returned the friendly greet. She then stood up from the softness of the sofa. “How about having some chocolate chip cookies I’ve baked, be right back.” Jessica immediately hurried into the kitchen and took out a pan that was resting peacefully in the cabinets. She aimed one hand at the pan and said, “Chocolate chip cookies appear.” All of sudden, the pan was overflowing with fresh and steamy chocolate chip cookies. She then hurried back into the living room and handed the duo each a cookie. “Feel free to dig in” she insisted as she sat the pan on a nearby table.
“Thanks” Lina confirmed in a polite voice.
“You’re welcome” replied Jessica in the same manner.
Suddenly Jessica became shocked as she observed Lina. She noticed the color of her eyes –it had the odd green hue. “This must be the work of Deston, the one who guards destiny” thought Jessica. “Lina, do you live around here somewhere?”
“I live just around the corner on Lilly Street” replied Lina.
“What are the names of your parents?”
“My parents have died a long time ago –I stay with my Aunt Becky now.”
“I’m sorry to here that?” replied Jessica.
“It’s okay.”
“Well, I have to run some errands, so I’m leaving you two alone for a while” Jessica announced snatching her car keys off of the table with a cookie pan on it. “I’ll be back as soon as possible.”
After Jessica drove off, Jake invited Lina into the backyard to play. They played inside Jake’s newly rebuilt tree house for a few minutes until Jake felt like he wanted to reveal something. He climbed down the ladder of the house, followed by Lina.
“Lina” he said softly, “can I tell you a secret?”
“Sure” replied Lina, “I promise not to tell anyone.”
“Well,” Jake started, “I’m a… super hero.”
“Well you are” said Lina. “The way you beat all five of those bullies to same me was definitely heroic.”
“Actually” exclaimed Jake, “I really have super powers!”
Lina looked at Jake and then burst into laughter.
“Are we playing a game or something?” she cooed.
“If you don’t believe, then I’m going to prove it” Jake said calmly. He took some wood that was lying beside the giant oak tree and began stacking them up into a large pile. “Watch and learn” he said in confidence. He aimed both of his hands at the stack of wood then took a deep breath and exhaled to get rid of any nervousness that quietly napped within him. “FLASH BLAST!” he shouted. All of suddenly, the white bright burst of energy returned, shot out from Jake’s hands and completely destroyed the stack of wood. Lina’s eyes turned huge and her mouth flung wide open. Her heart nearly skipped a beat and she began to feel freaked out. “Y… you…weren’t….lying” she muttered. “How…did you do that?”
“I told you” bragged Jake, “I’m a super hero.”
Lina sat on the ground and began catching her breath. After a few seconds, she managed to regain her composure to speak.
“Jake, why do you have super powers?” she asked.
“I really don’t know” he explained, “I have the same powers like Captain Flash from “flash blasters.’
“Flash blasters?” Lina said confusedly, “Never heard of that TV show.”
“It comes on channel one every morning” replied Jake.
Lina gave Jake a puzzled look.
“Channel one is an all day news channel; there’s no way it could ever be on that channel.”
“Well maybe my TV is just different” Jake said calmly.
“It’s the only explanation” agreed Lina.
Jake signed letting out any tiredness that dwelled within him at that moment.
“Lina how old are you?” he asked as he made his way to the trampoline.
“I’m nine” Lina replied as she followed him.
“Cool, so am I” said Jake. “I’ve never seen you at school though.”
“I just moved here three days ago” explained Lina, “Aunt Becky allowed me to stay home since there was no point of going to a new school on the last three days.”
All of sudden, Jessica’s car pulled up and she immediately rushed out.
“Jake…” she weaped in tears, “your grandpa has been killed…”

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