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Old 01-09-2008, 03:16 AM   #1
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Hell's Awakening

Hey everyone, this is the first story i have ever attempted writing really. Its about 5 years old and it was modified overtime. Since its so old, the writing style is a bit weird since i was inexperienced at the time of this writing. It looks so hideous, but i love this story a lot. If you are able, tell me a way i can edit this easily. I hope you enjoy!


Hell's Awakening (Totally Unfinished)

Long ago in a land of corrupted might called Mertogos (Mert-Ah-Goss) there was a tyrannical leader by the name of Ghastrum. Who ruled his kingdom with an iron fist, he was always torturing or imprisoning people of his kingdom. One day he was told from one of his soldiers that there was a book he had obtained from the house of a warlock. It told of two powers hidden throughout the world. This is what the book said:

"One dark, One light. These powers were so powerful that if anyone got a hold of one of the powers, he would be unstoppable. He would be capable of amazing feats. With the power of Light you could create virtually anything, With the power of Darkness you could destroy the very fabric of space and time itself. However dont think that just because its light and dark they are categorized as good and evil. If someone with the power of light is evil he will continue to be evil, If someone with the power of darkness is good then he will continue to be good. However be cautious for the "Evil One", who could be residing with any of these powers. If you take a power that has the "Evil One" linked with it he will overtake you."

Lord Ghastrum liked the idea of more power and couldnt care less about some "Evil One". Because either way he was who he was. He went in search of this power.....However another king wanted this power as well.

In the kingdom called Issara(E-Sahr-Ah), the ruler, Dremadia was lord. He had been told the tales of the two powers by his father, Lord Sixarba (See-Arb-Ah). Unlike Ghastrum, Lord Dremadia was a very kind king who cared for his kingdom. For 6 years he has ruled this kingdom, with the sudden death of his father. Dremadia was only 27 years old and he was taking care of Issara well. Now as he sits on his throne he looks out and Mertogos soldiers are seen marching towards Issara.

Dremadia-"Now is the time"
Dremadia-"I have to protect my kingdom"

*Dremadia is now remembering what happened as his father was dying six years ago*

Dremadia-"FATHER!!"
Sixarba-"Son, you have to take care of Issara now, its in your hands"
Dremadia-"Father...I cant im not that strong....Im still weak!"
Sixarba-"Ofcourse you can, you have to train up and get stronger, otherwise this kingdom might be finished"
Dremadia-"Yes i will...."
Sixarba-"Listen son, There will be an attack on Issara in exactly 6 years time!"
Dremadia-"How do you know that!"
Sixarba-"Lets just say i dabbled in something i wasnt supposed to"
Dremadia-"Will i win!?"
Sixarba-"That depends on you. On that day you will also recieve a great power, but at a great price. What that price is i dont know"
Sixarba-"Here take this..."
Dremadia-"The most holy relic in all of Issara!!?"
Sixarba-"Yes, the Issarian blade "Luminous Darkness", promise me you will use it well and only when you need to"
Dremadia-"Yes...I promise"
Sixarba-"I must leave you now, i love you son"
Dremadia-"NO dont go yet, stay longer!!"
Sixarba-"I must......make me proud"
Dremadia-"No Fa...Father......Father,Father,Father......FAAATHE R NOO DONT GOOOO!!"
*Back to present time*

Dremadia-"I remember now father...i WILL make you proud!"
Issarian soldier-"Lord Dremadia, Mertogos soldiers are now attacking!!"
Dremadia-"Unleash all forces!!"
Issarian soldier-"Right away!"

As Dremadia walked outside the castle he saw hundreds of people battling in his kingdom. Men, Women, and Children being slaughtered without remorse.

Dremadia-"This beautiful kingdom is being brought down to its knees"
Dremadia-"Im going to fight too!!"

Dremadia pulled out the sword his father gave him, Luminous Darkness, and decided to do battle.
One after another soldiers fell at Dremadia's might. The battle seemed to last awhile, when the soldiers realized they werent winning they brought out an ogre they had been breeding, it was almost 5 times his size. Brought out in chains they unleashed it upon Dremadia. The creature attacked Dremadia's soldiers and killed relentlessly. It used his huge sword to cut them asunder. One after another they died, blood everywhere. Dremadia was angered by this and as the creature was finished killing the soldiers attacking, he looked at Dremadia who was clearly angry. It grinned and swung at him with his massive sword, Dremadia dodged the swing, and stabbed the beast. The beast let out a huge roar, then he tried to slam his sword vertically on Dremadia to cut him in half.

*Dremadia dodged it, flipped onto his sword and ran up to the hilt, jumped and decapitated the creature*

The ogre fell with a loud noise. The Mertogos soldiers saw this and retreated. Everyone cheered as the soldiers ran out of the kingdom. With Dremadia not only proclaimed Lord but also the savior of the land.

Issarian Chief-"Lord Dremadia, we found a very mysterious cave!"
Dremadia-"Where!?"
Issarian Chief-"Underneath Vlitt Falls m'lord"

Dremadia reached the mysterious cave underneath Vlitt Falls. He saw inscriptions on the cave walls.

Dremadia-"I somewhat recognize these inscriptions..."
Dremadia-"One seems to read 'Surrender'....The other one says, AAAHH!!"

*Dremadia was stabbed in the back*

Mysterious Voice-"HAHAHA, Well if it isnt King Dremadia, i KNEW you would come here!"
Dremadia-"Ghastrum, YOU ATTACKED MY KINGDOM YOU DOG!"
King Ghastrum-"HAHA, stop your flattering!"
Dremadia-"I wasnt flattering you, you idiot!"
King Ghastrum-"I thought you would come to this place, you see this is the place with unlimited power"
Dremadia-"This is the place my father told me about!"
King Ghastrum-"I didnt plan on you living this long, i thought for sure my ogre could kill you."
Dremadia-"You should know im not that weak you sick freak!"
King Ghastrum-"Well obviously you are, your wounded and cant do a thing"
King Ghastrum-"Time to die, maybe you'll meet your father in Hell!"
Dremadia-"NOOOO!!"

At that moment King Ghastrum was thrown out of the cave, and a huge stone door shut him out.

Dremadia-"What was that!?"
Dremadia-"What just happened!?"

Dremadia crawled around the cave to look at the inscriptions, he recognized them because his father taught him the language.

Dremadia-"It says 'Surender'....'Your'..........'Life'.......'To'... ....'Me'."
Dremadia-"Surrender you life to me?"
Dremadia-"What does THAT mean!?"
Voice-"SURRENDER YOUR LIFE TO ME!"
Dremadia-"Who's there!?"
Voice"SURRENDER YOUR LIFE TO ME!"
Dremadia-"What do you mean!?"
Voice-'IF YOU WANT UNLIMITED POWER, SURRENDER YOUR LIFE TO ME!"
Dremadia-"This is what my father told me about!"
Dremadia-"But how do i know this is the power of light!?"
Voice-"YOU CAN EITHER TRUST IN ME OR ROT IN THIS CAVE!"
Dremadia-"Well i will bleed to death if i stay here any longer"
Dremadia-"I surrender my life to you!!"
Voice-"YOU ARE GRANTED UNLIMITED POWER......THE POWER OF DARKNESS!"
Dremadia-"You said this was the cave of light!!"
Voice-"I NEVER SAID THAT, I SAID TRUST IN ME!"
Voice-"YOU WILL BECOME DARKNESS, THE MOST POWERFUL BEING IN THIS UNIVERSE, NO ONE WILL BEAT YOU, YOU WILL BE UNSTOPPABLE, YOU WILL BECOME "JUDGEMENT EDEN"!!"
Voice-"YOUR MINE NOW!"

I felt as if i was losing myself to something, something evil. My mind was racing from thought to thought, trying to filter out the mess. I couldnt...I couldnt regain myself.

Surely...this is the end of me, to be driven to madness and despair by some unknown force.

Dremadia-"Why, why father..did..I...have..to..search....for..power!?"

It felt as if my own soul was being ripped apart.

Dremadia-"What is going to happen to Issara!?"

After i asked that question, i came to the realization that i no longer care for Issara.

*2000 years later*

Suddenly i awoke from my "incubation" period. I stood around dazed and could barely walk. I came out of my own abyss, my prison, to get more powerful. My name is Eden, Judgement of the Dusk and soon...the Void. Dremadia is now apart of me, i can sense his feelings and attitude getting more dark by the moment. He was the catalyst i needed to become the supreme being. Of course, before i do that there are..."obstacles" in my way. And the obstacles are the seven "Judgements". I need to overthrow them, but how?

Eden-"Im going to the surface, im not sure what im going to do when i get there. But im going."

Voice-"Not so fast Eden!"

Eden-"Now that sounds familiar."

Voice-"I heard you awoke from slumber, so i came here as quick as i could so i could stop you."

Just then a huge boulder sized fireball blasted the ground in front of me, the fire from the blast materialized into a being, a being that i definately recognized.

Eden-"Aaah, Deimas, i was just thinking of you. How sweet of you to visit me."

Deimas is one of the Judgements, he is the King of Inferno.

Deimas-"Eden, dont small talk me!"

Eden-"Why? We have plenty of-"

Deimas-"QUIET! I know what you did. You absorbed that king!"

Eden-"And what of it? What are you going to do Deimas? Kill a Judgement?"

Deimas-"I have to stop you!"

Eden-"You cant, you know its against the rules Deimas. You cant kill a Judgement unless absolutely necassary. And right now is not."

Deimas-"UGH...Very well Eden, but i WILL be watching you!"

Eden-"Then i will take my leave!"

As i departed, Deimas erupted into a flame of fire and went away. He was always a "hothead" and sometimes his judgments got the better of him. Of course he is right that he will have to stop me, try that is. I am going to be the most powerful being. The other Judgements are all more powerful than me, except the Dawn Judgement. We are equal in power. There is something myself, Dusk, and Dawn have in common that the other ones dont. And that is growing in power. The other Judgements have a fixed amount of power that cannot grow. But mine can. Of course that also means that the Dawn Judgement is my worst adversary and i must kill him.

I conjured my Dusk powers until i was drained to release the seal on my prison. Sometime soon when i get more power, i will unleash hordes of evil forces upon the earth. Demons, Vampires, Werewolves, anything that i can to destroy this universe!

When i came out, i was in a wooded area. The portal behind me closed. There were alot of lush green plants around as far as the eye can see. As evil as i am, i do enjoy beauty every once in a while.

Eden-"Aaah, fresh air. It smells much better than that cryptic cell."

Eden-"And the plants look really well grown as well."

Voice-"Eden, thank you so much for the compliment."

This time it was the voice of a female. It must be her...

Eden-"Fajlah, is that you!?"

As i said that, a loud rumble ensued. The birds flew around me, and not just the birds but wolves, rabbits, deer, and even insects were surrounding me. She then appeared in front of me.

Fajlah-"Hello Eden."

As she was greeting me, she was feeding the animals. I must admit, she was rather beautiful herself. She was the Mother of Nature, Judgement Fajlah.

Eden-"Hello Fajlah, it is nice to see you."

Eden-"You havent aged a bit since i saw you last around four thousand years ago."

Fajlah-"Hahaha, Eden, you know Judgements dont age. But thanks anyway."

Eden-"I saw Deimas before i came out."

Fajlah-"Did he threaten you as always?"

Eden-"Of course, its in his nature."

Fajlah-"I know you absorbed the good king, i also know you didnt kill him. For that i am glad."

She knows that i could have killed Dremadia before absorbing him, but i felt sorry for the poor king.

Fajlah-"Anyway Eden, i have to go now. Will i see you later?"

Eden-"Of course, i always love seeing you Fajlah."

Fajlah-"As do i you, Judgement Eden."

I suddenly felt bad to even think of killing anyone as sweet as Fajlah. I must avoid killing her for the time being.









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