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Rosewood: Memories of the Fallen Angel.
I'm open for honest feedback. Please, give me your comments. You don't have to read it all.
If you want to read chapter one and two it's right here.
Rosewood: Memories of the Fallen Angel.
Chapter Three: Flashing Memories.
The lights in the bathroom were dim and the tub was filling up with water. I took a look around the room and came across a bottle of bubble bath solution near the sink. There were a stack of towels on the towel rack above the toilet. I grabbed a white towel and tossed it onto the shower curtain. I picked the bottle and squirted some solution into the running water, creating a large lump of foam. While the tub was filling up, I look off my clothes and tossed them aside. By the time the tub was already half full, I twisted the faucet and took a dip into the lukewarm water. I took a second look around the room. The magenta walls and the dim light made nearly everything else appear the same color. The smell of chamomile swept me from reality. I was right about the bath. It really was a nice place to relax and think.
I submerged myself into the warm water and closed my eyes. The first thought I had was about the city of Grendel. The picture that came into my mind was the newspaper article that I had read earlier this morning. The mugshot of the girl resembled me, and according to the article itself, I was wanted for something. What was it like in Grendel? Will I find some clue to my past? Will I ever find my parents? Should I go to Grendel? A part of me began to completely shut down.
I was no longer underwater. The sky was dark and the moon was half circular. A solemn, red-haired man hovered over me, as if he were waiting for me.
“Come at me as if you’re going to kill me,” he said.
I nodded--I understood what he wanted of me. I jumped to my feet and hurtled at him, but as soon as I neared, he grabbed a fistful of my hair and tossed me to the floor.
"Pathetic," he said and tossed me aside. "Try again."
I got back on my feet and panted. The man gave me a dirty look, he expected me to do a better job at whatever I was doing. I charged at him once more, and once again he pushed me aside.
"You're weak," he said. "I don't see the dark emotions in your eyes. All I see from you is love and affection. Do you love me Lily?"
"I do, Master…" I said and smiled at him.
"Get rid of it," he said. "I have told you several times. I don't love you back. I couldn’t care less about you. When are you ever going to get rid of this weak emotion?”
"I don't know Master," I whispered.
"What have I told you about that?"
"Love no one but you," Despite what he said, I still showed affection for him, "Because no one will love you back.”
"Good. Now, what are you to me?"
"Nothing more than your servant," I said. "Nothing more than your weapon and tool whose purpose is to do as Master sees fit."
"Good girl," said Master. "Let's go home"
I got up and followed him out of the meadow. The moment I held his hand, he snatched it away and gave me another dirty look.
“Master…” I whispered, but he ignored me.
“Master, why don’t you love?”
Master stopped walking and looked down at me. He seemed annoyed when he heard me ask that.
“Meow” There weren’t any cats around, so where did that meow come from?
“Meow” There it was again. I felt a splash to my face.
Miss Lily, this time there was a voice calling to me, Miss Lily please wake up.
The images around me faded away. I opened my eyes to see a black cat in front of me.
Are you alright? she said. You were completely out of it.
I’m fine, Isis, I said, and what are you doing here? I’m bathi-
Sitting up, I realized that I was dry and clothed.
I know you were bathing, but I still want to look out for you, said Isis, You were in that trance for an hour. Do you think I’d let you drown in the bathtub?
Thank you, I said. What do you mean a trance?
I can tell you were in a memory trance. said Isis. It’s a psychic state that allows you to see into the past.
Are you meaning to tell me that this dream is a memory?
Yes, emphasis on the word ‘memory’. I told you that your memories will come on their own.
Isis. I said. I was thinking of going to Grendel.
I was going to talk to you about that, said Isis. Aiyana was right, you may find clues to your past there. I’m sure there are plenty of them in Grendel. You were well known there.
Well…Known? I said, now that I have found a very good reason to go there.
Yeah, said Isis, We should leave first thing tomorrow morning. But I think we also should let Solana and Aiyana know.
That is fine, I said, Aiyana said that she will discuss something with me by then.
I opened the door and went downstairs. The whole house was dark and quiet. There was a couch in front of me. The living
room was so dark; I couldn't see it in detail. I rested my back on the
chair and took a deep breath. The cat jumped on the couch.
Can you tell me what you saw?" she said. What did you see when you were in that trance?
I was with someone. I said. I was so small. That man, He told me not to love anyone but myself. Because they will not love you back.
Did you call him master?
How did you know?
When you where in that trance, said Isis. You kept saying 'master’. Just be lucky you weren't so loud, or you’d wake the whole house up.
He said that I was nothing more than his weapon. My purpose is to serve him and do as he sees fit.
I see, said Isis. I love to continue this conversation with you,
but I'm tired. You should get some sleep too.
Isis jumped off and rested at a corner of the living room. Now my eyes were getting heavy and slowly they closed.
Everything went black for a moment until I found myself in a small empty room. Master stood beside me and there was a bearded old man sitting in a corner shivering. He wore torn up clothing and some of his yellow teeth were missing.
"What do you want from me?" he said. "I’ll give you anything you want! Just let me go!"
"You idiot,” said Master. “I do not want anything from you. Now, I need someone for Lily's lesson.”
"Lesson?" said the old man. "What is this ‘lesson’ are you teaching her?”
Master chuckled. "Lily. Which is the most vulnerable organ in
the body?"
"The heart, Master"
"What happens to the victim after the heart is damaged?"
“He dies." I whispered.
"Good. Now I want you to ki-"
"You are sick!" said the old man. "Is this why you raised her? To create an assassin out of her? What kind of man would teach a six year old to kill?"
"Children are so easy." said Master. "They make better servants when raised at such a young age. My Lily makes a perfect example of that.”
Master kneeled to my side.
"Lily," He whispered. "Do you love Master?"
"I do," I whispered back.
"Do you want to make Master happy?"
"I do."
"Then kill that old man in front of you. Make Master proud."
Master handed me the dagger and I walked forward. The old man, tied up to a chair, smiled at me.
"So young and innocent," he said. "Your mind is clouded with evil. I can tell that you’re lost."
I continued walking forward. My mind was too focused on pleasing Master. Pointing the dagger at the old man's neck, he still smiled but his eyes began to leak.
"You are confused, child," he said. "Do you really want to
kill an innocent old man who was nothing but kind to you?"
"Shut up old man," said Master, laughing. "Don't you see that she is not listening to you? Lily, what are you waiting for? Kill him!"
"Why do you want to kill me, child?" asked the old man.
"Master wants you to die," I slowly inserted the small
knife into his neck. "If I kill you, Master will be happy." The dagger
was now pointed to the man's chest. Instead of pleading for mercy, the man just sat there.
"Master will be happy, yes," he said. "Are you
happy to serve a man who was never kind to you? One who was always
cruel to you? Are you happy? Confused and Twisted child,--“
“I am happy.”
He stopped when the dagger was shoved into his chest, which oozed in blood. He started coughing up blood and he was breathing very slowly. He opened his mouth and smiled again.
“God…bless…you…” he whispered. The old man’s head dropped and dangled from his neck. He did not move at all.
“I…killed…him,” I said, then looked up at Master, who did not smile. He patted me on the shoulder and pulled me towards him.
“Amazing!” He said. “Good job. How did that feel? Doesn’t it feel pleasant, Lily?”
“It does Master,” I said, now starting to feel unsure.
My heart started to hurt. I felt like I’ve done something wrong, but what? I did what Master told me, so why am I getting this horrible feeling in my heart? I smiled and hugged him. I only had this pleasant feeling because I made Master happy, and that’s all that mattered now.
* * *
The room started to fade away and Master suddenly disappeared. Now I found myself sitting on a chair in yet another empty room. I sat down on a metal chair, staring at space. The room was empty and there was white all around me. Two chairs stood in front of me. Master kneeled down behind me, whispering in my ear, which was the only thing in this room that I actually paid attention to.
"Lily," He said. "Can you hear Master?"
"I can," I answered back.
"Good," He said. "Listen to me carefully."
"Yes, Master."
"You are no longer the sweet, caring, young girl that we know and love. You are a tool, my weapon for destruction."
"I am your weapon."
"Good," said Master, "I will no longer care for and nurture you. You are under my custody and command"
"I am under your command."
Master chuckled and patted me on the shoulder.
"You never cease to amaze me, child," he said
"I love Master," I whispered and smiled at him.
"I know," said Master. “You are loyal to him. You will always be at his side, giving him endless affection. You live to serve me and do as Master sees fit."
“I will stay by Master’s side and do has he sees fit”
“Good girl,” he said.
"Someone is coming," he said." They are 'social workers'. Do you know what they are, Lily?"
"No, Master. I do not."
"They are evil and cruel people who want to take you away. They claim they are good folk who love children, but I have seen their tricks."
I looked up at him to see that he wasn't smiling anymore.
"Do you want them to take you away?"
"No." I began to shiver.
"You don't want them to take you away, do you? What are you going to do, Lily?"
Kill them," That was the first thing that came to mind when he asked me that.
"That's right," he said, his smile came back. "This time you use your powers, instead of that dagger. Those people are evil and cruel."
I listened with interest.
"You have to kill them, Lily. Who knows what may happen if you let them out alive? They could send even more bad men here. They will come and take Master away and kill him, but you want to protect him right?”
I crossed my arms and shivered.
“I don’t want Master to go,” I said, then started crying. “I won’t let them kill you.”
“Do everything you can to protect me,” said Master, who was stroking my head. “If you fail, I will die.”
The doorbell rang. I knew what I was ordered to do, but I still felt helpless.
"Stay here," said Master. "Be ready and kill them on my command."
"Yes…"
Master left the room. The feeling in my chest became uncomfortable, my stomach felt as if bugs were crawling in it. I hoped that I wouldn't feel pain in my chest again. I still haven't figured out why I had it. I put those feelings aside and focused on what I was told to do. A pale black haired woman walked into the room, followed by a white haired man, who was round and plump and wore a suit with a pocket on the left side that contain three pens.
“Here she is,” said Master, who pointed to the black-haired flat faced young woman. “Lily, this is Ms. Lee.”
She smiled and took a bow. “Nice to meet you Lily.”
Master then, pointed to the fat man. “Mr. Palstone.”
Mr. Palstone starting walking towards me, but they way he walked was very unusual. Flab dangled from his hips, and he was walking like a duck. I had never seen anyone this round; in fact I never knew people can be like that that. He reached out his hand and cleared his throat.
“Pleased to meet you, Lily,” he said.
I just looked at his hand for a few seconds and then turned away.
“Was it something I said?” he asked.
“No, it’s nothing that you said, please don’t take it personally,” said Master. “She doesn’t like shaking hands, and she tends to get…well…apprehensive around strangers.”
I looked at some unusual features on Mr. Palstone’s face. He had a well-shaved mustache, and the grayish hair around him gave him the appearance of a lion. A pair of yellow teeth in the middle of his was big compared to the rest of his teeth. It’s so huge, that you can see it even when his mouth is closed. In other words, Mr. Palstone looked like a beaver.
Mr.Palstone cleared his throat.
Last edited by BlueLucario : 12-31-2007 at 01:40 PM.
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12-31-2007, 01:39 PM
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"I think you may want to know why we are here," he said. "This is regarding the child."
"Obviously," said Master, "You ARE social workers after all."
"I would like to ask you a few questions,” said Palstone. "Has Lily ever attended in an educational institution?"
I could not understand what that man was saying, and Master remained silent for a moment.
"She has," he said, "however she is ‘home-schooled' at the moment. Why do you ask?"
“Who is this tutor? Has he or she been registered with the city?
“I don’t know.”
"Has the child ever been involved in any... social activity?"
"Never," said Master.
"May I ask why not?"
"Why do you want to know?"
"What I don't understand Mr. Keating," said Palstone, clearing his throat, "Is that this child had never been to school nor has she made any type of social interaction. If Lily is lacking in either one of these fields, this could have an impact on her development. "
"Why the hell do you care?" Master raised his voice. I looked down and shivered after hearing him. "She's not your child. Who the hell do you think
you are?"
“I am a social worker!" shouted Palstone. "It is my job to care and please sir, do not raise your voice at me.”
I curled up into the chair, still shivering, waiting for the shouting to stop, and waiting for Master's command.
"Gentlemen, please," said a sweet female voice. Ms. Lee stood up, and she smiled at me.
"Could you two step outside for a moment?" she said. "I would like to speak with Lily."
"That would not be good idea,” said Master. "I've said this earlier that she gets very apprehensive around strangers. She-"
"Will be fine, Sir," said Palstone, "Mien Lee has been a certified family counselor for fifteen years. I'm sure she can handle this.”
"Mr. Palstone, Lily isn't like the other children, she possess a
gi-"
"We know about her 'gift', Mr. Keating, which is the main
reason why we are here. We’ve come to seize Lily.”
I looked up at
"Excuse me?" said Master, he doesn't seem very happy.
"You heard me, Mr. Keating," said Palstone. "We know you have been exploiting her powers, for mass murders, thievery and for your own personal gain. We do not like the way you have been raising this child."
“You’re not taking Lily away,” said Master, who now smiled. “Good luck persuading her to come along with you.”
“Mr. Keating, if you refuse to surrender the girl,” said Palistone, “I will call the authorities and have you arrested for defying government officials.”
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