mashowasho

Sounds rather like FF7 to me.

I haven't read your story yet, so I'm sorry that I can't comment on it, but already on the first page I can SEE WHOLE SENTENCES WRITTEN IN CAPITALS. I don't like that, it doesn't read very professionally. Not that I'm saying it's a bad story or anything, I haven't read it yet so I can't judge.

Also, posting several chapters in one post is rarely a good idea, not many people will take the time out to read it - you have to post little bits at a time, even if you are impatient!

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Enigmus

WHEW... I'm a bit confused now... Others say i should make chapters long, other's concise... And i'll change the sentences in the prologue now. And FF7? How could i be so careless?! Sorry about that. Gonna do some changin' changin...

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mashowasho

you misunderstand me - by all means make chapters long if you want, just break them up a bit. So, for example don't post one chapter all in one go, do it in sections.

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Edited!

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Enigmus

bump!

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