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Lunar_Elf · 12-14-2007, 11:20 PM

This is just the first chapter, so im sorry if it's a bit boring. Don't worry, things will pick up around chapter 3

Chapter 1:

The shadow ran through the forest trying to escape its pursuer. The man stumbled on a log and fell down, that's all it took. The demon lunged out of the trees and was on him in seconds, but the man wasn't totally unarmed. He brought his hands up in defense and fire shot out of them and into the demon. It shrieked and ran back into the trees.

The man was up in seconds. It won't give up that easily, he thought as he continued to run. He could hear the beast behind him, its harsh snarling cut through his thoughts like daggers. Finally his hut was in sight! He ran through the door and put up warding magic to keep the demon out. He heard it howl in rage as it tried to break through his barriers.

That was a Tracker, a demon bred to hunt and destroy its prey. A few nights ago Alladron had traveled into Yukai; the land of demons. What he found there was very disturbing. The demons grow stronger and are pushing farther towards Zarneth. They could eventually take it over. He was then discovered and was hunted back to his hut in the Demon's Spine mountains. Alladron is a powerful person, but he alone cannot stand against an army of demons.

Alladron headed to his library. His hut wasn't very big, it had three rooms; a kitchen, bedroom, and library. The library was the most important room; it was a circular room with books all along the walls, books of magic and history. In the center of the room was a round oak table with intricate runes on it, the meaning of which has been lost through the years, and on the table was a stone basin with clear, pure water in it. It's called the Scry Waters, it allows Alladron to watch over Zarneth.

Alladron walked over to the table and placed his hand over the water. "It's been a while since I had to use this." He said to himself. He applied his magic to the water and it began to swirl slowly. Then a flash of light came from the waters, causing Alladron to bring his arm up to shield his eyes. The light disappeared as quickly as it had appeared, and the Scry Waters were still once more.

Alladron stood there staring at the water then quickly walked out of the library. He looked out his window; it was sunrise. "Good, the demon will be gone knowing that darkness favors it more then light." He mumbled to himself absentmindedly as he went around his hut gathering the necessary provisions for the journey ahead. He took a moment to study the Scry Waters again, then left the room and walked out the door into the chill, early morning air.

Yukai ryu · 12-15-2007, 12:27 PM

This sounds like a good story but at the end i think it needs a little fixing

"Good, the demon will be gone knowing that it has to remain in the cover of darkness." or something like that

and in the last sentence shouldn't "the chill, early morning air" be "the chilly, early morning air"?

Lunar_Elf · 12-15-2007, 01:22 PM

picky, arn't we??

Thnx for the advice, ill get right on it m'am

paigemaddison · 12-15-2007, 01:35 PM

I would like to see where this goes... so far you have my intrest...I would like to know what this demon looks like so I can have a better idea of what is chasing him... is it like a hell hound... or a bear like animal running after him on all fours? Something like that...
Can't wait to see more.

Lunar_Elf · 12-16-2007, 02:04 PM

thnx for all the advice =D Also, if anyone has any suggestions on how to describe the Scry Waters i would really appreciate it, 'cause i just didn't like how that came out. So, any suggestions are welcome, thnx!! ;D

Lunar_Elf · 12-16-2007, 05:45 PM

Just a warning: I changed the main character’s name from Elva to Fae. Hopefully I changed all the “Elvas” to “Faes”, but if I missed any, just let me know

Chapter 2:

Fae woke with a start and quickly looked around to see what it was that disturbed her; all was calm. She gave a shrug, "oh well," she yawned and leaned against the mast of her small sailboat. She still felt like something wasn't right though. She got up to check her boat and that's when she saw the clouds. Fae swore under her breath. "I didn't even notice them! I have to get back to port!" She opened her sail and let the wind take her back to the town of Seaport. She managed to dock and secure her boat just in time, a few minuets later the storm hit.

She ran back to her house and came through the door; soaking wet. After she dried off she started to make stew for dinner, using the fish she caught earlier. The house was quiet as she ate, the storm outside was the only thing that broke the silence. She was going to be alone for several months. It's usually just her and her father, but he was out on one of his voyages.

Fae's mother had died when she was very young so she hardly remembers her, just that she was beautiful. Her mother was an Elf, and Fae inherited some of the Elven features; the pointed ears, angular face, and acute senses.

Fae brushed her long black hair out of her face as she stood up and walked over to the sink to wash her bowl. She did a few chores around the house before finally going to bed.

That night Fae dreamed that she was running in a barren landscape, running away from something. Though she couldn't see her pursuers she knew they were there, things of immense evil and hatred. She could hear a voice, laughing; laughing at her. The sound chilled her to the bone, then she saw a figure before her. It was a man. She tried to scream for help, but no sound came out. Then her pursuers attacked; all she could see was their black bodies and blood red eyes. She could feel their teeth and claws tear into her flesh. She tried to scream, wanted to, but again no sound came out of her mouth. The only sound was that horrible laugh.

Fae woke in a cold sweat; she looked around and found herself safely in her room. She moved her hands over her body, no wounds, but she could still feel the teeth and claws sinking into her skin. She shivered at the thought. That horrible laughter was still ringing in her ears, she shook her head to make it stop.

Fae got out of bed and quickly got dressed. She went to the kitchen and finished the last of the stew for breakfast. Afterwards she gathered money that she would need for the market, slung a bag over her shoulders, and walked out the door. It was a beautiful day, the warm sunlight washed away her memories from last night's dream.
The market was the same as always. People walked around going from one vender to another, buying and selling various goods. The smell of fish, cooked and raw, fresh fruit, and other foods wafted through the air. Fae walked over to a man selling an assortment of foods.

"Good day, Joel." She greeted him with a smile.

"Fae! How are ya' girl? What can I do for ya'?" He responded in a deep booming voice.

Fae smiled. "I've been eating fish all week, I need something different." She looked at the food he had. "Could I have some fruit, cheese, and bread?"

Joel frowned. "Doesn't seem like much of a meal girl."

"I know, but it's all I can afford now."

She took her purchases and gave him the money, but he gave her half of it back and winked. Fae smiled at her friend and walked away. Thanks to Joel's generosity she was able to treat herself to a nice hot slice of pie.

Children were laughing and playing, but when they saw Fae they were suddenly quiet and stared at her with wide, wary eyes. Fae let out a sigh; it was always like this for her. Many people mistrust her, Joel is one of the few who show her kindness, even her own father rejects her.

She couldn't blame them; they mistrust her because of her magic. She discovered she had it when she was a child. Fae discovered that she could bring withered and dead plants back to their original beauty, as well as kill a newly bloomed plant. She could also do the same with bugs and small animals. Fae could also produce light in the darkest night, or suck the light right out of a room. She was never sure how she got this magic, she believes it is from her mother; Elves were known to be powerful wielders of magic. He mother was the only person who understood Fae. She missed her mother, a lot. She thought more about her magic, even after all these years it's still a mystery to her. She's not sure that she even knows everything it can do. Light, dark, killing bugs and plants as well as brining them back to life may only be a small portion of her power. Fae was brought back to the sights and smells of the market by a loud shout.

"Fire! Fire! Someone help, there's a fire!"

She ran through the crowd towards the source of the cry. She looked up at the sky and saw smoke rising. When she approached the area where the shout had come from she saw people running in all directions. She heard a few people shouting for water. Then Fae saw it. The fire was consuming a stall as the owner and a few others were trying to put it out, but failing.

Fae rushed over to the stall, when she reached it she wasn't sure what to do, so she just started stamping on it. After a while Fae realized that nothing was helping. Suddenly she got an idea; she could use her magic She didn't know if it would work, but it was worth a try. She called up her magic and felt the familiar icy-warm feeling of it. It was an odd feeling, like having ice shoot through her but at the same time it felt as if she were on fire. Then Fae concentrated on the fire before her; on ending it's existence. She raised her hands and laid the magic over the fire like an invisible blanket, and smothered it.
Finally the fire died. Fae dropped to her knees, she had never used her magic to that extent before, and it took a lot out of her.

A little boy ran up and threw his arms around her. "Thank you for saving my father's stall." He said in a small voice.

The owner of the stall came over and snatched his son away. "Stay away from her!" He cried. The man glared at Fae, she met his gaze and calmly stared back. "We don't need your magic here girl." His voice was full of venom and hate, causing Fae to flinch. The crowd gathered there murmured their agreement.

Anger flared through Fae, but she tried not to show it. Without saying a word she slowly stood up and walked out of the market area. While she walked back to her house her anger slowly died down. When she got closer to her house she slowed down, two figures were standing in front of her door.

Arooo3 · 12-16-2007, 07:42 PM

This is a great story! There's only a few things I would personally change. This is not meant to offend anyone. You can use my advice or not. No offense. My changes are in red.

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lunar_Elf

This is just the first chapter, so im sorry if it's a bit boring. Don't worry, things will pick up around chapter 3

Chapter 1:

The shadow ran through the forest trying to escape its pursuer. The man stumbled on a log and fell down, that’s all it took. The demon lunged out of the trees and was on him in seconds, but the man wasn’t totally unarmed. He brought his hands up in self-defense and fire shot out of them and straight through the demon. It shrieked and ran back into the trees.

The man was up in seconds. It won’t give up that easily, he thought as he continued to run. He could hear the beast behind him, its harsh snarling cut through his thoughts like daggers. Finally his hut was in sight! He ran through the door and put up warding magic to keep the demon out. He heard it howl in rage as it tried to break through his barriers.

That was a Tracker, a demon bred to hunt and destroy its prey. A few nights ago Alladron had traveled into Yukai; the land of demons. What he found there was very disturbing. The demons had grown stronger and are pushing farther towards Zarneth. They could eventually take it over. He was then discovered and was hunted back to his hut in the Demon’s Spine mountains. Alladron is a powerful person, but he alone cannot stand against an army of demons.

Alladron headed to his library. His hut wasn’t very big, it had only three rooms; a kitchen, bedroom, and library. The library was the most important room; it was a circular room with books all along the walls, books of magic and history. In the center of the room was a round oak table with intricate runes on it, the meaning of which had been lost through the years, and on the table was a stone basin with clear, pure water in it. It; called the Scry Waters, allows only Alladron to watch over Zarneth.

Alladron walked over to the table and placed his hand in the water. “It’s been a while since I had to use this.” He said to himself. He applied his magic to the water and it began to swirl slowly. Then a flash of light came from the waters, causing Alladron to bring his arm up to shield his eyes. The light disappeared as quickly as it had appeared, and the Scry Waters were still once more.

Alladron stood there staring at the water then quickly walked out of his library. He looked out his window; it was sunrise. “Good, the demon will be gone knowing that it has to remain in cover of darkness.” He mumbled to himself as he went around his hut gathering the necessary provisions for the journey ahead. He took a moment to study the Scry Waters again, then left the room and walked out the door into the chilly, early morning air.

Great story! I like the setting descriptions!!!

Arooo3 · 12-16-2007, 07:55 PM

Me again!!!!!!!

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lunar_Elf

Just a warning: I changed the main character’s name from Elva to Fae. Hopefully I changed all the “Elvas” to “Faes”, but if I missed any, just let me know

Chapter 2:

Fae woke with a start and quickly looked around to see what it was that disturbed her sleep; all was calm. She gave a shrug,as if to say, oh well, and she yawned and leaned against the mast of her small sailboat. She still felt like something wasn’t right though. She got up to check her boat and that’s when she saw the clouds. Fae swore under her breath. “I didn’t even notice them! I have to get back to port!” She opened her sail and let the wind take her back to the small village of Seaport. She managed to dock and secure her boat just in time, a few minutes later the storm hit.

She ran back to her house and came through the door; soaking wet. After she dried off she started to make stew for dinner, using the fish she caught earlier. The house was quiet as she ate, because the storm outside was the only thing that broke the silence. She was going to be alone for several months. It’s usually just her and her father, but he was out on one of his long voyages.

Fae’s mother had died when she was very young so she hardly remembers her, just that she was beautiful. Her mother was an Elf, and Fae inherited some of the Elven features; the pointed ears, angular face, and acute senses.

Fae brushed her long black hair out of her face as she stood up and walked over to the sink to wash her bowl. She did a few chores around the house before finally going to bed.

That night Fae dreamed that she was running in a barren landscape, running away from something. Though she couldn’t see her pursuers she knew they were there; things of immense evil and hatred. She could hear a voice, laughing; laughing at her. The sound chilled her to the bone, but then she saw a figure before her. It was a man. She tried to scream for help but no sound came out. Then her pursuers attacked; all she could see was their black bodies and blood red eyes. She could feel their teeth and claws tear into her flesh. She tried to scream, wanted to, but again no sound came out of her mouth. The only sound was that horrible laugh.

Fae woke in a cold sweat; she looked around and found herself safely in her room. She moved her hands over her body, no wounds, but she could still feel the teeth and claws sinking into her skin. She shivered at the thought. That horrible laughter was still ringing in her ears, she shook her head to make it stop.

Fae got out of bed and quickly got dressed. She went to the kitchen and finished the last of the stew for breakfast. Afterwards she gathered the money that she would need for the market, slung a bag over her shoulders, and walked out the door. It was a beautiful day, the warm sunlight washed away her memories from last night’s dream.

The market was the same as always. People walked around going from one vender to another, buying and selling various goods. The smell of fish, cooked and raw, fresh fruit, and other foods wafted through the air. Fae walked over to a man selling an assortment of foods.

“Good day, Joel.” She greeted him with a smile.

“Fae! How are ya' girl? What can I do for ya'?” He responded in a thickly accented voice.

Fae smiled. “I’ve been eating fish all week, I need something different.” She looked at the food he had. “Could I have some fruit, cheese, and bread?”

Joel frowned. “Doesn’t seem like much of a meal, girl.”

“I know, but it’s all I can afford now.”

She took her purchases and gave him the money, but he gave her half of it back and winked. Fae smiled at her friend and walked away. Thanks to Joel’s generosity she was able to treat herself to a nice hot slice of pie.

Children were laughing and playing, but when they saw Fae they were suddenly quiet and stared at her with wide, wary eyes. Fae let out a sigh; it was always like this for her. Many people mistrust her, Joel is one of the few who show her kindness; even her own father rejects her.

She couldn’t blame them; they mistrust her because of her magic. She discovered she had it when she was a child. Fae discovered that she could bring withered and dead plants back to their original beauty, as well as kill a newly bloomed plant. She could also do the same with bugs and small animals. Fae could also produce light in the darkest night, or suck the light right out of a room. She was never sure how she got this magic, she believes it is from her mother; Elves were known to be powerful wielders of magic. He mother was the only person who understood Fae. She missed her mother, a lot. She thought more about her magic, even after all these years it’s still a mystery to her. She’s not sure that she even knows everything it can do. Light, dark, killing bugs and plants as well as brining them back to life may only be a small portion of her power. Fae was brought back to the sights and smells of the market by a loud shout.

“Fire! Fire! Someone help, there’s a fire!”

She ran through the crowd towards the source of the cry. She looked up at the sky and saw smoke rising. When she approached the area where the shout had come from she saw people running in all directions. She heard a few people shouting for water. Then Fae saw it. The fire was consuming a stall as the owner and a few others were trying to put it out, but failing.

Fae rushed over to the stall, when she reached it she wasn’t sure what to do, so she just started stamping on it. After a while Fae realized that nothing was helping. Suddenly she got an idea; she could use her magic She didn’t know if it would work, but it was worth a try. She called up her magic and felt the familiar icy-warm feeling of it. It was an odd feeling, like having ice shoot through her but at the same time it felt as if she were on fire. Then Fae concentrated on the fire before her; on ending it’s existence. She raised her hands and laid the magic over the fire like an invisible blanket, and smothered it.

Finally the fire died. Fae dropped to her knees, she had never used her magic to that extent before, and it took a lot out of her. A little boy ran up and threw his arms around her.

“Thank you for saving my father’s stall.”

The owner of the stall came over and snatched his son away. “Stay away from her!” he cried. The man glared at Fae, she met his gaze and calmly stared back. “We don’t need your magic here girl.” His voice was full of venom and hate, causing Fae to flinch. The crowd gathered there murmured their agreement.

Anger flared through Faelike a forest fire, but she tried not to show it. Without saying a word she slowly stood up and walked out of the market area. While she walked back to her house her anger slowly died down. When she got closer to her house she slowed, two figures were standing in front of her door.

Great chapter!!! I liked it when you ended on a cliffhanger! Good Job!!!

Lunar_Elf · 12-16-2007, 08:35 PM

wow, thnx for takin the time to do that =D I'm definitely gonna use some of those corrections, thnx again ;D

eliec · 12-17-2007, 10:23 AM

Hey, good story so far, keep it up.
I can't find any mistakes (cheers to aroooo3 here), just be sure to use a spell checker next time (i know, it's a hassle).
Anyway, just for my personal piece of advice: details, details! you have the main story done very well, but it feels like you're just skimming the surface. WHat does Seaport look like? matter or fact, what does Fae look like? and what about Alladron? Detailed descriptions can make the characters a lot more attractive, so that you can keep a reader interested when the action dies down for a bit.

Lunar_Elf · 12-17-2007, 04:40 PM

sorry if i seem to be rushing through this, but i guess im not that great at descriptions

Don't worry though, a more detailed description of Alladron is coming up, as for the town i sorta just skimmed over that 'cause it's not a very important part to the story, my bad

So, thnx for the advice, i'll keep all this in mind

Yukai ryu · 12-27-2007, 08:49 PM

this is a very good story please continue with it but do try to include a bit more in the way of descriptions though i do believe Fae (Elva) was described already but maybe include her height (generally) and eye color (not sure if you already have that in there)

Lunar_Elf · 03-21-2008, 11:51 PM

Hey y'all, i just wanted to say i'm sry that it's taking me so long to get the next chapter up =( Thanks so much though for all your comments, they are all really appreciated. I'm aiming to get the next chapter up by tomarow night. So thanx (and sry) again! =)

Lunar_Elf · 03-22-2008, 10:07 PM

ok, finally the next chapter

, oh and HAPPY EASTER EVERYONE!

Chapter 3:

Fae put her hand over the knife at her belt and kept walking. She was close enough to make out their features, one was wearing a black cloak with the hood pulled up; he was very tall and broad. Fae was immediately wary of him. The other one was younger, no older then Fae. He had messy red hair that fell into his eyes, and was actually rather handsome. It was his eyes that caught her attention though; they were blue, cold emotionless eyes. Fae shivered when she met his gaze. The tall, cloaked man pulled back the hood of his cloak and Fae was surprised. He had black eyes that were surprisingly warm and kind, his hair was also black and came down to his jaw line, and he had a black beard.

"Are you Fae Valen?" The tall man asked in a gentle voice.

Fae stared at the two men; she knew she couldn't fight them, even with her magic. For some reason she felt that her magic wouldn't work on that cloaked man. He gave her a small smile.

"There isn't need for a confrontation, we didn't come here to fight." He said.

Fae stared at him in surprise. Had he read her mind? Then she realized that her knife was out. She didn't even know that she had pulled it out.

Fae quickly put it away before asking, "Who are you?"

The tall man smiled. "My name is Alladron, and this is Reo." He gestured to the young man next to him.

Reo stared at her as if he was trying to decide if she was a threat or not, Fae shivered under his scrutiny. "Your blind?" Reo asked.

Fae was caught off guard. His voice was just like his eyes, cold and emotionless. Her face turned red. "No!" She snapped at him.

It was a mistake people always made when they saw her pure white eyes. Reo's expression didn't change as he offered an apology.

Alladron stepped forward, causing Fae to take an involuntary step back. "Fae, it is important that I talk to you. May we come inside?"

Fae thought for a minuet, if they meant her harm they would've done so already. "Alright." She walked between them towards the door of her house. As she did she noticed for the first time a sword strapped to Reo's back. It was a broad sword. Fae was even more wary of the two men now.

When they entered the house Fae put some of the fruit, cheese, and bread she bought on a dish and set it on the table. She sat down and offered seats to Alladron and Reo; the former sat down, but the latter just leaned against the wall and folded his arms across his chest.

Alladron took some bread and started to eat it slowly while taking the time to take in the small house. It was only one room, with a fireplace with a pot in it for cooking, two small beds against the wall across from the small wooden table were they were sitting, and one window with a beautiful view of the ocean. The window was opened and let in a breeze filled with the salty scent of the ocean.

Fae watched Alladron as his eyes roamed around her and her father's small house. She knew that he was taking his time before talking to her, but she didn't feel like waiting. "Why are you here?"

Alladron continued to chew slowly then finally swallowed and looked her in the eyes. " Fae, I'm here because-"

He was cut off as a massive black form burst through the door and lunged at Reo. The both of them went down in a heap. Reo had his knife out in seconds; there was a yelp as he stabbed the creature in its leg. Fae rushed over and pulled the black mass of fangs and claws off Reo before he was able to stab it in the chest. When she did Reo was finally able to get a good look at it, and realized that it was a massive black wolf.

"Are you alright?!" Fae asked in a worried voice.

"I'm fine." Reo mumbled as he got up.

"I wasn't asking you!" Fae snapped at him. "Twilight has a nasty wound now because of you!" Fae and Reo glared at each other until a loud cough caused them to look over at Alladron.

"So, Fae, you have a…umm…wolf?" He asked.

Fae turned around and started to tend to Twilight's wound. "Well, I found him when he was a pup", the girl smiled at the memory, "he was wounded and alone. So I nursed him back to health then let him go, but he would keep coming around. So now I just give him food and play with him whenever I see him."

"You shouldn't let a beast like that in your house." Reo said, his glare now fixed on the wolf, who growled back.

"Beast?!" Fae shouted. "He's not a beast, you're the one who hurt him! He probably was just playing around!"

Reo raised and eyebrow. "So when he lunged at me and went for my throat he probably just wanted to play fetch, right?" He asked in a sarcastic voice. Fae was about to make a retort when Alladron stood up.

"Reo. Fae. Please! We have more pressing matters then discussing your house-hold pet!" Alladron said, sounding slightly exasperated.

Reo snorted. "House-hold pet my a-"

"Reo, enough!" Alladron shouted, cutting him off. Reo just grunted and leaned back against the wall. "Now, Fae, please sit down so we can talk."

The girl sat back down at the table and the wolf, Twilight, laid down on the floor by her feet. She looked over at Alladron and asked, "So what exactly are these 'pressing matters'?"

Alladron sat back down too and let out a sigh. "Fae, have you ever heard of the…Dark Angel?"

Fae raised an eyebrow. "You mean the mythical being that has the power of Yin and Yang? My mother used to tell me that legend, about how the Dark Angel guards over the two lands of Yukai and Zarneth, and keeps the balance between the humans and elves in Zarneth and the demons in Yukai. Of course, she told me that story when I was a child, and actually believed in things like that. I mean, there's no such things as demons, or a Dark Angel, or…"

"Elves." Alladron finished for her, also raising an eyebrow. Fae looked at him with wide eyes. "Fae, you know as well as I do that elves do exist."

Fae shook her head. "No, they all died out. People haven't seen any elves for ages!"

Alladron gave her a small smile. "What about your mother? She was an elf, wasn't she?"

Well, yes but…wait", Fae glared at Alladron, "how did you know my mother was an elf?"

Reo looked at Fae. "Your mother was an elf? So, your half-elf?" Now Reo was also glaring at the older man. " You forgot to mention that, Alladron." He said in a voice colder then ice.

"Did you know my mother?" Fae asked Alladron.

Alladron looked her in the eyes. "No, I didn't know her." Fae could tell he was hiding something, but knew it wouldn't do any good to press the matter.

"Fae, the elves still exist, they live in the Moonlight Forest, where they always have lived. No one has seen them simply because they do not wish to be seen. They want to live in peace away from humans. They are not the reason I'm here though." Alladron paused for a moment, then continued. "Fae, you said that you knew about the Dark Angel. That…is why I'm here."

"You're here to talk to me about some myth?" Fae asked him.

"It is no myth Fae. Some people believe that elves don't and never did exist, but you're living proof that they do. So who's to say the Dark Angel doesn't exist?"

Fae threw up her hands in frustration. "So what?! Who cares if demons, and elves, and the Dark Angel do exist? What dose any of this have to do with me?" Then realization hit her and she jumped out of her seat, causing Twilight to also come to his feet and let out a growl. "Oh no! Oh no no no! You're not saying that I'm the Dark Angel, are you?"

Fae looked at Alladron with pleading eyes. He stared back at her with sympathy in his eyes, but didn't say anything. The silence gave Fae her answer She looked at him with shock. "You're crazy." She whispered. "Totally nuts! You're out of your mind!" Fae said, her voice getting louder with each word.

She stormed around the room throwing her hands up. "First, both of you come to my house unannounced. Then, he", she gestured over to where Reo was standing, "nearly kills Twilight; my only friend in this blasted hell-hole of a village, and now you're telling me that I'm a mythical being that was never proven to even exist!" Fae sat back down at the table and put her head in her hands. Twilight nuzzled the girl, sensing her distress.

"The Dark Angel? Yet another thing you forgot to mention Alladron." Reo said through gritted teeth, once again fixing his glare on the man.

Alladron ignored Reo's comment and spoke to Fae. "I know this information has come as a shock to you", the young woman let out a small humorless laugh, "but please just hear me out." Alladron waited, and when Fae said nothing he continued. "Whether you want to believe it our not the land Yukai does exist, and it is inhabited by demons." The black-cloaked man took a deep breath then went on. "For almost as long as Zarneth and Yukai have existed there has been a Dark Angel to keep the balance between the two lands, but there hasn't been a Dark Angel to protect the balance for a millennia. During that time the demons have been growing stronger and have been bidding their time."

Fae finally lifted her head up out of her hands and looked Alladron in the eyes. He took another breath and went on. "The demons are planning to take over Zarneth, Fae. The only way to stop them is if the Dark Angel restores the balance between the two lands."

Reo stepped away from the wall and continued to glare at Alladron as anger flashed in his eyes. "When you asked for my services all you said was that you needed a bodyguard for you and this girl while you were going on a journey! You never said anything about this girl being the mythical Dark Angel, or about stopping demons from taking over the land!" Reo gritted his teeth. He turned around and punched the wall, leaving a dent and causing Fae to flinch and the black wolf to let out another growl.

"Hey! I would gladly switch places with you. Be grateful, at least you aren't some mythical being!" Fae said in an annoyed voice while shooting a glare towards Alladron. Twilight began to lick Fae's hand and she absentmindedly ran her fingers through his coarse fur.

Alladron held up his hands in a pleading gesture. "Fae. Reo. Please! I know this is a lot for both of you to deal with, but please, just bear with me. Now, Reo, you also have an important part in this mission, and in order to save Zarneth I need you as much as Fae. It's imperative that Fae makes it to Yukai safely, and I alone cannot defend her. I heard that you are one of the best fighters. That is why I chose you."

Reo narrowed his eyes suspiciously at Alladron. "There are plenty of other people out there that are just as good as, or better, than me. So, why me?"

Alladron let out a sigh. "Ok, look. There is another reason why I chose you. You may have another role in all this besides just being a simple bodyguard, but I'm not sure yet what that other role might be. Fae alone may not be enough to save Zarneth, she may need your help."

The older man stood up and looked at Reo, then at Fae. "Reo and I are going to stay at the Seabird inn tonight. I ask that both of you think this over and make your decisions by tomorrow morning. Keep in mind what hangs in the balance and what will happen to Zarneth should either of you decide not to come with me." With that Alladron walked out of Fae's house with Reo following and closing the door behind them.

Fae sat alone at the table, with Twilight's massive head in her lap, staring at the closed door and thinking of the new one that was just opened in her life.

Yukai ryu · 03-27-2008, 09:17 PM

Awww cute puppy!!