my new story (fantasy): help please - Page 2 - Writers Forum

Dirk Embers · 08-01-2007, 02:22 PM

[quote=RoseRed;952057]Ahem... No. In many parts of Europe a gymnasium is equivalent to secondary school in the US, otherwise known as high school.
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guess its just me and the dictionary that thinks otherwise then.

Anywho... it isn't cliche' I dont think. as Milo said, just get on with writing it now. lol
oh and then post it up bit by bit so we can enjoy it!

raven hope · 08-02-2007, 10:02 PM

And people, a high school in most parts of Asia are actually Secondary schools. For example, in Singapore, Dunman High is a Secondary school.

Thanks Dirk...I'm working on the location of where the story happens for the time being...seems like there's a quite a confusion on whether a high school is a secondary school and is a... *lols*

CSX · 08-02-2007, 10:39 PM

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Actually it just came to my mind...I drew it out in the beginning, but I wrote it down in words in the end in Chinese. I have translated it in English, but I just want to share my idea.

Xaine was a luckless high school girl in Japan when she accidentally bumped into a new girl and met her brothers, who have changed her life forever as they dragged her into the magical world and fight with evil...who was blood-related to them and has the power to seal their fate. And their friends were in danger. But in the end, she end up in a coma, and worst, she's the key to the balance of good and evil of the world.

Incredibly vague... I don't understand...

Okay, I may need to refine my idea, but should I continue or ditch it?

*It may look cliche and sounds like an old-fashioned fairytale story, but actually it has a sad ending. You can expect the good to die.

It can be interesting if you really work with it. Make a lot of drama happen between Xaine and her brothers, and mix it up by introducing story-changing plot twists at every turn. That's how I would approach it.

Well, as mentioned above I have no idea what you were trying to do in this story, so I hope this helps (probably won't though).

Also, about the Japan thing, go with whatever country you think best suits the atmosphere of the story (though personally, if I couldn't pick Japan I'd simply ignore the Asian countries in general... Every other Asian country just seems boring...)

Hope this helps!

raven hope · 08-02-2007, 10:59 PM

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Originally Posted by CSX

It can be interesting if you really work with it. Make a lot of drama happen between Xaine and her brothers, and mix it up by introducing story-changing plot twists at every turn. That's how I would approach it.

I will, in the dialogues.

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Well, as mentioned above I have no idea what you were trying to do in this story, so I hope this helps (probably won't though).

More details after I've finish the translation...and I do need to do some major changes...I just found out that it sounds weird if I translate exactly word by word from my original story.

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Also, about the Japan thing, go with whatever country you think best suits the atmosphere of the story (though personally, if I couldn't pick Japan I'd simply ignore the Asian countries in general... Every other Asian country just seems boring...)

I dunno...they aren't boring. Maybe once you get an experience in an asian school then you are able to tell whether they are boring or not. I did went to some before in China, Hong Kong and Singapore. They are really fun. You know what, asian schools are very, very different from american schools. Not only because they wore uniforms instead of casual clothes, they are very particular about their cultures. And I don't expect you to understand.