lin

He doesn't have any work. He's like SanFilippo and Maia...run down others, claim greatness, but never show any work.

And you know what your arithmetic teacher said about showing your work.

Joelle

lin - I did check about Al Anon. Very briefly, granted, but yes, I was mistaken. Obviously I'll do research, I was going to do that anyway.

She married him because it was right around the time her son was born, and she thought he'd change. Not too uncommon.

Thanks yet again for the advice. I'm taking it all in.

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Browndragon

It looks to me like your mistake -- and I do think you made a mistake -- is a fairly common one. I think you probably started your story too early. Why does the reader have to know the reason for their divorce before the husband kidnaps the child? This looks to me more like background than the story itself. The reasons for the divorce is something that would come across in the course of the story anyway. At any rate, I'd consider that as a possibility.

The decision of exactly when your story actually starts can be a difficult one. I still look at the first two chapters of the novella I just finished and wonder if I shouldn't cut them.

Joelle

^ hmm. That's a good idea. Something to think about at any rate.

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lin

Good luck Joelle. I always like women with Krypton names.