Krim

I've heard quite a few speeches, and maybe it seems incongruous if you don't know what I'm talking about. Listen to "I Have A Dream" to see what I mean. Martin Luther King Jr.'s voice is clear, and he doesn't muddle any words whatsoever. But he also halts a lot, usually after just a few words. That's what I mean. You know the way he says 'I have a dream...that one day...' with the ellipses denoting a pause? That's what I mean.

I do think I'm going to take out 'halting', because it works in MLKJ's speech but it doesn't seem to work for Wintermule's.

Thanks, I'll get to clarifying those sentences.

I agree scream isn't the right word, but I mean a similiar word. I'll think about it.

Thanks for the returned critique.

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