I actually don't think the title is that big of a deal... I'm happy with a genre description. Unless you have your heart set on one already, just come up with something catchy when you finish your story, until then it doesn't mean much.
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Then something happen, the dark entity became enraged and attacked.
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I'd also like to know what happened here... it's seems like a pretty major event.
And this is probably just my preference in writing, but I'd like to see more descriptions of their surroundings (thought not so much that it would slow down the action). It would make me feel more like this really happened.
The story line rocks... I'd like to see you put more up.
If you want, I can go through this piece by piece and correct grammer and punctuation (just bear in mind I was pretty poor at it in school). Just let me know.
