DrKilljoy

((alright, just letting you know, I'm still working on how I use words and such. Descriptions and how sentances are constucted. So appreciate as much critique as possible. Thanks!))
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“Is Joseph alright?” Asked a confused and worried Mrs. Preman.

“He’ll be fine, but we haven’t been able to determine yet what caused him to pass out like that. We believe, as strange as it sounds, it was fear.” Dr. Brunz, one of the doctors at Essex County Hospital said as he sat down next to Mrs. Preman.

“Do you know what could have caused this?”

“He…he was talking about a person…no, another imaginary friend he made. He said that this imaginary friend said that what happened today in New York at the Twin Towers was the cause of terrorists.”

“Hmm…does he often speak of imaginary friends?”

“No, I see him sometimes talking to one of them in his room or next to the river. But he never talks about them.” Mrs. Preman looked the doctor in the eye. “But here’s something I don’t understand. He didn’t even see or hear about the incident. There aren’t any televisions in his school and no radios either.” She let out a sigh and held her hands in her lap.

“Well, are you sure nobody told him? Maybe another student or he heard teachers talking about it?”

“No…but something else I don’t understand. He said planes, as in more than one. I was with him only eight minutes after the first plane crashed and while in the doctors office the news was on and the second one had crashed while we were in the car heading to the doctor’s office. So there isn’t any way he could’ve known about the second one…” Mrs. Preman said as she rubbed her temples.

“Well, I suggest having him taken another look at from his psychologist. From his medical history I see he has certain problems coping with others and problems with depression. Do you think this has anything to do with his imaginary friend?”

“I told you, he never speaks of his friend. Plus, there isn’t anything else we can do with his psychologist. He’s already on enough medicine and none of it helps.” She closed her eyes and leaned her head back on the wall.

“Well, there’s not much else I can say that’s wrong with him physically. He seems fine, but I want you to keep him under strict watch. If he acts abnormal or faints again call the hospital or get him here quickly. Also, once he goes to sleep monitor him for a bit. See how he sleeps and keep me posted. Here’s my office phone number.” Dr. Brunz said handing her a card.

“Oh, and doctor…”

“Yes Mrs. Preman?”

“I’ve one question…with his mental problems…do you think it’s safe that he still go to school?”

“I see no reason why not, but if I were you, I’d let his teachers know and ask them to watch him.”

“Alright, thank you Dr. Brunz.”

“It’s alright; I think Joseph should be ready now.” He said heading off.

What could be wrong with that boy...? Elloise thought to herself. She thought for a moment about the strange incident outside the doctors office. She could see he was scared of something…but what?

“Here he is, have a safe ride home. Check with the attendant at the desk for the bill.” Dr. Brenz said as he approached Elloise with Joseph. Elloise could see Joseph wasn’t alright. He seemed frightened of everything until he saw her. He rushed towards he and stood quietly next to her with a cold look in his eyes.
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“So honey, do you think your fine now?” Elloise finally asked as they rode home.
Joseph sat quietly staring out the window.

“Joseph, is something the matter? You can tell me anything Joseph, is something troubling you?”

“No…”

“Alright, well if you don’t feel comfortable telling me now…”

“It’s not that, it’s just that…everything seems stranger now.”

“Strange? What do you mean?”

“I can see more of them now. They’re just out walking around…sitting on the side of the road.”

“What is Joseph?” Elloise asked looking over at him.

“…Grandma, Mr. Riley says he was the one who ran over your dog.”

“Joseph, what kind of thing is that to say!?”

“He just told me. He said he’s sorry what happened to him…but he was too ashamed to tell you. He said now’s the last
chance he has.”

“Joseph, this isn’t funny, what are you talking about.”

“…Mr. Riley died in the hospital just four minutes ago from his cancer. He was sick.”

Elloise slowed down the car a little and looked at him with wide eyes. “…Joseph?”

“He said to tell Mrs. Riley he loves her very much and too look under the loose floorboards in the barnhouse.”

“…Joseph? What are…”

Joseph looked at her. “It’s alright grandma. He’s gone now to heaven.”

Elloise silently looked back at the road confused. “Joseph…I…how did you know Mr. Riley was in the hospital? Did you see him there?”

“Grandma, please believe me. Please.” He said turning back to the window.

Elloise bit her lip as a tear rolled down her cheek. “I will Joseph…I will…” She whispered to herself.

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Sparx

Change the format in which you have posted this story and i will comment on it. I suggest you add a space after every paragraph or when someone speaks.

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"KNIVES AND RHYMES"

DrKilljoy

Well...it's wanting to piss me off. I'm trying to put spaces before each paragraph but that's just quite working out...

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DrKilljoy

...better?

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Red Misery

Press enter at the end of each paragraph.. indendations don't work, and the - are distracting. I'll comment on it, though! I'll print this out and read it tonight. Until then!

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You are harmless and noiseless as any of these old chair; in short, I never feel so private as when I know you are here

DrKilljoy

*smacks forehead*
Why didn't I think of that!?

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