Red X hunter-tell me what you think of this sample - Writers Forum

Jabezilla · 03-07-2006, 05:02 PM

Red X Hunter

The greatest fighters know that that strength comes in numbers
When warriors learn to work as a unit, they are not separate and strong but united and unstoppable.
Everything Changes.
Keep your enemies close, and your remote controlled body bomb closer!
Operation: Rebirth

With the gun's cold muzzle to the side of my head. I thought of the last four hours that passed.
What could have led up to this chain of events that wanted me to take my life? My index finger pressed heavily on the trigger. That’s the million-dollar question I guess.

Somewhere on earth in the near future, lies a small town called Deonite. Well, at least it was once there. Before a terrible force enveloped the town. Two weeks after the town lost contact with the main world, a team of marine’s were sent in to assess what happened to the town and it’s people.
Deonite, what can I say about it? It was where I was born. My home. Years before this horrible incident happened to my hometown I left to become a marine. I left my family without their consent. I have not talked to them in fourteen years. Now I fear that I will regret that decision. My name is Carson Hunter 28 years of age. We where in a V-22 Osprey there was ten of us in all, Sergeant Bendiz, Mendez, Crew, Rose, Andreas, Doug, Allen, Hodgson, and Nexus. I ran my hand through my black hair. I looked at the picture in my hand. It was a picture of my sister and me smiling. “Too many people are lying to me, I can’t trust anyone really. Why can’t people just say what they mean? Please right now. You tell me what you really really think of me, I ’m confused here. Do I sometimes scare you?” She had once asked me. I couldn’t answer her back then, even though I loved her, she had indeed scared me. But I never wanted to admit it to her. Mary was my adopted sister. My father was a mine worker in Deonite, while working on a new section of a tunnel he had found a hidden cavern. The cavern was filled with technology and equipment not seen before on Seratonea. While my father, with his coworkers looked over all the technology. He stumbled and unlocked a hidden door. Behind that door was Mary. Like a crazed animal she attacked my father and the other workers. It was over an hour before they clamed her down. No one really knew how she had survived in the cavern so long. There was no sign of food or bodily waste. Mary was fluent in English, when asked how she got in there. She said she did not know. All she remembered was my fathers face and attacking him.

Smaointe · 03-08-2006, 12:11 PM

It's interesting. Do you have any more written? I would like to read more of it, if you do.

Jabezilla · 03-08-2006, 03:26 PM

No, i just wanted to see what people would think of it. I will continue on with it now..