The Voice of the City - Writers Forum

ross · 03-04-2006, 12:08 PM

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Note: I've posted this before and hopefully this is the final draft. It's entirely possible I've lost the plot here!

thanks for the comment.
Removed for now.

Black_ghost · 03-05-2006, 08:14 PM

Nice desciptions. Though i must say that i knew not of the story. I really didn't know what was happening, and to that i say that i am quite dissapointed. Now i'm just wondering whether to read it again to try to find a hint of the story, or to just pass it off and think nothing more of it...

It sounded too much like an introduction, rather than a whole piece. Work on the story and i'll read it again.