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Old 12-18-2005, 11:59 AM   #1
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The Hunt For The Blood Key: part one of five

Author's Note:
This is based on my dream to become a game designer and blablabla. I already started thinking of some quests for an MMO if I becoem succseful (which don't reply to and be an ass for nothing).

The begining is quite short, but the other parts I'll to provide a bit more into the story of the quest.

Thus carry on....


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Quest Fifteen: The Keys To The Blood Chest: (part one of five)

Aerion City, north of Gondraith, location of Professor Dwindle. . . .

Vanrok walked up to the studying professor slowly. As he was behind him he reached out the the professor's shoulder, but before he made contact, the professor cut him off: “What is it?”. Vanrok was surprised he would be noticed by a mere professor; he was a well trained soldier. As Vanrok wanted him to say something else, he knew the professor wasn't interested in him at all, so he went on, “Are you the one looking for a job?”

“No.”

Vanrok watched him script on his varnished paper. “Well, saw the fliers. Are you Professor Dwindle?”

“Yes. And I am not looking for a job, I am giving one.”

“Well, I would like to sign my self over.” Requested Vanrok, standing beside him, still waiting for him to seize his writing.

“Do find yourself worthy of the task?” He asked.

“I do.”

“Aah! Why do I bother with that question with that question?” The professor turned around. “They all agree.” Vanrok noticed the professor examining him a bit.

“You have more signed over?”

“Just three,” said the professor, smiling. “They did not appear as talented as you, though.”

The professor turned around and rummaged around on his unorganized desk. There were papers all over that made Vanrok wonder how the professor could ever find something. Suddenly, Dwindle shot out a piece of tarnished paper and handed it to Vanrok. “Choose: read and sign; or, be foolish and sign.”

Vanrok gave him a serious look and began reading it carefully, but impatiently. It was nearly two full pages of reading, so he took awhile. The instructions were so detailed and useless in some cases that it made Vanrok more impatient to read. Near the end he made his final signing and handed it over to Dwindle. “Hear you go.”

The professor examined over all his signing and placed it on his desk. During, he picked up another piece of paper and handed it to him, and he said, “These are your instructions. However, I may warn you that some of these instruction were not on the contract. There, it would be necessary to read them once more. And if you must come for advice, do so. This just isn't any old quest.”
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Old 12-18-2005, 12:04 PM   #2
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Any bit of critique may help this become better.

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Old 12-22-2005, 10:25 AM   #3
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Seems like it'd be a typical RPG.
It seems moderately cliched so far, but that's really only because it has a generalized Dungeons and Dragons kind of feel.

You describe it well, though.
Please don't take this the wrong way, but you could you probably write something a lot better if you came up with a better plot.

I'm not saying that this isn't a good plot you have here. I can't say that because not much information is provided.

All I'm saying is that it looks predictable, though written well.
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