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Old 09-08-2004, 03:39 AM   #1
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Wings of the Sun- Chapter 1

Ok, this is my first story posted here, and its the first chapter, so if you like it and want me to post the rest of the story i will do so.....oh, and there is a little bit of swearing, and if its too bad for anybody tell me and i can try and fix it.......also....a hint of a homosexual relationship, but nothing too graphic, just hints in this first part, and something later on, but I can delete that scene......

Trees and Bishounen

“Damn.”
Dyre jumped down from the roof of the house to land on the unyielding pebble ground.
“How did they find me?” he asked himself as he ran from the guards, his silver wings flapping slightly. The motion strengthened as he lifted himself from the ground to the air.
He dodged this way and that, past building after building, until he reached the edge of the woods, landed, then ran through the murky darkness. The air was thick and the trees close together.
The forest was old and Dyre got a chill running up his spine as he ran.
“I should not have come here”
“No. You probably shouldn’t have” Dyre stopped running to turn and face the new voice. He was rewarded with the most intense gaze of cobalt-blue eyes he had ever seen. The new face, obviously male, was young and bronzed and his hair was short with bangs hanging in his eyes. The boy was clocked all in black.
He was simply gorgeous.
“Who are you? And what are you doing here?” the stranger asked in a voice that oozed masculinity.
“I…I was chased” Dyre had never seen anyone like him “I had no choice but to run in here.”
“Hm.” The young man jumped down from his perch on a low tree branch and walked closer to Dyre. The boy noticed Dyre’s violet eyes, lithe form and long chestnut braid. Perfect. He was a fey no doubt, noticing the wings. But what really drew the boy’s attention were the violet eyes, intense enough to drown in.
“Violet eyes” he started “I’ve never seen a pair like them”
“Yeah, well, thanks” Dyre replied nervously “who are you?”
“I am the guardian of this forest and have sworn to kill anyone who enters”
Dyre gulped and backed up a few steps “I’ll just be going them” he turned to run when a strong hand grabbed his upper arm
“Not that way”
“What?” Dyre questioned.
“Not that way. They will catch you if you go that way. Follow me”
“Fine” Dyre answered and followed the stranger farther into the woods.
“What’s your name?” Dyre asked after too much silence.
“Wes Canoe”
“My name is Dyre Manx”
“I didn’t ask for your name. You only just met me so why did you give it?”
“Because you gave me yours. I was only being polite”
No answer.
Wes and Dyre continued to walk until the sun appeared over the trees.
“Where are you leading me?” Dyre asked
“To the next town” Wes replied
“But that’s at least a two day ride from here” Dyre whined
“That’s what those horses are for”
As they came to the clearing Dyre didn’t notice, there were two horses saddled and ready to ride.
“Whose are they?” Dyre asked as they cleared the forest
“The white one, Wing, is the one I will be riding. The black one is Shadow, you will be riding him. But they both belong to me” Wes walked up to Wing and petted him on the muzzle before mounting him.
“Come on Dyre, get a move on” Wes said impatiently
“Alright, alright” ~he’s so gorgeous~ Dyre thought as he rode off after Wes.
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Old 09-08-2004, 03:56 AM   #2
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its good. hehe violet eyes, cute. yeah post some more.
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Old 09-08-2004, 08:20 PM   #3
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Hmm... yes, interesting. Good dialogue, too.

Post some more!
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Old 09-09-2004, 12:24 AM   #4
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awesome as always, even though I've already read this.
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Old 09-10-2004, 03:06 PM   #5
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polished. nice flow.

hi kitsune

i dont usually read this kind of literature. so maybe my opinion won't mean much. i like the flow. you have chops. do you write in other genres... id like to read more.

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