Thread: I had the urge to write today. Just a little something. HOnesty please!

Writing Discussion sounds like the best place for this. I'll start a thread called 'Finding a Voice'.

It endears some and not others. But, isn't that the case with all books?

Welcome CandyRot.

I like the honesty of the work and the fact that it makes clear concise sense and raises some interesting thoughts.

Contrary to what some are saying, you can make some improvements without ruining your writing. First of all, each paragraph begins with the word "I." It does not read as intentional. That means it reads as a mistake. Just reforming a sentence can fix that without really hurting your writing voice. For instance:

I read romance novels to keep life bearable.

Could be rewritten as:

To keep life bearable, I read romance novels.

although I’ll call her when I miss the sound of her voice.

Loved that line.

Have you ever watched Makoto Shinkai's She and Her Cat? It's a short anime (less than 5 minutes run time) that expresses something very meaningful through mundane events and witty narration. I'd suggest you look that up in youtube as your piece is quite similar in nature. Even if you're not into anime/cartoons/whatever, make an exception and take the time to watch that one as it's a great example of the genre that you're tackling. I myself have learned a lot from it, both in terms of philosophy and writing (as I'm also exploring the same genre).