Thread: Revolution Rock - Novella

(Post deleted as I want to take the piece elsewhere)

I read the first section. Two small suggestions:

First, putting more empty lines in between (even short paragraphs) would make it a bit easier to read.

Second, I think the way you revealed the date of 1977 was not a good way to do it. I think dates/time periods should be revealed by detail or at least something instead of just 'blurted out' so to speak.

Your opening is good, drawing people in with something fiery. Probably a very good thing considering that this is a long work to read on a forum.

Thanks, I think in the original type-out of this I had more spaces and such. I suppose it is a bit too long - I'm kind of new to this whole concept.