Anger Management- A short story Part 1 - Writers Forum

Lester Burnham · 07-13-2008, 06:36 PM

Tobi Pitts leaned forward in her seat, clasping her hands together with forearms resting on her knees. She looked at Howard with tired green eyes that were sunken into a patchwork of premature wrinkles and thin make-up. Her hair was a mass of bleached, neglected curls that hung to the sides like twists of tattered rope.

“I can’t make you say a word, Mr. Franks,” she said. “But the court did order you to come here, and I do think it’s in your best interest to talk about why that happened.”

Howard scanned the room. There were eight other men in the circle, some watching him, others with eyes to the floor. All of them silent, waiting. He looked back at Tobi and found her still on him, unblinking, her blank expression wearing the patience of a statue.

“I see,” he said. “My best interest.” And the room fell silent again. Tobi remained fixed.

A man to Howard’s left, three seats down cleared his throat and adjusted his tie. He had the meticulous look of a newscaster, complete with handsome profile. His hair was a highly styled crown of silver-gray perfection. He regarded Howard with deep azure eyes resting behind glasses that had a hand polished sparkle.

“Howard,” he said, in the practiced, impersonal tone of an announcer, “Tom Watson here, and believe me I feel for you. I didn‘t want to talk when I got here either. But once I got over that I learned a great deal. Tonight‘s my last night.”

Tom glanced over to Tobi to see if she was watching and was disappointed to find her still looking at Howard.

“Anyway. I don’t mind telling you I used to be a real bastard. I beat my wife so many times I couldn’t even begin to count them. In here I learned where it was coming from. Power man, and I am just flat addicted to it. It gave me a rush, a sick rush, to do what I did to her. I’ll bet you can identify with that a little.”

Howard studied the other men in the group. He noted some smirks and the look of disgust on the faces of others that seemed to deepen the more Tom spoke. And then suddenly he had to steady himself against a wrenching wave of grief that washed down his chest and into his stomach.

“So I hope you open up a little, buddy. Remember, we’re all the same here,” Tom concluded. He then pointed at Howard with his hand formed into a mock pistol, winked and clicked his tongue.

“Forget that asshole,” said a heavyset man. He had a cheerless face painted with shadows of stubble across the cheeks. “If you don’t talk they will keep you here longer, and they’ll use it against you in court.”

Howard pondered that for a moment and spoke again.

“They?” he asked, “Don’t you mean, her?” And he tilted his head in Tobi’s direction.

The large man grinned without diminishing the sadness in his eyes even a little. “It’s all the same.” he said.

“No, it’s not,” Tobi interjected. “Mr. Franks, I am a therapist, not a judge. I don’t tell the court anything you say in here. That’s held in confidence. All I do is report whether you have attended and whether you are cooperative. Whether you believe it or not, I am here to help you.”

“And what is cooperative, Ms Pitts?” Howard asked. “Am I uncooperative if I don’t spill my guts to you, perhaps put on a little dog and pony show?” he said, cocking a thumb back at Tom, who furrowed his brow and did his best to look indignant.

Tobi swallowed. Her fingers, once woven loosely together tightened and began a slight tremble. A rose hue painted itself across the skin of her face and her eyes hardened. Howard looked at the big man, whose expression now simply pled caution. And silence again filled the room. This time a silence as taut and bloodless as Tobi’s fingers.

Howard raised his hand and bowed his head pensively. The pain locked in his gut unleashed itself and twisted it’s way up through his chest like a mass of writhing snakes. He forced it all back down again and started to speak.
“Six weeks ago I was a happily married man. Sixteen years with the same woman, Kate, and two beautiful daughters. I had a good business, a decent enough business partner and everything to look forward to.” Howard lifted his head and made direct eye contact with Tobi.

“Then my father died. It was not unexpected, he’d be fighting cancer for three years. My wife convinced me that it wouldn’t be best to pull the kids out of school and fly them to Baltimore for the funeral. I agreed and went on my own.”

Howard didn’t know it, but at this point none of the other men were looking at the floor. Each of them leaned forward as they listened.

“When I got back I stopped on the way home to buy some flowers for Kate. Just something for carrying the weight while I was gone. But my credit card was declined. I called the bank and was informed that all my accounts were closed. All the money was gone.”

Tom interrupted. “Oh man, here come the excuses. I can see it already.”

“Shut up and let him talk!” said the big man, and Tom shrank back in his chair.

Howard shook it off and continued. “I went home and nobody was there. I found the kids with her mother. And her, she was…” Howard raked his fingers through his hair and took a deep breath. “She was with my business partner. They had taken it all. The money, the business, all gone. Everything.”

“I caught up to them at his place. She came to the door wearing a silk robe I gave her last Christmas. I just stood there dumbfounded for, I dunno, what seemed like forever. When I could finally make myself speak all I could do was as her why. Why had she done this? She told me it was because I was a loser. She told me she was a woman with needs and that I never, from the day we were married, met them. She told me the kids would be better off without me and that any more contact with her or them would have to be through a lawyer."

"And then she said the something else. She told me to leave, and she told me that she would kiss me goodbye but she didn’t think I’d like the taste of another mans dick on her mouth.”

A single tear slid from Howard’s eye and tracked down to his chin.
“I lost it,” he said, clinching his hand into a fist and beating it against his knee. “I punched her in the face and broke her nose. Of course I went to jail and that’s how I ended up here, as your new assignment, Ms. Pitts. Another statistic of domestic violence.”

Tobi saw her opening and took it. She spoke in a soft, rehearsed whisper, beckoning Howard to consider her question.

“Are you saying she deserved to be attacked, Howard? That she deserved a broken nose?”

Howard seemed to think for a moment and then replied.

“No, Ms. Pitts. I am saying she deserved the beating of a lifetime.” The entire room took on life as the men shifted around in their chairs. One of them muttered “Fucking A right,” under his breath but it was heard by all.

Tobi started to say something but Howard cut her off. “I’m not done.” he said, his tone unyielding.

“You’d think this was the worst of it but it’s not. After doing flips for weeks to try to see my daughters, last week I was allowed to talk to my oldest, Lisa, on the telephone. I was thinking the whole time that as bad as things were that I could live with it, that I could manage a way to move forward if I could just be with my children. I was so happy to have Lisa on the phone. I couldn’t wait to tell her how much I missed her and that I couldn’t wait to see her.”

“But you know what she said when I told her that? She said,” And then the dam broke loose in Howard. The tears poured forth like two rivers and his breathing came in great, heaving hitches as he cupped his hands over his face and sobbed openly.

“She said. I can’t see you till your better Daddy. Mommy said you're sick.”

alanmt · 07-13-2008, 09:38 PM

in the last sentences "your" should be "you're"

the writing is solid, the style easy to follow and interesting.

It seems a bit heavy, bludgeoning your readers with your point, but that's just my perspective.

The Backward OX · 07-13-2008, 10:25 PM

Lester

Have you posted part or all of this elsewhere? I remember the cock-sucking bit quite clearly from somewhere.

Whatever, it was a great read.

Two minor points:

Tom Howard raised his hand and bowed his head pensively. The pain locked in his gut unleashed itself and twisted it’s way up through his chest like a mass of writhing snakes. He forced it all back down again and started to speak.

And you spoiled it at the end, by not knowing the speaker was abbreviating “you are”, as Alan has already mentioned.

Alan

“Bludgeoning” seems overdone. It’s never happened to me, but I can well believe there’s women out there who’d act like this.

Lester Burnham · 07-14-2008, 09:36 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by alanmt

in the last sentences "your" should be "you're"

the writing is solid, the style easy to follow and interesting.

It seems a bit heavy, bludgeoning your readers with your point, but that's just my perspective.

Hi Alan, thanks for the comments. As you already know, my spelling sucks.

I agree with your assessment and it plagued me while I wrote this. It is actually based on a very true story that happened to a friend.

In writing the rest of this I am attempting to give the reader a "warmdown" from the impact of the first half. Hopefully the last 1,500 word will allow for some of the angst in this piece to ease up.

Lester Burnham · 07-14-2008, 09:43 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by The Backward OX

Lester

Have you posted part or all of this elsewhere? I remember the cock-sucking bit quite clearly from somewhere.

Whatever, it was a great read.

Two minor points:

Tom Howard raised his hand and bowed his head pensively. The pain locked in his gut unleashed itself and twisted it’s way up through his chest like a mass of writhing snakes. He forced it all back down again and started to speak.

And you spoiled it at the end, by not knowing the speaker was abbreviating “you are”, as Alan has already mentioned.

Alan

“Bludgeoning” seems overdone. It’s never happened to me, but I can well believe there’s women out there who’d act like this.

I posted it to one other site recently. Unless you visit sites that deal with divorced dads or fathers rights I can't imagine where you would see it.

Anyway, corrections from both of you made. Your thoughts appreciated.

One_Who_Writes_Fantasy · 07-24-2008, 08:51 PM

I found it an interesting read. It was well formed, and Tom seems like a character easy to identify with, easy to feel sorry for. He was seeming like he could need a hug. XD
And the wife is so mean! Ugh! Wow, I literally "tsk!"ed out loud when I read what she had done. You said this was a true story?

Also, at first, I thought that Tobi was a murderer or something, and she was being interrogated, but then I read the next few sentences and thought, "Ooooh, ok! I get it!" XD So, don't take that as something that needs to be fixed in any way on your story - I just wanted to mention that.

But still, good read.

Lester Burnham · 07-25-2008, 07:24 PM

Well, what was true was all the circumstances that lead up to my friend being court mandated for the anger management "training". What actually happened in the sessions we discussed very little, except that he made it a point to tell me that they cared little about the circumstances of his case. He was just another wife-beater to them.

Thanks for your thoughts.