I really thank all of you for the feedback so far. You don't know how much it helps. My goal is to have this book finished and ready to read before the year's over. This is the last part I'd like feedback on. Please excuse the indian sheriff named Dexter. It's the first name I came up with and it stinks. I will change it.
A little set up. Jack has rescued a young couple after they hit a hunting shape shifter with their car. He takes them back to his place where he explains things to them. As it turns out, the young woman, Sarah, happens to be the local reporter that was pretty hard on him over a year ago. Jack was accused of his wifes murder. Remember please, all of this is first draft. This picks up when the sheriff of werewolf town shows up.
Dexter looks around to the faces of his people as he tries to figure out what he could possibly say to ease the tension level. He turns back and says, “You can see that we’re not being aggressive Jack. We just want to explain things a little.”
Jack hits the switch again. “Tell that to the three men you got circling around the back.”
Dexter motions for Jack to hold on and starts talking on his two-way radio. Jack takes advantage of the pause. He gets Daniels attention.
“Don’t take your eyes off em.” He says as he walks to Sarah. She looked like she was about to faint and Jack thought that having something to do would help both her and him. “Sarah.” Jack says sternly, getting her to focus. “I need you to watch those monitors for me. Can you do that?” Sarah nods. “Good girl.” He continues, giving her a reassuring touch on her cheek. Jack walks quickly over to his gunnook. “You tell me everything you see ok.” He says to Sarah, picking up an M-16 rifle and another box of ammo.
Sarah starts her report. “Ok, those guys are walking back to the front I think.”
Jack walks over to Daniel and yells back to her. “Keep an eye on em. You’re doing great.”
Daniel grabs Jack’s shoulder. “What’s about to happen Jack?”
Jack looks at him. “These boys didn’t come all the way out here to just turn around and go home.”
Daniel suddenly feels like he was about to puke. Jack gives him a quick shake. “Hay! You’ll be fine. This ain’t my first rodeo.”
Daniel sucks in a deep breath through his nose and nods. Jack gives him a wink and shows him the rifle. “Do you know how to use one of these?”
“I’ll learn.” Daniel replies.
Jack smiles. “Outstanding.” He gives Daniel a quick demonstration. “This drops the magazine, pop a new one in hard then pull back on this. Safety is on the side.” Jack hands Daniel the rifle. “Don’t put your finger on the trigger till you’re ready to shoot. Don’t shoot until you’re ready to destroy.” He gives Daniel a manly push. “Aim low and cry havoc.”
Daniel turns to Jack. “Ten-four.” Jack leans his head back, smiles as he moves the barrel away from his face calmly with his finger. “Daniel.” He says softly. “Bad things happen at this end.”
Daniel winces and mouths the word sorry.
Sarah calls back. “Uh Jack. Something weird is happening.” Jack Shakes his head in disbelief at Daniel then turns his attention to Sarah. He looks at a monitor she was leaning close to. “What the hell is he doing?” Jack asks.
Sarah raises her hands in disbelief. “I don’tknow but I’ve seen it before in a Bugs Bunny cartoon.
One of the Deputies has pulled up a large shrub and is holding it in front of him as he tiptoes past a camera.
Jack thought If they wasn’t about to die, this would be hilarious.