NightOwl

My pom-poms are at the ready and I have commissioned new knickers with 'Save Edward' written across the bum. I plan to do some cartwheels.

Please let me know if I stray off topic...

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LolliAdverbs

Hehe!

I love that the novel isn't even finished an he has a fan club. Then I looked through his notebook and saw entry number seventy-three: cheerleaders. He's so hateful...



When I'm more satisfied with my novel, I'll definitely let you know, and I'll buy you some pom poms. I'm so scatterbrained that I'm just not comfortable, like other people, with posting the beginnings with the rest being unfinished. I already know that the three chapters need major revamps. Whee!

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A Vaulter's Insanity

I really enjoyed Edward also. He's an interesting character and I want to know whats going to happen to him.

The drunken thing also threw me off. You just need to clarify that he hated the party if it werent for 'her' or something like that. And show his true feeling about the party and possibly introduce a little more about the girl.

Also when you start talking about puzzles, I got kind of confused. You said You wouldn't find puzzles in his notebook. And that just seemed totally random. And then you said he liked puzzles. If I were you, I would have switched it around so that you said that he likes puzzles, but wouldnt find any in his notebook because it would waste good paper.
But then again, maybe im just not reading it right.

Cheers for a good character though. Raw Raw Raw.

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Raging_Hopeful

No I totally understand Lolli, but bravo for good effort. I think placing those two pieces side by side has confused some people. Maybe go back and edit the first post to clarify that the pieces are separate and not one after the other.

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