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Old 04-12-2008, 06:47 PM   #1
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"Soldier"

Run back and hide.

Search and divide.

Lost dreams and fantisies broken away behind enemy lines.

A shattered vision on the enemies position.

A constant battle raging out in the battlefield and inside a soldier`s mind.

Tell me, is that the last time you will see my face?

If i die, will I just be a memory to you?

I never wanted this to start.

Prepare for an attack, not on the field, in my heart.

Soldier`s scream their loved one`s names under the sun, praying for an
answer that won`t ever come.

I wanted a child of ours to be born, just know, i`m never coming back home.

I hope all those memories of us makes you smile, because i`m not coming
back home to you for awhile.

The enemy shoots my heart.

I fall on my knees, begging and wishing this is just a dream.

I really believe I will never be a memory. Baby, please don`t forget me.

Baby, I tried to survive, please don`t be mad at me for crying. It`s just my
time to die.

Baby, i`m sorry. Good-bye. Good-bye.
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Why the backwards apostrophes?
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Old 04-16-2008, 10:20 AM   #3
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This should be in the poetry forum.
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Old 04-16-2008, 11:13 AM   #4
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What Booker said.

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