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Please critique "Transitions"
This is the beginning of a story I am pursuing. Please critique any errors. The title I will be using is "Transitions".
A crisp morning autumn breeze washed down the famous crimson turf, as a lone groundskeeper completed the tedious job of painting the white boundary lines. Nestled between the Charles River on one side, with the Boston skyline on the horizon, Harvard Stadium ranks as one of the oldest and finest in the nation. Later in the day, the present docile noise would transform into a thunderous roar, as students would crowd into the arena for the annual homecoming game.
Beth Parker awoke. As she began absorbing the upscale surroundings of her college roommate Shauna, simple childhood memories of her country bedroom, filtered through her mind.
Shauna had invited Beth; a major in Journalism at Indiana University, for weekend visits many times before. The main reason Beth accepted this particular invitation centered around one reason…attending the Harvard-Yale football game. She was more than curious to discover how the Eastern Ivy League college atmosphere compared to the Midwestern Big 10.
“Girls, it is time to get out of bed. Shauna, remember you promised your brother you would me him at the campus in another hour”? Shauna’s youthful mother instructed as she closed the door.
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