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Hi, i just started writing a book and i need some help with the prelude. How can i make it longer. I think what i have is satisfactory for a start, but i would like to make it at least another page or two. Can y'all help me?

There were so many things Joe Frank didn’t understand. He didn’t understand why gas prices always went up. He didn’t understand why poverty rates always went up. Why he couldn’t get a normal job. But if their was one thing that Joe Frank did know about, it would be boxing.
He knew about knocking the shit out of the guy in front of him. About slipping the jab, about giving his opponents a wound they’d never forget. He knew about sticking and running.
He was never sure how he became a boxer, it just happened. He had a normal family, two parents, a younger brother. They weren’t the wealthiest of families but at least they never lived in the slums.
He was never bullied as a kid; he was too big. But then again, he was never a bully. He was a little out of shape; that might have had something to do with it. But that wasn’t his full reason of why he was so motivated. Why, when he was down in a fight, he refused to stay down. Why when the clock struck 5 AM, he got dressed and went on a run for an hour.
But whenever Joe asked himself the question, “why do I box,” he has been pretty sure it has something to do with the feeling of boxing. The freedom he feels at throwing pounding haymakers at a complete stranger. No matter where you go, you can’t do that and be looked upon as normal in a society. But in the ring, it’s completely different story. Knocking somebody the fuck out is a good thing. It’s honored, look upon as one of the finer things in life. Just going one on one with some other guy who knows that you want to take his head off just as bad as he does; that’s one hell of an experience. So yeah, that could very well be one of the reasons Joe Green chooses to box.

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I think you should start reading some more books.

You have this grating tone about your style I absolutely loathe. It's as if your preaching to me on a pulpit. You need to distance yourself from the character, and tell the truth, if you ever want to become a successful writer.