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thalion · 11-04-2007, 01:42 AM

“Discipline Makes a Nation Great”

Greatness is explained in many different ways, depending on the person who tries to explain it, but in each and every case, it can be obtained only by keeping discipline, according to a Buddha’s saying : “To enjoy good health, to bring true happiness to one’s family, to bring peace to all, one must first discipline and control one’s own mind. If a man can control his mind, all wisdom and virtue will naturally come to him.” If every person was disciplined, the whole nation would be a perfect one. But it is not easy to discipline oneself, it takes much effort; however, the results of disciplining everyone in a nation would be amazing.
Firstly, everyone has to discipline his own self. Self-discipline is the ability to manage oneself. To discipline oneself, one must control one’s feelings and emotions. Self-discipline is the motivation to determine the best course of action that opposes one’s desire. It is also the ability to get oneself to action regardless of one’s emotional state. And this is the thing that causes the greatest problem and creates the biggest difficulty for human beings. They are very emotional, and if they do not feel emotionally well enough to do even the simplest work, they cannot force themselves to do it, but simply post pond it. They always forget what they were supposed to do, and just try to entertain themselves in many fancy and funny ways, forgetting that the best cure for tired mind is work. After finishing a thing they had to do, they would feel real satisfaction, confidence, and would be authentically pleased with themselves, that they finally managed to finish something. But, unfortunately, human is a lazy creature that does not want to hear about working and even things connected to work. But discipline has also another meaning according to David Campbell, who said that “discipline is remembering what you want.” It means that we cannot forget about our desires but plan everything clearly, so that our desires do not take us apart from work, and our work does not make us forget what we want. We have to be aware that there is always a very thin line between good actions and too good actions that eventually come out to be worse than the bad ones.
Secondly, “for every disciplined effort there is a multiple reward,” as Jim Rohn said. So we should try to discipline others, for the results might be amazing. Discipline of a group is a training intended to produce a specific character or patterns of behaviour; especially training that produces moral, psychical or mental development in a particular direction. In other, less complicated words, it is making many people think and behave in a similar way. Of course it has its advantages and disadvantages. Making a large group act in the same way, as if it was one person, is very useful in many ways, especially in army; however, we cannot force others not to think individually, Individualism is very important. Human beings are not robots or machines, they do everything out of their free will, and they do not tolerate any tension or force, so the discipline must not be forced on them. It must be given to them in an accessible form, so that they may like it and willingly choose to follow it. And, by the way, the best results are obtained when people do what they are supposed to do willingly and when they really want to do it.
Thirdly, the most important thing people must understand is that they cannot only take but also give. And, by the way, it makes them feel happier and more important. It gives them a kind of pleasant satisfaction that is not easily explained in words. The other thing is that, as Benjamin Franklin said, “he that cannot obey, cannot command.” So we would never be good rulers if first we were not ruled by someone else. We have to understand the ones we rule and obey their wishes, because we do not rule only to feel important, but to help others and provide them with what they need. It is also a kind of discipline: remembering what we want, but not letting our feelings and desires overtake us. But being on both sides, either on the ruling one, or on the ruled one, needs lots of patience. And as Buddha said, “Endurance is one of the most difficult disciplines, but it is to the one that endures that the final victory comes.” All this means that for some time we have to put our desires aside, do not forget them, but only post pond them until their time comes, and concentrate on what is more important in the particular moment. If everyone understood this, life would be much easier and free of anger, arguments, and deceit.
Eventually, discipline, while often thought to be a coercive mechanism, can be a collaborative process of building consensus regarding accepted behaviour within institutions and society. So it must be agreed to do a certain thing or to accept a certain philosophy and the decision must be taken by all those, who are going to participate, not only by a small group which is about to rule. And once it is agreed to discipline ourselves, we have to really do this, not neglect it, for ignorance is the most disturbing and destroying thing in the whole world. According to George Washington, “nothing is more harmful to the service than the neglect of discipline; for that discipline, more than numbers, gives one army superiority over another.” It would be the same f we substituted “army” with “nation”. There are many large nations that are careless and so many smaller but disciplined nations gain supremacy over them in each and every field of life, like technology, science, and even sports.
As a summary, if people were disciplined, they could obtain anything they want and reach any goal they choose, as Lord Alfred Tennyson said, “self-reverence, self-knowledge, self-control – these three alone lead to sovereign power.” And if the whole nation was disciplined, the life would be a perfect dram. Everything would be possible, for according to Jim Rohn, “discipline is the bridge between goals and accomplishments.” Everyone would work hard; no-one would post pond anything. There would be no fear, no stealing, no cheating, no arguments, no conflicts, no anger, no shouting, no wars, no misunderstanding. There would be boundless trust between people, enormous strength of the whole nation, and unstoppable progress in technology, science and knowledge in general, but also living in peace with nature. But of course life cannot be so perfect, for there must always be a villain doing his best to spoil everything; however, even a part of this dream is so wonderful that we should try our best to make it come true, and beautify our lives.

Smiling Hobo · 11-04-2007, 01:46 AM

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Seriously, seperate this into paragraphs please. Maybe then I'll read it.