Biggles, thank you so much for reading through it again. No hard feelings about before.
I wanted to use the name Xavier, but it didn't fit in my world, so it became Xavie (pronounced in a very weird way because of the way they speak). Rev was made up on the spot. I wanted to use a name with a 'v' at the end because 'v' is actually pronounced 'f' in their language; her name is pronounced 'ref'; I liked the sound of that. I'll probably change it, though.
As for saying things too much, I'll keep that in mind while I edit. I never realized that I had overstated those things you pointed out. I'll work on it.
The magic is supposed to be obvious because it is such a common and normal thing in their world. What's supposed to be mysterious is how Rev killed the soldiers and what else--other than healing--she can do.
Once again, I appreciate the comments. Thanks a lot.
Be polite: return critiques. 
