a little something - Writers Forum

sardpete · 04-10-2007, 09:55 AM

a friend of mine was going through a dark time and I wrote this. See what you think
Peter

nineteen · 04-10-2007, 10:03 AM

hm, no-one really going to comment on this sinsce it's in this section,

you're really just meant to say "hi" here... but i read it but proobly shouldn't have. post it in the short stories section, don't put it in a wrod document either, just stick it in a post

but welcome reguardless. i'll give you my comments if you like when/if you post this.

sardpete · 04-10-2007, 10:12 AM

thanks! Peter

nineteen · 04-10-2007, 10:16 AM

peter?

edit: oh i see that's you signature, right. got it

valeca · 04-10-2007, 10:58 AM

Moved to Critique and Advice

mammamaia · 04-10-2007, 06:22 PM

you should also paste the piece into the post, as many [most?] of us won't go elsewhere to read things..

sardpete · 04-11-2007, 04:58 AM

it's now pasted in the short story section. thanks all for you advice

surreal_girl · 04-11-2007, 02:09 PM

I read it. I liked it. I felt like the end was pushed a little quickly. But I liked it. I can see how this could help your friend.