Fourth chapter of my practice book. I tried using some more dialogue in this one and wondering what people thought of it. Feedback would be very appreciated, for thats what I come to look for
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The Words brought fear to Will’s mind and in no time he fell back to sleep. He was in a wasteland, there was nothing but dirt. The dirt was a light gray, and he could see nothing for miles. He felt as the cold breeze swept against his body and hugged its cool arms around him. Will fell to the even colder ground, and huddled his arms around his knees as he sat there, trying to resist the deadly touch of the cool, cool, wind.
When Will reopened his eyes, there was a delicious taste in his mouth. It reminded him of home, and he it seemed to warm him instantly. It took him a while to adjust his eyes to the light, but when he did he saw the girl there again. She was holding a plate and feeding him with a light blue spoon. Will knew this wasn’t a spoon at all but a matter of energy that took shape as a spoon, but he could care less right now.
“Why aren’t we quite a heavy sleeper?” the girl said winking at him.
“Where… Where am I?” stammered Will.
“Why you’re on earth, as I stated on our last encounter.”
Will’s face expression changed to a combination of confusion and fear. As if reading his mind, the girl began to explain.
“First, before I begin, how much do you remember?”
“Of what?”
“Of anything, tell me everything you remember.”
Taking a moment to group his thoughts, Will Said “Well I remember… an explosion, and ships, and a robot, a goliath, and someone dead… then there was blood, and the sharp pain in my chest, and more explosions… and… I was back in preschool… and there was a war and, and, and…” Will began fell nauseous after reenacting everything that happened in his brain, and started shaking.
“Calm down now, it’s ok, it’s all over, now calm down…” The woman said softly to Will. “Let me explain to you what happened. You heard about the affair with NN and the Green League, right?”
Will slowly nodded his head, still trying to forget about the nightmare he just remembered. The NN was a moon country that declared war on the Green League after having one of their colonies in Australia demolished. The Green League was a group of terrorists against the idea of Technologism.
“Well, do you know the abduction of weapons from London Right?”
Will nodded once again. Three months before, London had a terrorist situation and some of the government’s weapons were stolen. It suddenly hit Will what the woman was trying to say.
“So your saying is...”
“Yes, Supposedly the Green League was responsible for stealing the weapons and we got in the way of the attack.” Said the woman.
“Oh, and before we move on, let me introduce myself. I am Andarlien, but my friends call me Andarly. And I see you’re Will.”
“Did any of the Loaders get past our defense?” Will spat out worriedly. Fear rose through his veins to the top of his brain at the thought of his hometown being destroyed.
“We don’t know yet… we haven’t been able to contact Sesonia yet.” Answered Andarlien.
“Why not, did the transmission Satellite get damaged in the landing… and where are we and…. “Will suddenly Screamed out in horror at the site of his legs. They were covered in metal plating. He tried to scramble up but couldn’t move his arms. They were also covered in metal, as where his shoulders. The whole back of his body was metal. He tried to move and only ended up hurting his arm as he felt something sharp burst through his shoulder into his bone. He screamed in pain as he flapped around like a fish out of water, hitting the soup out of Andarly’s hands and having it land all over her outfit. Furious, she tried to pin him to the bed.
“Someone, help, get in here!” ordered Andarly loudly. Instantly, too men rushed into the room carrying rifles. They set their rifles aside as one of them ran off to search for something on the table. The one left over grabbed Will and pinned him to the bed. The other one seemed to have found what he was looking for as he pulled out what looked like a spork. He ran up to will and pressed at his chest. Will felt a zap go through him as his body went numb and he felt relaxed. The last thing he heard before falling unconscious was a very soft “I’m sorry”.
Will reawakened to find the sun streaming into his room. He tried to move, but found himself unable to. As he looked around, he saw that 4 magnetic generators were around him. “Those bastards…” thought Will to himself, “They’re using magnetic generators on me like I’m some machine. After struggling to try and free himself, he found it useless. It was probably for his own safety anyways; he didn’t want anything popping in his shoulder again like last time.
As Will examined his room, he found out that it seemed very similar. On the side of him were 8 cabinets, and a Microwave to the right side of them. Underneath was a sink. Up ahead were a table, and a very large door. Will squinted his eyes trying to read the red letters on top of a Blue button.
”Pre… Pres.. Press to… Press to open!” Will knew exactly were he was, he was in the emergency ship! Will rolled his eyes to his own stupidity. “So what is there in a ship…”? Will thought to himself. “So there’s a control station, which in that room has the medical cabinet, the 3 robotic suits, and the weapons closet. Then there is a hallway with 8 Planto beds. Then there was the cabinet, some space, and a table. He was in the area of the “some space”. He also noticed there was a scrap pile in front of his bed. He always thought of how great it’d be to get stranded somewhere from a brave space mission and then try and find his way back. How he fantasized this with his buddies. But the only part that he didn’t have was that he’d be stuck to a bed with four magnetic generators and have is body be 50% ReCorporated Steel.
“Ahh…” Someone groaned beneath Will. Startled, Will noticed that he was about four feet off the ground. Then he remembered each ship also came with 2 emergency beds. He must be using one of them, but who was using the other? Will tried to stick his head over the bed far enough to see below, but failed.
He then lay there, thinking about things, for over 30 minutes. As he was thinking over some of his 6th year history assignments, the Metallic door opened outwards by the top. It was the girl… but he couldn’t remember her name.
“Well Will, you think your ready to get up and walk?” asked the woman.
“What do you think your fucki-“, Will was cut off by the agitated look on the girl’s face.
“If you don’t think you can handle it, then I’ll just leave you here. Now can you handle it?”
“Yeah…” Will grumbled, adding in a couple of swears under his breath.
“And you Slander?” asked the girl staring below Will. The name rang a bell to Will, Slander, his savior.
