My new Idea.... - Writers Forum

demon_ · 06-04-2005, 12:46 AM

I'm going to try a diffrent type of novel....I think as some people know I was about to work on a novel alled "Bloody Rayne" but I dont think I'm quite ready for an zombie adventure novel yet. So I going to revise all my thoughts to fantasy....

Sort of inspired by Jrr Tolkien.
Crown of Daggers
Well in the beggining I introduce a ranger named Lothor. While hunting Lothot meats his old friend, Galleon. Galleon spreads news to Lothor, telling him that "the Gems had been found". Two gems, Lght and Dark, destined to rule all Alior (which means all creations in elven tongue), if united with the Dagger of Destiny. Those three united in the hands of one being creates a crown, the Crown Of Daggers. The one whom possesing the CRwon of Daggers is virtually invulnerable.

Galleon and Lothor head across the dark, and dense forest of Duran, and into the kingdom of Hior. There they form an alliance to hunt the gems, and destoy the dagger, into the couldron of Anagoth. Hior alone could not pass through the land of Novacain, they would nead all creatures to stand together and fight for there love and land.

During the alliance in Hior they meet a stout, noble man named Tomor, and Tomor's younger brother Togor. The four heroes venture the lands of Alior, scoping for all new allias.

This is book one : A New Hope

I might not be the most perfect man at tellling a summary but I hope you understood it, and good give me some critique here.

Demon man

intoxicationofasleeper · 06-04-2005, 12:57 AM

It sounds readable, it just sounds TOO much like Lord of the Rings though. I wouldn't exactly read it because of it's similarities of J.R.R Tolkien's books. With your story related to other stories, you can tie in and already know what is going to happen at the end. But this is what I have gathered:

A ranger (Lothor) is told by his friend Galleon that the gems have been found, they go looking for the rest of the peices of the Crown of Daggers. They meet up with Tomor and Togor, and go with each other and search for the Crown of Daggers.

Alright, I guess it's a valid idea from what I have gathered. I would just clerify everything and check your spelling thoroughly, until then. -Ioas

Novicewriter · 06-04-2005, 01:00 AM

Sounds like something interesting, but I would have to agree that there are similarities with Tolkien...

As far calling it, A New Hope...Well it resonates "STAR WARS EPISODE IV" which was subtitled the name you want to use...

NW

demon_ · 06-04-2005, 01:12 AM

lol......you guys notice lots....But in my imagination I dont releay picture my story to be of somewhat Jrr tolkien wrote. Im ,frankly, happy with the quick notices I mena it s just bean like a minute ago a Type this in. Oh yes for the "A New Hope" name I decided that because there is a history behind the gems: They probaly gather about 10-20 campanions from totally diffrent countries (they dont just get them from Hior which I dont really see how it could be THAT related to the rivendell part)

And the gems must be destroyed in a coultron not a moutain. Oh yes Lothor is inspired by Aragorn (because aragorn the coolest), Galleon is a wizard, which isnt inspired by gandalf, its inspired by Me (im powerful too). Lol

Thanks for the quick critique,

demon man

suzakugaiden · 06-04-2005, 03:32 AM

Your idea's rather generic and rips off Tolkien wholesale. For that matter, it's not very fleshed out. you've also planned multiple books and you haven't even started on the first one. And is Novacain really an appropriate name for a land?

Rob · 06-04-2005, 05:14 AM

If you're not ready for a zombie adventure novel, you're probably not ready for a fantasy novel either.

I agree with the previous comments - your story idea lacks originality. Given the attention that Tolkien has received recently, this will probably count against you.

Why not write some shorter pieces based around some of these characters first? Develop the characters a little, get to know them, and see how the setting develops too. You might come up with some original ideas from that, a fresh direction to take them.

I haven't read your writing, but your posts suggest to me that you're perhaps not ready yet for a novel anyhow, so writing those shorts might be a better way forward, for now.

Cheers,
Omni

demon_ · 06-04-2005, 03:27 PM

Okay whatever.....

Ill switch the entire story around... But ill put it on a new post. And Novhacane is the name it must have been a typo. (my mom's a dentist thats where I got the name)

intoxicationofasleeper · 06-06-2005, 06:37 PM

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Originally Posted by demon_

Okay whatever.....

Ill switch the entire story around... But ill put it on a new post. And Novhacane is the name it must have been a typo. (my mom's a dentist thats where I got the name)

I'll give you advice here, don't name it Novhacane. Don't. Most people know what Novhacane is... don't name it that. Whatever you do... DO NOT NAME IT NOVHACANE! You will be a laughing stock if you name it novhacane. Please take my warning demon.. please take my warning. -Ioas