Just the One - Writers Forum

murdershewrote2005 · 04-03-2005, 04:46 PM

I could feel the wind beneath my feet
I could feel my soul flying higher
I could feel your hand against my cheek
and I felt a new rhythm in my beat

Your hand caressed my breast
my skin burned beneath your fingers
as two became one, the world went away
our bodies a drum, beating a rhythm

Two became one, senses melting away
I had found my true love, once more
I died with your touch, so gentle
and never wanted to be resurrected again

I could feel the wind beneath my feet
I could feel my soul flying higher
I could feel your hand against my cheek
and I felt like I had finally found love

pgoroncy · 04-05-2005, 04:14 AM

I liked it. You have a good flow going. I thought there was a good use of imagery in the piece and it was very enjoyable to read. I found your first and last stanza's to be the best.