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Old 12-18-2004, 12:01 PM   #16
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Exhibitionism Exhibitionism is a common problem. Roughly 35 percent of all sexual arrests are for "flashing." Exhibitionists are typically male and married, and most come from strict and repressive backgrounds. Exhibionists have the highest repeat rate among sexual offenders. Most of them feel a deep sense of inadequacy, which produces a complusive need to prove their "man-hood" by frightening women. Although exhibitionists are usually harmless, those who approach closer than arm's reach may be dangerous (Sue et al., 1996). In general, a woman confronted by an exhibitionist can assume that his goal is to shock and alarm her. By becoming visibly upset, she actually encourages him (Hyde, 1996).

Quoted from Dennis Coon Introduction to Psychology Gateways to the Mind and Behavior Ninth Edition
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Old 12-18-2004, 05:37 PM   #17
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All I'm sayin' is, should any pasty-ass flasher approach me, I'd make him cry and then tell his mama about it.
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Old 12-18-2004, 05:59 PM   #18
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Or you could have him flash a witch in the park, she turns him to stone, and he's then a statue that has to listen to other people's remarks for the next decade before the spell breaks, and people come by and hang their coats on his "you-know-what," and maybe their purses too. How would he feel about that? And then there's the issues of pidgeons. What about pidgeons?

Yeah, I know. Too much Pepsi today. Perhaps I should rest.
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Old 12-19-2004, 10:02 AM   #19
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Or you could have him flash a witch in the park, she turns him to stone, and he's then a statue that has to listen to other people's remarks for the next decade before the spell breaks, and people come by and hang their coats on his "you-know-what," and maybe their purses too. How would he feel about that? And then there's the issues of pidgeons. What about pidgeons?

Yeah, I know. Too much Pepsi today. Perhaps I should rest.
Yes I really think you should rest....but thanks for your reply.

I loove drawing, and even by my worst stories I make drawings. So I've made a few drawing of this story. I'm very bad at anatomy and all but they are just sketches. I hope you like them although they look kinda cheap. I hope I didn't copy something from other stories without knowing. That happened a lot to me with my other stories. It's so frustrating XD

http://www.clubs.nl/ClubsData/278288...tifulgirl2.jpg
The guy (I haven't given him a name yet) gazing at the beautiful girl. Oh, his feet XD soooo ugly but I can't draw feet. And his legs are of course wqay too short *sighs*
http://www.clubs.nl/ClubsData/278288...masfuture2.jpg
The ghost of Christmas future
http://www.clubs.nl/ClubsData/278288/incoming/lucky.jpg
Lucky the choir mistress. But I'm not satisfied with this. She needs more make-up, better clothes and....a better expression I will re-draw this soon.
http://www.clubs.nl/ClubsData/278288...ing/Nuns12.jpg
Nuns. They are the only nuns remained in the church because there are not many believing people in the city anymore. But the right one is also a hooker. The left one has short hair (you can't see that).
http://www.clubs.nl/ClubsData/278288...andBroken2.jpg
This showed the Ghost of Christmas future to the guy.
http://www.clubs.nl/ClubsData/278288...ughsketch2.jpg
Rough sketch of a hooker.
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Old 12-22-2004, 06:38 PM   #20
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okay listen xxxfairy.

Is this man a derelict, is he depressed, sick, mentally or physically?

If so, capture the essence of his character through representing his feelings whether it is written in third or first person. AND DO THIS IN THE BEGINNING. If you read many great literary accomplishments they all begin with something powerful a BANG! Establishing the character properly will not only be a BANG but will lead the reader into the story better.

You can do this by either writing something negative regarding the character or something controversial/negative regarding the character.

keep workin' with it you can get it

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Old 12-22-2004, 06:54 PM   #21
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Oh yeah naughty stuff is always captivating
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Old 12-22-2004, 08:38 PM   #22
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Old 12-22-2004, 10:28 PM   #23
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i sort of disagree with the whole 'oh look a girl i want to know so i will shape up' thing.


im writing a story that has a guy shape up without a love interest. he has alot of help, but i hate the cliched shaping up for love thing.


maybe he doesnt even have to shape up. that would be interesting. maybe he, like, ends up saving someones life, but just goes on his way and stays a flasher and a porn addict. it would challenge the reader to think differently about him.





(I just really wanted to put smurfs in here.)
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Old 12-23-2004, 01:14 AM   #24
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Or you could have him flash a witch in the park, she turns him to stone, and he's then a statue that has to listen to other people's remarks for the next decade before the spell breaks, and people come by and hang their coats on his "you-know-what," and maybe their purses too.
I actually like that idea!

I think this storyline is interesting but there really does have to be more to it, something big has to happen.

I think flashing can either be an act of aggression or just feeling good about doing it and then feeling guilty after, depending on the mind set of the flasher. However, there is a link between aggression and sex in men...

Finally I don't think there needs to be sex in a story to make it good. Though the author John Marsden says that in writing and in our culture that every relationship has a sexual element and I believe that, this element doesn't necessarily have to be sex itself. There are a few scenes in my novel in which could lead into sex but they don't, and what I do write in those scenes only gives indications. I think sex can be written tastefully and on varying levels of graphically, if written at all.
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Old 01-01-2006, 04:21 AM   #25
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Disagree completely. Addiction is just the necessity of body or mind to do something again. Like you said, Drugs is the foremost medium associated with drugs, but you can be addicted to anything, and not all addiction is detrimental to a persons mental or physical health. I find it quite believable that the word, addicted, was chosen to describe his public indecency.



That's hard to say, sometimes problems work themselves on their own, such as this BiPolar Disorder you speak of, very few adults have it, but the occurence in teens is quite high. Sometimes all it takes is the will to understand what is wrong with your brain's chemical processes to begin to correct them. This enlightenment could be from simply wanting to be intimate with this girl, but knowing that his current actions are degenerative to a relationship.



For what it's worth, BiPolar disorder is not an effect of some other traumatic event. You may have yourself confused with multiple personality syndrome, but I don't think so. BiPolar disorder is a physical imbalance of the brain, while exhibitionism is almost always psychologically routed. Anyways, it may do the story well to delve into his past and find out if his mother abused him and that's why he feels the need to express his sexuality in non-healthy ways, but I don't think that's important for this story, what we want to see is him come to terms with his social deviance and attempt to correct it for selfish reasons(ie the girl or making himself happier in the future.)

In the future, please abstain from applying your Psych 101 logic to paraphilia.

LiberalDem, getting back to the flashing as a Sexual Agression, exhibitionists are surprisingly non-violent. Where their actions are most dangerous is in the age of children that they choose to expose themselves to, and the resulting trauma that may ensue. Oddly the best thing to do if confronted by a flasher is to ignore them, and the worst thing to do is laugh or express ridicule. Studies show that men convicted of Exhibitionism are more likely to commit non-sexual crimes than sexual ones, only 10-12% will escalate their behaviors to worser sex-crimes. For the most part, it is an outlet for antisocial behavior with no intent to harm the other party involved.
Sorry but saying that bipolar is more common in teens than adults is just plain incorrect. Also saying bipolar isn't the result of trauma is also wrong. Bipolar disorder can definitely be triggered by traumatic events. Maybe the person was predisposed to it and the trauma triggered an initial mood episode but trauma CAN definitely play a role.

Not to nitpick I just think there are a loooooot of misconceptions out there about bipolar disorder and it bothers me as I've suffered from it.

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Old 01-01-2006, 02:47 PM   #26
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Adding on to NoWorries first post in this topic... have the ghost of christmas future come and show him how terrible alien porn is in the future... so he vows off porn.
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