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Gnomeling · 08-13-2004, 12:50 AM

hey all,

it's late at night and i'm just writing down the beginning to a story that i want to get working on...hopeflly a novel type story. It's a fantasy novel set in a more modern type world that has developed as far as steam power. The main character is a young girl named nalea whwo is a brilliant scholar and lives alone, her parents were sentenced to death after her birth for their unlawlful marriage. The begining chapter starts with her in bed writing in her journal when suddenly in the deep of night someone breaks into her home. She is scared for she lives with only her servent in a massive house in the mountains. The person in the house approaches her (atempts to rape) but she is armed and stabs him with a small ornamental dagger that had hung on her rooms wall. She has no idea that there was a second perosn in the house stealing an item of greati importance. Not know what she is to do and how to deal with teh fact that she has killed someone, she departs in the night and heads to Northern University where she studies. she starts a life there and all that and finds a bunch of stuff out and gets involved in a huge scheme that she should never have been a part of but is as a result of her parents as she learns later...so this is all i had the energy to write but tell me what you think anyway, i'll ost more when i get it written tomorrow. As you can prolly tell the theme is going to be based very much around choice, and love, though choice is the only thing i introduced thus far. ANY COMMENTS are apreciated...although right now there isn't much to go by. Thanks a lot.

later

~ Nalea ~
CHAPTER I

July 17, 1354

Choice. That was the subject that professor Maran chose to lecture us on today in class. The tell tale question of how our individual choices, no matter how big or small, shape not only us but also any living thing that we may ever come close to. He told us that we are constantly making choices in our lives, every minute of every day we are making a choice. Whether it is as small as deciding whether or not to finish your scripture assignment or as large as deciding to go out on your own, it is still a choice that you make, that will affect you and many others around you. By the half-way point of his lecture already half the class had either left the school hall or had fallen asleep, face first on their parchment, but I on the other hand, along with a few others sat in the front pew, intensely listening to professor Maran’s words. It was in my opinion the single most interesting discussion we have had in the first semester. When you take such a simple thing as choice, and look at it in a far broader spectrum, a new dimension can be found in our search for why we are truly here. I learned a lot today, far more than I had expected to learn on a Monday morning in my usually monotonous philosophy course. I can’t imagine…

There was a sudden loud crash of a pan hitting the stone kitchen floor that echoed through the empty hallways of the house. Nalea stopped her pen in the middle of the sentence, creating an unsightly ink splotch on the page, and set her journal down on her bed, her heart had skipped a beat and now raced at twice its normal speed. At her feet Talen, her beautiful white wolf, sat on her haunches, quietly growling in the direction of her bedroom door. Her teeth were barred and the silk smooth hairs on her back stood on end.
The silence that followed the crash was just as discomforting as the noise had been itself. The cold of the night was far more pronounced and every small and insignificant sound became a matter of concern, causing Nalea to stir in her bed. Her room was lit solely by a small wax candle on her bedside table that flickered in the breeze and cast dancing shadows upon the stone walls, and in the darkness she could see very little beyond and arms length of reach.

sully474 · 08-13-2004, 01:07 AM

I'm pretty sure that school was male only in 1354, and I'm pretty sure that philosophy was not a medeval times class.

You have a good storyline, seems a bit like Dickens, but I think that you really should change the date of it.

Gnomeling · 08-13-2004, 01:04 PM

LMAO....thanks sully....i feel so stupid for what i'm saying but i DIDN'T even know that theree ever was a such place as Northern University and the date is just a random date picked out of thin air lol...the story doesn't even take place in our world so it's funny that i came up with those things...just seemed logical to call a school up north, norhtern i guess....i will have to change those thanks.

sully474 · 08-13-2004, 09:19 PM

What I found really funny about the first bit of it, is that it is sooooo sismilar to the first chapter of Hard Times by Charles Dickens, he is talking about fact, and not choice, and that is the only major difference. When I first read it, I thought it to be a bit of a spoof on that book, until I re-read the date and all. Have you ever read that book?

Gnomeling · 08-15-2004, 12:34 AM

nope never have read that....the whole bit on choice is just somehting that i kind of thought of a lot sometimes, and the theme was lightly touvched on in both the matrix and spiderman 2, and i thought it would be neat to write a long in depth kind of novel based kind of around that theme
so hopefully it will owrkout..what with the story line and all

caio