i have took peoples advice and i have looked over my work many of times and corrected a few things and have done gramma and so on
i have now done a battle scene in the monastry to my story and i think it sounds quite good i cant see nothing wrong with it
but please correct me if there is thank you....
Henry and Diego walked back to the monastry discusing the fight they just had. When Henry and Diego went back to the monastry Henry Went to his room to go in for an earlys night sleep while Diego went on patrol around the monastry. It was not long befor it was dark and everyone was a sleep in their beds and Diego was up in one of the monastry tower looking at the arear around the monastry like a hawk watching for danger. He often looked at the scraps of unwanted food that was left outside the monastry gates to see if the wolf that comes to eat them would come by. As the hours quickly passed Diego managed to walk around the inside of the monastry a few times befor going back up to the monastry tower. Diego looked at the pile of scraps left for the wolf again and noticed that they was untouched it was unusual because the wolf always came to eat the scraps as he has done for a few years. Diego also noticed that the air also seemed to become cold and an artic wind seemed to be in the air he never felt so cold in his life. All around him it was quiet and not a single sound to be heard for miles, in the monastry the torches that was lit had their flame extuingushed by the cold artic winds in the air and all around the monastry it was dark and Had only the moon being any source of light.
Diego got realy worried and gradually became scared. Diego knew that something was wrong and danger was in the air. So he quickly got down from the monastry tower as fast as he could and ran straight to Henrys room. Diego knew that Henry would be the only one that knew if there was Danger aprocheing. Diego enterd Henrys room makeing loads of noise and slaming the door on his entry.
"Henry........Henry....... Wake up" Diego Shouted.
Henry had just woken up and could only catch part of what Diego was saying.
Hay Diego ..... sounding surprised to see him in his room..... whats wrong said Henry quietly.
I dont know i was wondering if you could tell me that........ tonight dose not seem normal or like any other night.... come take a look said Diego with the sound of fear in his voice.
Henry Rushed as quickly as he could to get his armour on and then he ran outside and towards the monastry tower while still trying to put the other parts of his armour on, and Diego followed behind him slowly towards the tower.When Diego and Henry finaly got to the top of the tower both Diego's and Henry's eyes was fixed on the area in front of them searching everything with their eyes looking for something or anything out of the ordinary. They continued to watch until Henry started to feel a little strange. He fell to his knees in pain and in his head was images of the monastry in flames and a skeleton army killing all the monks and in the background was a evil laugh that went through Henrys heart like a pin prick. Henry stood up slowly and in pain, "
"Ring the bell and tell everyone to equip their self with any weapon they can find quickly" Henry shouted as loud as he could.
"But why whats going on" Shouted Diego. Diego looked very worried and knew that something bad was going to happen.
"Somethings comeing..... something bad and if we are not ready we may loose everybody here as well as this monastry" Shouted Henry
Diego looked at Henry and he knew that he should not argue with Henry right now. Diego ran down the stairs from the monastry tower and towards the bell that was in the middle of the monastry courtyard. Diego rang the bell as fast and as loud as he could to wake everyone up. All around the monastry Monks came out of their rooms to see what was going on and befor any of them could say or do anything they looked up into the sky to see it lit up with fire arrows they was screaming through the air and setting fire to the dry grass in the monastry. all around Diego was sounds of fear monks screaming because they was on fire or monks that was screaming because they was scared
"Everyone get a weapon from the Armoury Quickly" Shouted Diego
Henry was still up in the tower. he saw in front of him a huge army of undead skeletons running towards him scowering the walls like a spider as quickly as they could.
"Diego tell everyone to flee out the back gate in the monastry and head to the hills we cant win this battle" Yelled Henry
As Henry jumped down from the tower hundreds of undead skeletons finaly climed over the top of the walls and jumped down into the monastry courtyard. All the monks could not beleave their eyes when they saw these undead beasts and many monks ran away befor they even Knew what it was they was running away from, the monks faces was as pales as a ghost and they did not know what to do. all around them was screams of people dieing and the screams of fear the noises seemed to strike their hearts like a needle and many monks ran away to the hills because of fear.
Diego and Henry shouted to everyone "flee now......... run as fast as you can"
"Diego go and get Richard and get a horse from the stables and head to the hills now" Said Henry.
Everywhere in the monastry was nothing but carnage the monks had no fighting skills and did not stand a chance against these skeletons. Many of the undead beasts fought like crazy raverging beasts jumping on peoples back as they was running and stabing them as hard as they could. There was only a few monks that put up a fight using gigantic hammers and maces to smash the undead beasts into pices one by one the monks slowley began to die all around the monasrty was the smell of death and the sounds of people dieing everything was on fire and the smoke was so dense that no one could see or breath. Henry was helping a few monks to fight he used his huge two handed sword to smash through the skeletons makeing a cracking sound like many pebles being thrown everywhere. Henry looked around him and knew that what he was doing was hopless there was to many skeletons so he ran as fast as he could heavly panting and toards the stables to get a horse and head for the mountains.
When Henry got to the stables Diego came running towards him with Richard the Monk by his side Henry, Richard and Diego jumped on the closest horse to them and rid to the back of the monastry gate towards the mountains. Behind them was hundreds of Skeletons chaseing after them many jumped onto the monastry walls and began climbing up them so they could catch Diego, Henry and Richard befor they could escape. As they was just about to leave through the back gate Diego got jumped by two skeletons that managed to catch them up
"Diego come on" Shouted Henry
Diego Quickly Reached out for his two swords and as the two skeletons came running towards him they jumped into the air to attack him. Diego quickly ducked out of the way and as they moved past him he raised his swords from the ground and upwards to cut the skeleton in half. the skeleton fell to the floor and befor it could do anything Diego Stamped on its skull so it could not do anything. Henry came chargeing behind Diego useing his sword as a lance. he raised his sword up high above his head and braught it down with a tremendus blow to the skeleton's skull makeing it explode. Diego quickly wistled to get his horse to come back to him and when it did he grabed hold of the rains and used them to swoop up onto the horse. Diego, Henry and Richard all rode as fast as they could not thinking about anything but to get to safety while behind them the undead skeletons was still smashing everyhting in sight killing everyone left behind burning everything thats in sight.
When Henry, Diego and Richard was far enough away from the monastry they stoped on top of a high hill with a good view of the monastry from a distance. They all looked at each other and inside them all was a feeling of emptyness because they had lost their home and their friends. Not a single word was said on the hill for a long time they all just sat and watched the monastry burn.
"Henry.......What just happend there ............... you knew this was going to happen didnt you......... Didnt you...." Shouted Diego
Angry Scared and Confused Henry Slowly and Quietly Said ".......... They..........They .... was looking for me......... all those people died because they was looking for me...."
"Who was looking for you .......... Who god damit" Diego shouted with an angry voice.
"The Necromancer............. the one that sent all those undead to kill us.... the Necromancer sent all the undead beasts to kill me........ i saw it in my dreams......." said Henry sadly.
Why was he looking for you....... Why was he looking for you" said Diego repeating himself.
"The same old why....... I Dont know why...... all i know is he was looking for me okey...." Shouted Henry Angrily
Richard slowley strode towards Henry, and Diego on his horse and said "When i first picked you up when you was a small boy i felt something strange about you...... i felt as if i was young again and full of life.... i dont know what it was but..... maybe hes after you because you have a gift that he wants..... or maybe to get rid of...."
"What gift is this you speak of..?" said Henry sounding intrested
"I Dont know what it is but maybe in time you might find out your self...... now you know what would be a good idear is if we headed to the city befor those undead beasts try to follow us at least we will be safe in the city" said Richard Ergeing them on.
Henry, Richard and Diego all hurried as fast as they could through many forests and many long open fields and across the farm lands. It wasnt long befor the sun came up that they all finaly arrived near the city and they felt as if something heavy had just lifeted of their shoulders and they quickly as they could rid towards the City gates so they could go in and maybe get some rest at a local inn. There was a Gaurd standing at the main city gate he looked tough and a mean man that had the look of a savage beast and it looked like no stranger would ever get in without permission or a good reason.
"Hult........Standing in front of the gate with his Halberd in his arms making shure they did not get past.......Where do you think your going"
"We have come to the city from the old monastry so we could get some rest and maybe a few supplys" Said Diego
"Well off you go then and dont cause no trouble now or we will chuck you in the prision cells like all the other dogs quicker than you could say it wasnt me" shouted the guard with a untrusting voice.
Diego, Henry and Richard tied their horses outside a local inn so they could get some rest befor going anywhere. The inn was very loud with the sound of many drunk people and the sounds of people singing to songs and the smell of old swet, smoke and beer was in the air.
"I love the smell of beer in the morning dont you" said Diego with a big smile on his face.
They all walked into the inn and looked around at everybody befor finding a table to sit at.
"Diego go find the man in charge and ask how much it is to stay here" commanded Henry.
Diego got up from the table and tried to find the perosn who owned the inn dogeing in and out of the way of danceing people and old drunken men walking about.
"Exuse me sir you dont happen to own this place do you" Yelled Diago because of the loud noise in the inn
"Why yes i do sir what do you want" Said the inn keeper
"I Would like to rent a room for the night if you dont mind" said Diago
"Not a problem that would be fifty gold thank you" Said the inn keeper
Diago grabed a small old bag that was on his waist and pulled the strings to open it up he made shure he had the correct amount of gold befor giveing it to the inn keeper.
"Here you go fifty gold" said Diago
"Thank you heres the key the room number is 6 go up stairs and to your right" said the inkeeper.
Although I was none too impressed with your little ranting in other threads, it is nice that you took everybody's advice on board and applied it to your work. 
